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For My Bloody Valentine Poetry Contest sponsored by Brian Strand

The night I met you, I was deeply afraid, terrified, my nerves were badly frayed. I pulled you from the party crowd. My confidence, you allowed. I cried to you. I wasn't proud. We both had too much wine, my bloody valentine. I knew that your feelings were sincere. Soon, you would always be near. Your gentle understanding showed. To your charms, you gave the code. Your love, to me, bestowed, I gobbled it like a swine, my bloody valentine. Thinking too much of myself, I was. What I could offer you wasn't love. It was a deplorable crime, I can't wash off this guilty grime. I should be doing time, burning in a hellish brine, my bloody valentine. I'm haunted every Valentine's Day, a lifetime sentence I have to pay. There is every reason for your hate. It's less than forgiveness I await. Take my conscience off your dinner plate, as your ghost does me, malign, my bloody valentine.

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Date: 2/11/2025 9:09:00 PM
Vividly descriptive, emotional piece, David~~Excellent. Janice
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David Crandall
Date: 2/11/2025 9:41:00 PM
Thanks Janice!
Date: 2/8/2025 8:57:00 PM
This is applicable to many who ill treat their partners. "I gobbled it like a swine, my bloody valentine."... Glad, he has some regret about his action. An interesting poem, dear David.
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David Crandall
Date: 2/8/2025 9:31:00 PM
Thank you Valsa!
Date: 2/8/2025 4:10:00 AM
Very catching title. "We both had too much wine, my bloody valentine.", "I gobbled it like a swine, my bloody valentine.", "burning in a hellish brine, my bloody valentine.", "as your ghost does me, malign, my bloody valentine." - A very grand poem.
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David Crandall
Date: 2/8/2025 8:06:00 AM
Thanks Alex! I have to admit I can't take credit for the title, though. It was the prompt in the contest.
Date: 2/7/2025 10:19:00 PM
Life's reality nicely penned.
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David Crandall
Date: 2/8/2025 8:06:00 AM
Thank Akham!
Date: 2/7/2025 7:20:00 PM
This poem is a fine entertainment. I love the rhyme and the story. Your way of adding a twist shows unique creativity.
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David Crandall
Date: 2/7/2025 7:29:00 PM
Thanks so much, Hilda!

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