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Murphy's Law In Autumn (Part 2)

He was found that morning, the peace of the day was shattered Before the day had begun. That call raped my virgin heart from its’ happy emotions. Leaving behind an emotional scar. As I walked down the church isle, I knew in my broken heart this would be the last time I’d see him. What a memory to have the rest of my life. The reality of not being able to laugh and have fun set in, Even the walls, ceilings, and floors mourned. They were used to hearing us laugh casting echoes of laughter. Now they were quiet like the rest of us. The sound of clinking silverware and sniffling was the only sound heard that holiday season. When I visit my aunt, the living room’s quiet, The sound of the ticking clocks break the awkward silence every time. If it weren’t for the clocks, I’d go insane. This is a walk I don’t want to remember but always will. Seeing my uncle regret that bargain. One never knows the events that’ll transpire, in reality it wasn’t the bargain. He would’ve used whatever, it just happened to be that extension cord. But that’s the weight of my uncle’s unhappiness, it wasn’t my aunt getting onto him that day, Nor the officer that gave him a ticket, nor the fight his girlfriend picked that night. It wasn’t his brothers fault either For not lending him some money nor mine for not spending the night and everything else. What if’s replaced our joy. “What if I’d stayed, would he have done that ?” When a pebble’s cast into water, it doesn’t cast a one sided ripple casts ripples in every direction. I guess that’s why we all blame ourselves. When we walk into the living room it’s not his pictures that reminds us of what we lost, it’s that new piece of sheetrock that’s brighter than the others. I guess my uncles regret never gave him the motivation to finish the ceiling. ______________________________ Written in the perspective of a friend

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 11/30/2009 10:18:00 AM
Your ending of story isnt what i was hoping , very sad ending,goes well with autumn,it gave me a lump in my troath..very deep indeed Raul,,and i can see its written in the perspective of a friend,still this is sad to whom ever it happens..heartfelt indeed,dont know how i missed it before. im home cos i have flu ,not swine flu:)luckily..and i have free time to enjoy reading my friends..deep story indeed--Charma
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Date: 10/12/2009 9:46:00 PM
thank you for sharing such a personal experience Raul my thoughts and prayers will go out to this family!!!!!
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Date: 10/12/2009 12:27:00 PM
Excellent Narrative Raul, thank you for sharing this heartfelt piece >> James
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Date: 10/11/2009 3:56:00 PM
Powerful profound emotional writting, dear Raul. When we loss someone we love, somehow we always manage to put some blame on ourselves. If only I had - If only I had. Thank you for sharing. Love, lainie
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Date: 10/11/2009 2:00:00 AM
Raul, Your pain and the love you had for your uncle are plain to see. Well written and heartbreaking. My condolences on your loss. God Bless, Will
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Date: 10/10/2009 3:07:00 PM
Wow...this part II is shattering! The way you have put such a tragedy into words..and the "what if's" that we have all said in similar circumstance when a sudden moment of horror happens. This compelling story must be true to feel so raw. We can find fault in ourselves, or circumstance if we look too hard. Great writing, Raul. ~ Wow...
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Date: 10/10/2009 2:29:00 PM
What a tragedy...I feel for you. My dad died of natural causes in June and I'm dredding the holidays...I enjoyed reading and at the same time am sad... Thanks for sharing...Marty
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Date: 10/10/2009 1:49:00 PM
Hmmmmmmm soup mail Light & Love
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Date: 10/10/2009 11:34:00 AM
Man, the sequel was full of great word-play.....:JP]
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Date: 10/10/2009 11:13:00 AM
I not sure what is meant. Sucide? Keep writing. Sara
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Date: 10/10/2009 11:03:00 AM
Thanks Raul, this part as amazing as the first part, Thanks for sharing. God bless, Sincerely Moses
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Date: 10/10/2009 10:39:00 AM
Yes, those stones have quite a "ripple" effect on everyone. My stepbrother's son killed himself after his girlfriend broke up with him. I've never seen his poor mother smile since. What a terrible tragedy you have revealed and the young man who died probably never even considered how it would impact his family. Heartfelt and compelling write, Raul! Love, Carolyn
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