Murder Most Foul

“I think the lemonade was poisoned, Sir,
he’s been murdered!” Watkins said
“I can see no other reasoning
for why the victim is lying here, dead.”

“Let’s not jump to hasty conclusions,”
Detective Inspector Bones, replied
“There’s protocol we have to follow
before we establish how he died.”

“So get on with it, my young Watkins
you know what you have to do.”
Watkins nodded, then put on his gloves
And went off, in search of a clue

The Inspector, a man revered by his peers
For his keen, analytical mind
Bent down, to examine the body
To see what evidence he could find

There were no obvious signs of trauma
No lumps, or bumps on the head
No bullet hole, knife wound, marks on the neck,
Nothing to say why the man was dead

“You can take him now,” the Inspector called
To the men, suited up, from the lab,
“Perhaps we’ll learn more from the Coroner,
once he gets him on his slab.”

Watkins returned, “I can’t find anything, Sir,
it seems our victim was here all alone
there’s no sign to say he had a visitor,
or intruder within his home.”

“Everything’s locked from the inside,”
He continued, a frown on his face
“If someone was here, they’ve been clever,
getting out without leaving a trace.”

The Inspector picked up the lemonade glass
Its smell gave him a vital clue,
“You’re right Watkins, the man was murdered
and I say the murderer, was YOU!”

“While I was here, examining the body
it gave you the opportune time,
to go around the house without hindrance
and remove all trace of your crime.”

“But you can’t put one over on this old dog,
I’ve seen it all in my day,”
He turned to the uniforms, by the door
“This is our killer boys – take him away!”

©  Janette Fisher 06.04.10

This was written as a homework assignment for my writing group from last night - we were 
given 'I think the lemonade was poisoned' and this is what I came up with.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 4/9/2010 9:21:00 AM
Janette, every so often we find GEMS on this wonderful site. Today i have found one of those GEMS. Its cleverly thought out, presented and the story line in just koolio. And it's heading to my favs >> James
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Date: 4/7/2010 6:02:00 AM
Vwery creative! Well done! Janette. Lainie
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Date: 4/6/2010 11:10:00 PM
A fine narrative and something good for assignment
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Date: 4/6/2010 7:44:00 AM
Very clever indeed, Janette. I'm sorry I was unable to call you overseas on my phone plan, but it looks like you are staying active, writing poetry and doing a bit better now. There will be ups and downs as I said in my email, but I'm glad you're part of a writing group that can offer support and inspiration. My prayers for you continue. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/6/2010 5:36:00 AM
Clever and well written detective story...Great rhyme and rhythm...Keep the creative pen flowing. Sara
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