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Written for the contest " swimming in grief" sponsored by Sara Jama

Mourning Myrtles

My moon,
w i t h o u t your delicate fingers
stroking the claustrophobic chambers
of this nocturnal heart,
I search for macabre metaphors
to feed the midnight monsters
lurking in the cold crevices of darkness,
like enemies befriending my suppressed trauma,
masking infernal intentions
with serpentine allure
and diamond daggers,
playing tricks on the soul of twilight.
As in your absence,
I am l o s t, like a muse without a rhyme,
battling tomb-tides,
ferrying the faceless phantoms of the past,
luring the weary winds
to follow the cursed currents,
as if I have no voice~
but would they know,
I carve these words with ashes and tears,
merged with memories
that never fade,
amidst the Luna that found
its wintry magic
in the warmth of ephemeral auroras,
oblivious to the fragranced flame
of undying romance,
kissing the skin of the Stygian skyline,
an ambiance etched
with doomed dahlias
and spectral lilies…

Tonight, feel me in silence,
     from afar,
dulcet desires entwined amidst
            this distant devotion.
Love me, as I ache for
 the scripted solace within the crestfallen crystals 
           of your eclipsed spheres... 
I thread orchids with syllables of smoke,
  swimming in grief through Aphrodite's
                 lakes of swans 
   engraved with agony and  pain 
                 as moonlight wanes~ 
  swallowing mourning myrtles 
                            of   b u r n i n g  love...
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Beaufort Avatar
March 30, 2025 at 9:49 AM
IE, you describe so well the condition some of us face when things start to go downhill just a bit (or a lot). Then, the demons and doubts we have start surfacing as grief and self doubt that's very hard to suppress. My own philosophy is that we need to love ourselves and appreciate who we are first and foremost. Not an easy thing to do if we didn't start off on the right footing or learned to be dependent. I have the utmost respect for those who can overcome it somehow as opposed to those with a silver spoon in mouth. This is such a thought provoking piece. Really like what you're doing with words here! It provides a real emotional boost and confirmation of the importance of genuine self-love. Smiles!
Jama Avatar
March 27, 2025 at 10:49 AM
Thank you for writing on my prompt. Congratulations on placing. Your write is gorgeous. I can feel the grief and longing in your poem. Your use of metaphors amplifies the feelings brilliantly. Another amazing write.
Lane Avatar
March 27, 2025 at 3:37 AM
Your lines really do swim in grief, and as much as the moon tries to easy your grief, I'm afraid, dear Ink... you'll have to share lovely Luna with the rest of us who shed rivers of tears with our memories.
Allison Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 2:40 PM
wow ink you have such a unique style i love your word pairings and use of alliteration, my favourite lines are "Love me, as I ache for the scripted solace within the crestfallen crystals of your eclipsed spheres... I thread orchids with syllables of smoke, swimming in grief through Aphrodite's lakes of swans engraved with agony and pain as moonlight wanes~ swallowing mourning myrtles of b u r n i n g love... it certainly packs a punch! hugs jan xx
Read Avatar
March 25, 2025 at 12:29 PM
Hi Ink, you certainly have a way with words, sure to do well in the contest, God bless.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 8:43 AM
Thank you so much dear john always for being kind
DiMino Avatar
March 24, 2025 at 7:39 PM
"I thread orchids with syllables of smoke, swimming in grief through Aphrodite's lakes of swans engraved with agony and pain as moonlight wanes~ swallowing mourning myrtles of b u r n i n g love..." -- Very beautiful imagery. Original, a poetic joy to read.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 8:50 AM
Thank you so very much dear Joe for your kind compliments and also for your visit. Always appreciate your support
Crandall Avatar
March 24, 2025 at 3:03 PM
Another masterpiece! I especially like the dark descriptions of insidious malevolence: feeding the midnight monsters...lurking...enemies befriending suppressed trauma...serpentine allure...diamond daggers...playing tricks on the soul of twilight.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 9:08 AM
Thank you so much thats a massive compliment to receive “ masterpiece” on my poem, i am truly grateful always for your kind support
Ashley Avatar
March 23, 2025 at 10:58 AM
Dear Ink, soulful poetess, I am stunned by the dark depths and richness of the imagery, metaphors and symbolism used to compose your exquisite poem, intricately weaving themes of loss, grief, longing for your beloved, a love remembered. I'm mesmerized by how you transform pain and despair into masterworks of poignant beauty. Congratulations for your success in Sara's contest. Could you please soup mail me as to why our places were switched (as you said below to Andrea) I am unaware of what's happened. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 9:09 AM
Dear Susan , poetic soul, thank you so much for your kind and detailed feedback im truly grateful for your support always, and a pleasure to hear from you. Sending you light always
Guptar Avatar
March 23, 2025 at 8:33 AM
Heartiest congratulations, dear poetess, on your high placement in this poetry contest with an awesome poem. You have the gift of raising poetry to such a pitch, with your free verse flowing like a river of pearls. Selecting some lines to highlight would not do justice to you, so much all of them flow fluently. Stay blessed.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 9:11 AM
Thank you so much for your kind and generous comment im always grateful for your kind support. Means alot really
Sands Avatar
March 23, 2025 at 8:19 AM
Excellent. Well written. I enjoyed this :)
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 9:14 AM
Awn thank you so much dear heidi. Grateful always
Mcintosh Avatar
March 23, 2025 at 12:02 AM
Beautifully done. Congratulations and God bless you, much love, Gina
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 9:21 AM
Such a pleasure hearing from you thank you so much dear Sweet Gina
George Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 11:57 PM
"but would they know, I carve these words with ashes and tears, merged with memories that never fade," It has sunk deep into my heart! I feel intensely the longing that lingers in you like the final flicker of a candle that once burnt so bright. But now what remains is the ashes of burnt dreams and tears. So touching. This striking elegy of the soul is rightly acknowledged with the award of a trophy. Hearty Congratulations, sweet friend.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 9:50 AM
Always grateful for your kindness sweet valsa thank you so much truly
Dietrich Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 11:52 PM
That burning love st the end was fire, Ink! Gosh you are on a trophy roll, so congrats to you and also in Roberts contest. You are queen of alliterative metaphors. I just don't know how you do it.
Empress Avatar
March 23, 2025 at 8:09 AM
Sweet andrea i didnt feel comfortable winning trophy , and i think susan deserved it better. So i asked sara to swap me now. As she said its a tie. And also i need to email you soon, will talk soon. Thank you for your support always
Singh Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 11:40 PM
Deep emotional turmoil using vivid metaphors to convey the complexity of love intertwined with grieve and longing very nicely penned and reflected in the poem Wish the best
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:01 AM
Thank you so much for your well wishes and your comment. Grateful for your support always
Liguori Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 9:42 PM
Congratulations on your win. Very nice poem.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:02 AM
Thank you so much dear robert, appreciate your kind support truly
Sinha-Roy Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 9:05 PM
Great win with a great poem. Congratulations.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:02 AM
Thank you so much deae SSR, appreciate your comment
Bordner Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 6:35 PM
"battling tomb tides..." Through love's honesty we can justify our pain, and the art of our journey Poetess...J.A.B.
Poet Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 1:02 PM
Dearest Ink, Your outstanding verse delves into themes of longing, love, loss, and the intricate interplay of memory and desire. The moon represents the tremendous emotional anguish felt in the absence of a cherished individual. You express a need for connection amid the darkness of loss and suffering, implying that love may both illuminate and haunt the heart. The artwork inspires both sorrow and beauty, merging nature with personal feeling. You use rich, evocative language to produce vivid pictures and emotional depth. Words such as "claustrophobic," "macabre," "serpentine allure," and "Stygian skyline" convey a feeling of gloom and intricacy. Best wishes and many positive energies.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:18 AM
Thank you so much for your detailed and kind feedback as always, truly grateful
Godwin Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 10:15 AM
Battling tomb tides, those words could not have hit me any harder, resonating and summarizing my karma's delivery of life lessons. I think you gifted me those words for lifelong speak and feel. The entire poem, as always, is loaded with incredible imagery that never once bogged me down, causing me to lose focus. Really enjoyed and enjoyed really, I did - it's true! CayCay
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:19 AM
Your comment made me smile awn thank you so much poetic soul i appreciate your kindness truly
Hind Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 8:57 AM
So lovely, even in the heartache. A poem that shows your true talents, loveeely <3
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:20 AM
Awwn thank you dear paige
Rhymes Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 5:00 AM
My mooon …. I need to send this to my “mooon”
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:33 AM
Did you send it, well it might be a bit too heavy for your moon lol
Gifford Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 4:33 AM
Hello IE, beautifully written, I feel the sadness in your words, as I am grieving at this moment. Wishing you the very best in the contest. Have a lovely weekend, my friend.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:34 AM
Awn im so sorry that you are grieving at the moment. I hope you are ok. I appreciate you feeling the sadness within this; thank you so much
One Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 4:30 AM
I can see you are swimming with grief in your poem.. the thing about the moon is that so many adored it and it never really belongs to an individual, but I understand your metaphor.. It is hard when the one we adore and love no longer illuminates for us anymore... Love really hurts and there is no pain like it.. I hope you can find a way to rid of those midnight monsters as that is the last thing you need when you are grieving... Great poem for the contest, all the best - peace and blessings
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:35 AM
Thank you so much for the very kind and thoughtful comment, grateful for your support and blessings and for your understanding of the poem.
Buhagiar Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 3:35 AM
I have a new computer and it's driving me crazy. I wrote you a message it simply disappeared. The first two months of the year are littered with sad memories. Macabre as you call them. I feel too depressed. I fight myself not to delete everything. Hope you are feeling well.
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:43 AM
I hope your computer is ok now. So sorry to hear about that. I am doing well, thank you always for your kind support
Rolland Avatar
March 22, 2025 at 3:28 AM
so deep and dark, but extremely beautiful, thanks poet for the emotion
Empress Avatar
March 26, 2025 at 10:43 AM
Thank you always for your support
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