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Mountain Spring



Water pure and clear
From a mountain spring tumbles
Wearing smooth its path
Pooling in the rocky cup
The doe dips her head to drink

 

For the Wow Me in 5 Lines contest...

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Carol Sunshine Brown

April 26, 2011 at 8:11 AM

Congratulations on your win Barbara in Francine's contest. Love, Carol

Jack Horne

April 24, 2011 at 8:46 AM

many congrats : )

Gautami Phookan

April 24, 2011 at 8:42 AM

Congrats Barbara on your win, a lovely piece here,enjoyed it,LOve,gautami

Carrie Richards

April 24, 2011 at 8:13 AM

LOVE this one!! (I would have placed higher).....such a wonderful image it leaves in my mind. Have a wonderful Easter, Barbara!

Andrea Dietrich

April 24, 2011 at 12:13 AM

I remember this was one of my favorites of all.Congatulatons,Barbara.

John Freeman

April 23, 2011 at 9:50 PM

Great to see you in the winner's circle Barbara. Congratulations on your honored place. Agape, Moses

Joyce Johnson

April 23, 2011 at 7:25 PM

Very pretty scene you have painted. Congratulations on your top ten. Love, Joyce

Wilma Neels

April 23, 2011 at 6:49 PM

Wow a real beauty BG, love the images.. Congratulations to you ;)

Francine Roberts

April 23, 2011 at 6:23 PM

beautiful tanka Barbara, congrats on your 9th place win in the Wow Me contest

Poet Destroyer A

April 21, 2011 at 7:33 PM

wow! good luck,,p.d.

Constance La France

April 21, 2011 at 9:04 AM

This poem is enchanting and entrancing!I love it, so best of luck in the contest and thanks for your ever lovely comments on my poetry~~

Andrea Dietrich

April 20, 2011 at 11:53 PM

I really love this one, Barbara!! You found the perfect way to describe a pure spring by using tanka form!

Carolyn Devonshire

April 20, 2011 at 9:49 AM

Where is this pristine environment? I want to move there, dear LNC. What a sight this must be to behold. Beautiful description of the mountain spring and I love envisioning the doe drinking from it. I'm catching fish. Will send you a photo. Now I can't write about anything but fish. Ah, the bliss of this addiction. Sending you winning wishes for the contest. Love, Carolyn