Mount Zion

Once upon a time, my life was on track
Moving onward, achieving all my goals
Revered by my peers, their pats on my back
They praised my advice and said it was gold

Its was nice that they cared enough to call me
They would say "Mitch, I'm glad you changed that"
I'd reply "anything for the company"
Followed by dreaded small talk and chit chat

Then the day my mom called, my world just caved
My brother was sick, in the intensive care
San Diego was three thousand miles away
Hell or high water, I was going to get there

I quit my job just before a promotion
The CEO offered me a big raise
I declined and his eyes filled with emotion
He knew my brother was in his last days

When I arrived he could barely see
His doctor said AIDS in the last stage
Talked about girls and Yosemite
He wanted out of his room, his cage

I wheel chaired him on out to the parking lot
To see my new truck and so he could smoke
He quoted a scripture I never forgot
His blind eyes pure gray as he took a toke

It was about the Mount Zion in our home town
He had found God, which explained his calm
I said "that is great" as his smoke hit the ground
He started my journey, I found it in Psalms


By the rivers of Babylon
where we sat down
yea, we wept,
when we remembered Zion

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010



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Date: 4/12/2010 2:18:00 PM
Wow, intense and powerful. Impressive and deeply moving.
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Date: 4/11/2010 8:32:00 PM
What a great poem, I really enjoyed you sharing your moment with your brother, stay blessed and keep sharing!! one-
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Date: 4/7/2010 2:24:00 PM
Sad heartfelt poem dedicated to your brother Mitch >> James
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Date: 3/31/2010 9:32:00 AM
Oh, this one is personal and moving. I'm sorry. There are prayers to be said and memories to be nourished. Regards, Gerard. P.S. John Cash. Do you want a parody of the song or a description of him on stage a la Morrison? Let me know. My condolences to you all. Gerard.
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Date: 3/29/2010 4:26:00 PM
Hey Mitch, This is a great tribute to your brother. It was good you were there for him, you know? This is also to say thnx for reading some of my pieces and posting those encouraging comments for me...I've asked Audrey to post these comments for me....Jimmy Mitch, I did not get your e-mail which u sent for Jimmy..is it possible to re-send it? andersonjimmy19@yahoo.com...Thanks a lot Mitch...Audrey
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Date: 3/29/2010 8:16:00 AM
How sad, but a great poem to remember your brother!!! I lost my sister and I never got to say good bye!!! I know very well but she was still my sister! I miss her!!! Great job Mitch!!! Keep writing!! I can't wait to read more of your poems!!! -Courtney-
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Date: 3/29/2010 7:36:00 AM
A very moving well written and engaging poem Mitch and my condolenses for your loss. By the way, thank you for all your recent comments on my own stuff. I like to thank people, but never know where to do it on this site. Take care, Tim
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Date: 3/29/2010 2:44:00 AM
What a wonderful write and tribute to your brother. From one who was taught from an early age to control their emotions this one almost made me weep, and that is an accomplishment my firend.
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Date: 3/28/2010 11:11:00 PM
THis is a very heartfelt poem and a great write about your dear brother. What a way for him to end his life, remembering this profound scriputure. You did him justice with this memory. LUv, Andrea ps whatever happened with that job?
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Date: 3/28/2010 4:35:00 PM
Mitch, this poem is so real, I felt every emotion, every tear, you bring the reader on the journey with you, now let me brush a tear away, dear heart, I think something else is in order... so write me a poem on intelligence .. and also thanks so much for your comment on my poem Shattered.... love Constance
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Date: 3/28/2010 11:15:00 AM
Mitch - That is a very sad tale - I am so sorry for your loss - Expressed with compassion - Thankyou for sharing -:)
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Date: 3/28/2010 10:51:00 AM
very sad poem, sorry for your loss, and glad you found zion.
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