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Moonstruck Maiden

What beauty reflected in love's fair eyes,
a passion hence to become my treasure.
Stirred to flame, I dost fail to disguise
need in my loins ere want of fine pleasure.

As sweet the music I doth find profound,
tis more honeyed thou lips when touching mine.
Oh! My pained heart shall beckon love resound,
thou moonstruck maiden, unearthly divine.

Silent I shan't be, so near to soft breasts.
This besotted man hath nary more breath.
Grant me thy pure soul, not in mere request,
but let thine tongue speak before my near death.

I beg thee allow the stars remain bright.
Give thyself to me fore the end of night.

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January 9th 2016

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 12/24/2019 8:31:00 PM
Lin, I'm glad to find this poem on Christmas Eve. Rummaging around your thoughts and dreams in write..,perhaps should be more reverent? Anyway, I like these two. Reminds me of Romeo & Juliet. Et il ya la lune bien sûr. Merry Christmas Lin Lane. -Richard
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Date: 2/20/2018 5:30:00 PM
i want to be in love like this, beautiful Lin
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Date: 12/18/2019 6:02:00 PM
Thank you, Lewis. I'm so sorry I didn't see your comment sooner.
Date: 1/4/2017 12:07:00 AM
Absolutely love this. Perfect. Not a single thing to be improved, and like some others I am a big fan of the more archaic language.
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Date: 10/24/2016 8:45:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Lin. I agree w/Carole, the language was exquisite. I love the OE, it is so romantic. I can see why my poem "Lost Love Divined" appealed to you. A similar poem as this, language wise. Love your work as always. Love you, RW.
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Date: 10/25/2016 9:24:00 AM
Thank you, RW. If there were more poets like you on PS I might still be posting more frequently. I don't allude to your wonderful comments, but instead to your eloquent poetry.
Date: 10/4/2016 10:17:00 PM
What a beautiful poem! I love it and the Old English you used.
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Date: 10/6/2016 12:53:00 PM
Thank you very much for liking this one so well, Carole.
Date: 5/7/2016 7:24:00 AM
Gee, quite romantic, with such a mystical flair. Wonderful write, very much enjoyed, congratulations!
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Date: 5/7/2016 8:04:00 AM
Hi Dineen. I'm very pleased that you like it. Thank you.
Date: 5/3/2016 5:46:00 AM
A romantic and colorful piece indeed!! I enjoyed it!! Congrats Lin, for your top placement in the contest!!! ;-)
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Date: 5/7/2016 8:04:00 AM
Hello Teddy, and thanks very much.
Date: 5/3/2016 3:26:00 AM
Very lovely Lin. Congratulations on your top placement. # 7 ; )
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Date: 5/7/2016 8:03:00 AM
Hi, Connie, and thanks so much.
Date: 5/3/2016 2:57:00 AM
Lin, wonderful words, a beautiful dreamy poem. love it! Congrats!
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Date: 5/7/2016 8:03:00 AM
Thank a bunch, Susan.
Date: 5/2/2016 11:00:00 PM
Congrats on a fine win Lin
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Date: 5/7/2016 8:02:00 AM
Thank you, Joseph.
Date: 5/2/2016 9:43:00 PM
Hi Lin, I remember this beautiful poem of yours chosen as POTD, and I am so glad to see it high on the podium in this contest! Congratulations! Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 5/2/2016 10:58:00 PM
Thanks so very much, Sandra. I'm always delighted to read your kind compliments.
Date: 5/2/2016 7:44:00 PM
Lin, a beautiful Fave..well done and congrats on your placement! Have a blessed night lady :)-luloo
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Date: 5/2/2016 10:57:00 PM
Thank you, Ma'am. I've just left a message for you on your placement...well done.
Date: 5/2/2016 7:14:00 PM
Congratulation my lovely friend on your beautiful win. Loved always, bl
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Date: 5/2/2016 10:56:00 PM
Thank you very much, BL. I'm always happy to read your comments.
Date: 3/21/2016 11:49:00 AM
What an incredible sonnet! You should be one of the reasons a world sonnet day should exist. Beautiful! So beautiful
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Date: 3/21/2016 12:38:00 PM
You went way back for this one, Funom. Thank you for doing that and I'm really glad you like it so well.
Date: 1/31/2016 8:21:00 AM
I enjoyed this read. Your rhyme is melodic and your meaning Devine. Thanks for writing this. Tom
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Date: 1/31/2016 8:26:00 AM
Hello, Tom? William? whatever name(s) you choose, I'm delighted that you enjoyed reading this one. Thank you for your sweet comments ;)
Date: 1/14/2016 7:21:00 AM
"tis more honeyed thy lips when touching mine", very nice.Lin T.J.
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Date: 1/14/2016 7:30:00 AM
Thank you very much, Daniel...T.J?
Date: 1/12/2016 9:15:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your POTD honour for this amazingly beautiful sonnet, Lin. T.J
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:34:00 PM
Thanks bunches, T.J
Date: 1/12/2016 9:02:00 AM
Great sonnet, love the form and style. Fantastic choice for POTD, CONGRATS ON THIS WELL DESERVED RECOGNITION MY FRIEND! "Stirred to flame, I dost fail to disguise need in my loins ere want of fine pleasure." ^^^ O' how many times as a young man did I desire to utter those words to my lady love..
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Date: 1/13/2016 4:34:00 PM
Thank you very much, Robert ;)
Date: 1/11/2016 1:02:00 AM
Rich with alluring honesty .. A joy to read
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Date: 1/11/2016 4:13:00 AM
Hello, Lionel. Thank you so very much.
Date: 1/11/2016 12:27:00 AM
Lin congratulations on being featured. A wonderful write.
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Date: 1/11/2016 4:12:00 AM
Thanks very much, Michael, for always making kind comments.
Date: 1/10/2016 7:58:00 PM
Hi Lin, a most wonderful Sonnet indeed and a well deserved POTD for this Sonnet. So gentle, soft, dreamy, just flows from the start to the finish. This gets a seven Lin and it does join the other Sonnets in my faves....Vladislav.
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Date: 1/10/2016 8:22:00 PM
I really appreciate your kindest of compliments. Thank you very much, Vladislav.
Date: 1/10/2016 7:40:00 PM
Congratulations on your poem of the day! :)
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Date: 1/10/2016 7:56:00 PM
Thank you very much, Danetta.
Date: 1/10/2016 6:07:00 PM
Very lovely poem Lin...Congrats on being featured today
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Date: 1/10/2016 6:09:00 PM
That comment jump happens to me too, Tim. Thanks for stopping by for a visit and for your nice comment ;)
Date: 1/10/2016 5:46:00 PM
My favorite
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Date: 1/10/2016 5:51:00 PM
Ahh, your favorite. That is quite a compliment! Thank you so very much, Dean.
Date: 1/10/2016 5:44:00 PM
Beautiful poem an congratulations from from Wicked Romancer Word's overshadoweding intellectual beauty's writing emotions in every word the economy of unique lines your efficiencies in every beautiful line congratulations.
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Date: 1/10/2016 5:50:00 PM
Hello, Terrance, and thank you much for so many compliments. I appreciate your words and visit.
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