Lin Lane Poet Sonnet

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Moonstruck Maiden

What beauty reflected in love's fair eyes,
a passion treasured beyond all measure.
As ardor stirred flames, I failed to disguise
the need in my loins ere want of pleasure.

As sweet the music I discern profound,
tis more honeyed your lips when touching mine.
Oh! My pained heart shall beckon love resound,
my moonstruck maiden, unearthly divine.

Mute, I cannot be, so near your soft breasts.
This besotted man has but scant more breath.
Grant me your pure love, not in mere request,
but with an angelic kiss 'fore my death.

I beg thee allow the stars remain bright.
Give yourself to me ere the end of night.

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January 9th 2016

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Ink Empress May 1, 2025 at 1:24 PM i can never get enough of your romantic poems that emanate such passionate longing and such intense emotions, i can feel the pulse within your poetic words woven here and the cadence and rhythm of how youv phrased every line is so very catchy and so mellifluous! Not many can write sensual in such a graceful manner as you do! You do it in such an elegant manner! I like to read to sleep and your poems are such a gift to the soul of readers, pleasure visiting this one on your best poems! Lin Lane May 2, 2025 at 11:59 AM It gives me such a sense of having accomplished poetry when I read your comments, Ink. Grateful for your time of reading and leaving your gracious thoughts.

Hilda Greenhough October 5, 2023 at 3:46 PM I hope you're not leaving. I have bern csreful, I think, but your situation will ptobably be mine. I definitely write what I think. I hope you have s site to keep writing. I'll follow if I find it Lin Lane October 5, 2023 at 4:48 PM Thank you for liking my poetry, Hilda. I’ve been in and out of PS a couple of times but I’m back to stay.

Quoth Theraven December 24, 2019 at 8:31 PM Lin, I'm glad to find this poem on Christmas Eve. Rummaging around your thoughts and dreams in write..,perhaps should be more reverent? Anyway, I like these two. Reminds me of Romeo & Juliet. Et il ya la lune bien sûr. Merry Christmas Lin Lane. -Richard Lin Lane August 27, 2022 at 10:59 AM Thank you so much, Richard. Apologies for reading this just now.

Lewis Raynes February 20, 2018 at 5:30 PM i want to be in love like this, beautiful Lin Lin Lane December 18, 2019 at 6:02 PM Thank you, Lewis. I'm so sorry I didn't see your comment sooner.

Carolyn Fish January 4, 2017 at 12:07 AM Absolutely love this. Perfect. Not a single thing to be improved, and like some others I am a big fan of the more archaic language. Lin Lane August 27, 2022 at 10:59 AM Thanks, an awful lot, Carolyn.

Freddie Robinson Jr. October 24, 2016 at 8:45 PM Beautiful poem, Lin. I agree w/Carole, the language was exquisite. I love the OE, it is so romantic. I can see why my poem "Lost Love Divined" appealed to you. A similar poem as this, language wise. Love your work as always. Love you, RW. Lin Lane October 25, 2016 at 9:24 AM Thank you, RW. If there were more poets like you on PS I might still be posting more frequently. I don't allude to your wonderful comments, but instead to your eloquent poetry.

Carole Duet October 4, 2016 at 10:17 PM What a beautiful poem! I love it and the Old English you used. Lin Lane October 6, 2016 at 12:53 PM Thank you very much for liking this one so well, Carole.

Dineen Williams Gault May 7, 2016 at 7:24 AM Gee, quite romantic, with such a mystical flair. Wonderful write, very much enjoyed, congratulations! Lin Lane May 7, 2016 at 8:04 AM Hi Dineen. I'm very pleased that you like it. Thank you.

Teddy Kimathi May 3, 2016 at 5:46 AM A romantic and colorful piece indeed!! I enjoyed it!! Congrats Lin, for your top placement in the contest!!! ;-) Lin Lane May 7, 2016 at 8:04 AM Hello Teddy, and thanks very much.

Connie Marcum Wong May 3, 2016 at 3:26 AM Very lovely Lin. Congratulations on your top placement. # 7 ; ) Lin Lane May 7, 2016 at 8:03 AM Hi, Connie, and thanks so much.

Susan Palli May 3, 2016 at 2:57 AM Lin, wonderful words, a beautiful dreamy poem. love it! Congrats! Lin Lane May 7, 2016 at 8:03 AM Thank a bunch, Susan.

Joseph May May 2, 2016 at 11:00 PM Congrats on a fine win Lin Lin Lane May 7, 2016 at 8:02 AM Thank you, Joseph.

Sandra Haight May 2, 2016 at 9:43 PM Hi Lin, I remember this beautiful poem of yours chosen as POTD, and I am so glad to see it high on the podium in this contest! Congratulations! Hugs, Sandra Lin Lane May 2, 2016 at 10:58 PM Thanks so very much, Sandra. I'm always delighted to read your kind compliments.

Beautiful Scars May 2, 2016 at 7:44 PM Lin, a beautiful Fave..well done and congrats on your placement! Have a blessed night lady :)-luloo Lin Lane May 2, 2016 at 10:57 PM Thank you, Ma'am. I've just left a message for you on your placement...well done.

Bl Devnath May 2, 2016 at 7:14 PM Congratulation my lovely friend on your beautiful win. Loved always, bl Lin Lane May 2, 2016 at 10:56 PM Thank you very much, BL. I'm always happy to read your comments.

Funom Makama March 21, 2016 at 11:49 AM What an incredible sonnet! You should be one of the reasons a world sonnet day should exist. Beautiful! So beautiful Lin Lane March 21, 2016 at 12:38 PM You went way back for this one, Funom. Thank you for doing that and I'm really glad you like it so well.

William Smith January 31, 2016 at 8:21 AM I enjoyed this read. Your rhyme is melodic and your meaning Devine. Thanks for writing this. Tom Lin Lane January 31, 2016 at 8:26 AM Hello, Tom? William? whatever name(s) you choose, I'm delighted that you enjoyed reading this one. Thank you for your sweet comments ;)

Daniel Turner January 14, 2016 at 7:21 AM "tis more honeyed thy lips when touching mine", very nice.Lin T.J. Lin Lane January 14, 2016 at 7:30 AM Thank you very much, Daniel...T.J?

Robert Lindley January 12, 2016 at 9:02 AM Great sonnet, love the form and style. Fantastic choice for POTD, CONGRATS ON THIS WELL DESERVED RECOGNITION MY FRIEND! "Stirred to flame, I dost fail to disguise need in my loins ere want of fine pleasure." ^^^ O' how many times as a young man did I desire to utter those words to my lady love.. Lin Lane January 13, 2016 at 4:34 PM Thank you very much, Robert ;)

Lionel Derbyshire January 11, 2016 at 1:02 AM Rich with alluring honesty .. A joy to read Lin Lane January 11, 2016 at 4:13 AM Hello, Lionel. Thank you so very much.

Michael Tor January 11, 2016 at 12:27 AM Lin congratulations on being featured. A wonderful write. Lin Lane January 11, 2016 at 4:12 AM Thanks very much, Michael, for always making kind comments.

Vladislav Raven January 10, 2016 at 7:58 PM Hi Lin, a most wonderful Sonnet indeed and a well deserved POTD for this Sonnet. So gentle, soft, dreamy, just flows from the start to the finish. This gets a seven Lin and it does join the other Sonnets in my faves....Vladislav. Lin Lane January 10, 2016 at 8:22 PM I really appreciate your kindest of compliments. Thank you very much, Vladislav.

Danetta Barney January 10, 2016 at 7:40 PM Congratulations on your poem of the day! :) Lin Lane January 10, 2016 at 7:56 PM Thank you very much, Danetta.

Tim Smith January 10, 2016 at 6:07 PM Very lovely poem Lin...Congrats on being featured today Lin Lane January 10, 2016 at 6:09 PM That comment jump happens to me too, Tim. Thanks for stopping by for a visit and for your nice comment ;)

Dean Mobley January 10, 2016 at 5:46 PM My favorite Lin Lane January 10, 2016 at 5:51 PM Ahh, your favorite. That is quite a compliment! Thank you so very much, Dean.

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