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Moody Skies - - Split Haiku Contest

Sadness crying rain Dark storm clouds internal pain Why Does the weather change Monsoons emotion The sorrow that's in our skies Why Does the weather cry Blizzards of our pain Flakes of soft petals presence When Does the sun arise Clouds broken in two The first ray of hope has come When Does it ever stop 03/24/16

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Date: 3/25/2016 10:53:00 AM
Brian, very nice and an interesting form presented to try for the contest, best of luck, 7 ~
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/26/2016 3:20:00 AM
thank you so much and I like trying out new forms of poetry you never know which one might suit your style, thank you and gl to you to
Date: 3/24/2016 7:11:00 PM
Great job,Brian I think haikus are tough anyway. You.ve written a very meaningful poem Peace my friend:)
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/24/2016 9:44:00 PM
Thank you so much my friend and you are right it is difficult to get the true meaning across to readers with the limitations on words being able to use so I appreciate the compliment. Have a great evening
Date: 3/24/2016 6:28:00 PM
I like how you did a pattern here with WH questions. Nice!!
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/24/2016 7:08:00 PM
Thank you Andrea I am glad u enjoyed the way it was done
Date: 3/24/2016 5:50:00 PM
Both Beautiful and sad wrapped up in one stormy piece of literature, well done and good luck in the contest
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/24/2016 5:55:00 PM
Thank you so much Damien, been waiting non a new poem from you my friend??
Date: 3/24/2016 5:48:00 PM
Such emotions portrayed in so few words - good luck Brian:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 3/24/2016 5:56:00 PM
I've not tried this form - will have to see what my muse can come up with:-) hugs Jan
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Brian Davey
Date: 3/24/2016 5:54:00 PM
Thank you Jan It was a fun one to wwrite I kind of like this style of Mystics Hiku's

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