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Monument To the Old Me

Lurking amongst shabby, impenetrable, undergrowth, cloistered effigy is sheltered from casual view, languishing, neglected, forgotten... but content. No longer possessing a name; no longer serving a purpose; whatever inscription once etched thereupon is long-since faded, lost to the whimsical wisps of time. In bygone years, its bronze cheeks would be flushed; embarrassed, apologetic even, for its very existence. Wriggled under the weight of myriad strangers' eyes, recoiled from attempts to elicit illicit secrets, perennial trepidation of exposure to ridicule. But that was in the past... before the truth was embraced. It can no more alter who it is than it can deter the sun from setting, dissuade the tides from rising or discourage the Earth from spinning on its axis. And it has no wish to do so. Feathered vermin perched atop its head defecate, careless and carefree, contributing to the guano collage caked on its carved countenance; the similitude is not lost on it. So it sits... silent and unobtrusive; stoic but stalwart: the epitome of art imitating life imitating art. Languishing, neglected, forgotten... but content. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Written 1 September 2017 Entered in "A Poem I Wrote and Sent Drifting" Contest, sponsored by Broken Wings (judged 11 October 2017). (7th Place) Originally for "Artwork" Contest (judged 6 September 2017)

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Date: 10/13/2017 5:11:00 AM
Blessings and heart-felt congratulations on your win, John - wonderful work and well-earned, my friend! :-)
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John Michaels
Date: 10/14/2017 5:24:00 AM
Thanks so much, Greg. Appreciate the kind comments. Regards, John.
Date: 10/11/2017 9:01:00 PM
John, CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this in my contest!
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John Michaels
Date: 10/14/2017 5:23:00 AM
Thanks very much for allowing my little poem a second chance!! Kind regards, John.
Date: 9/4/2017 4:31:00 PM
The words you have chosen in this brilliantly written piece reflect in metaphors the changes we all must journey in life. This is an exquisite example of a poet's poem John! If Lewis doesn't have this at the top of his list I will be very surprised!
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John Michaels
Date: 9/9/2017 6:45:00 AM
Thank you for the wonderful positive comments, Connie. Unfortunately it wasn't to be, but I really appreciate the faith you had in my work!! All the best, John.
Date: 9/2/2017 9:29:00 AM
Chiseled by the elements of time we go through changes, yet we remain basically who we've always been, albeit more mature and able to look at life with a clearer vision. Your poem makes us stop and reflect. // paul
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John Michaels
Date: 9/3/2017 8:43:00 AM
Love that bit: "chiseled by the elements of time" - so very true. Thanks for your supportive comments, Paul. Regards, John.
Date: 9/2/2017 8:12:00 AM
- The self-image is a kind of psychological compass that determines the relationship between success and failure in our lives ... and we work on this picture all the life - an impressive poem, John - Luck in the contest - Happy weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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John Michaels
Date: 9/3/2017 8:49:00 AM
Sometimes we're our own worst critics!!! Thank you for the supportive comments, Anne-Lise! All the best, John.
Date: 9/1/2017 5:27:00 PM
Your writing is very eloquent, John. I can almost envision this, but would love to see a picture of it, if one exists. I think if this were in the first person, it would be a sure winner! and it is a winner to me already!
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John Michaels
Date: 9/3/2017 8:46:00 AM
Thank you, Andrea. I did consider a first-person approach but - because it's meant to be the *old* me, which has been discarded - thought the narration would jar. No picture - just my own mental image and interpretation of self. All the best, John.
Date: 9/1/2017 4:33:00 PM
impressed by the depth of your message and self- image, john....huggs
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John Michaels
Date: 9/3/2017 8:42:00 AM
Thanks, Nette. Sometimes it's good to stop and reflect! Regards, John.
Date: 9/1/2017 10:20:00 AM
This truly looks like a winner. The personification is excellent and everything is so well expressed. I love it. Good luck in the contest.
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John Michaels
Date: 9/3/2017 8:42:00 AM
Thank you for the kind words, Janice! Much appreciated. Regards, John.

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