Monoku

seventeen syllables or hold back a few ~ i used them all will you

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Harry Horsman

Date: 9/5/2022 6:19:00 PM

yes i will David use all seventeen~ like Jenna straight to the point. Thanks for posting, got me thinking.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/6/2022 12:46:00 AM

You’re certainly on the ball Harry ~ another masterclass comment, cheers David

Brian Sambourne

Date: 9/5/2022 7:10:00 AM

Funny + clever, David. Your sharp line reflects well on the poet's dilemma - brevity or excess (over -spilling adjectives?). Terrific Monoku! Regards, Brian

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/5/2022 8:18:00 AM

There lies the danger Brian, stretched too much looks forced, too little might just lack punch, balance is definitely the key, thank you so much, cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 9/3/2022 9:28:00 AM

I certainly will once I'm given a subject upon which to write.

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/3/2022 11:49:00 AM

lol You're such fun. HUGS

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2022 10:00:00 AM

wow you’re always a step ahead ~ brilliant riposte I asked for that one

Jenna Logan
Date: 9/3/2022 9:53:00 AM

I just did, David. My comment was written in 17 syllables.

David Kavanagh
Date: 9/3/2022 9:32:00 AM

Aha! and there lies the challenge Jenna, no subject given, you have to conjure that one up too lol, cheers David