Monoku- Unflappable

patience waits like a kite- to and fro in silent flight

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Michael Torres

Date: 12/21/2008 8:35:00 PM

Brian great images. Brian love patience written in with the kite I remember how long it took to get it up high and need tremendous patience.. Like alway's clever thought tied in to your specific style. Michael

Matthew Pawlak

Date: 12/21/2008 10:28:00 AM

Great Hiaku/Monoku!(but first time I heard of that so I'll look it up). very nice poem though. so many words to think about. I hope when I fet older I can write like you. ...Matt

Juliane Thomas

Date: 12/21/2008 10:16:00 AM

Beautiful imagery, Brian, in this lovely little haiku (monoku). Thank you so much for your very welcome comments, and I hope you have a wonderful holiday! ~Juliane

Sharon Winter

Date: 12/21/2008 8:11:00 AM

Thank you! I found incredible images online. Well done Brian - of course! Love, Shar

Sharon Winter

Date: 12/21/2008 6:08:00 AM

Is this a metaphor? For I am trying to think of a bird of sorts, since you put animals/nature in your category. Ok, having one of my many 'duh' moments. I probably shouldn't be so embarrassingly honest. : ) Love, Shar

Sean Kelly

Date: 12/21/2008 4:11:00 AM

But only with strings attached !!! Short clever piece , Brian ....

Madeleine Mclaughlin

Date: 12/21/2008 3:40:00 AM

says so much in so few words.

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 12/21/2008 3:22:00 AM

Beautiful and true, the perfect poetic combonation. :) I picture a lovely rainbow kite, against pure blue. love, Kristin

Abraham L

Date: 12/21/2008 1:39:00 AM

short an to the point