Money, Value, and a Response

“Four dollars a shot,” 
marched from the bartender’s mouth - 
each syllable carried the clanks
of Herbie’s Rhodes – jutting like 
glacier crags in swells of desert-base. 
They carried the smoke curling like 
a silver chain draped around a neck,
and the bulges of slurred blurbs.

The words seeped from the regular collection of
the blood-sweet odor of smoke –
not the bartender.

I understood the bar, but I didn’t know what he meant.

The four dollars rustled out of my wallet 
and crinkled on the table like 
brittle leaves popping back into form.

The sap-colored whiskey
plunked on the bar,
and hummed a sharp 
alcoholic song.

Masked, the bartender noticed 
an obtuse heap of slurs that
rumpled his skin into a smile.
His shoulders flipped, 
and he was swept into 
the patterned shrub of sensation.

He was now an indeterminable piece in a clouded order.

I swilled the amber, 
and stumbled through links of smoke
until I spilled out 
into the violent protrusions of the quiet evening –
like sails glaring on a sun-crushed sea.

I still can’t figure out what that four dollars was worth,
or what the bartender said to me.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2007



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