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moments

Fall is having something of a moment - in Paris - from what I hear.

Me? I’m enjoying some large-group foundational instruction, small-group clinical tutorials, and what they call ‘dense-coursework’ because endless memorization and scientific concept acquisition isn’t dense at all.

Peter’s in Paris for goods, Woot!
And lucky him, he’s adjusting to waking up
to ‘Betty (Get Money) by Yung Gravy,’
blasting from my Sonos One speaker at 6am
right after Charles and I finish our morning 5k.

I’m trying to be present for him, to atone for endless studies.
My diary charts my intentions, anyway, like satirical epistolaries.

Now that Peter’s in Paris, he seems “S” obsessed!
I didn’t tell him, “Wait, isn’t that what A.I. is for?”
No, I go to minimal lengths to discourage him,
for we’re each other’s raw materials, are we not?

Shakespeare, a man who obviously spent a lot of his time on the Internet. Wrote about that very specific, emotional-space and little else. He disguised it, of course, with sexual allusions, drunken sword fights, mistaken identities and sick-burns - but it’s all there.
Incest, gender-bending, sneaking around, and jesters spilling blunt truths about “appetites.”

But he presented it all as real, human and normal - signaling pleasures full of breathing, tasting, feeling, and the overt-expression of sexual actions - he was a man ahead of his time - made for social media.

Of course, you can’t trust what a poet writes of love.
Not because of dissimulation, but because love is so exciting
- that the happening is all-consuming - and in the after-pauses, much is forgotten.
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Songs for this:
Betty (Get Money) by Yung Gravy [E]
Man I Need by Olivia Dean
Bad Dreams by Teddy Swims
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Yung Gravy = uhh he’z SO g.d cute and funny.
talking to Peter “If I didn’t have you, I’d stalk him to prove my love.”
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Fallica Avatar
October 3, 2025 at 12:31 PM
<3 . Your prose seems to go back and forth between being so rich that I gain a few pounds just reading it and being so iridescent that I need sunglasses. . . . “… satirical epistolaries …”,“... we’re each other’s raw materials …”, etc. Forget Billy Shakes, there’s so much here for me to squirrel away, to take out and remind myself what English is capable of.
Vionet Avatar
October 4, 2025 at 4:21 AM
Thanks Vin! I never know if a piece is good - until I get your review =]
Conn Avatar
October 3, 2025 at 12:04 PM
All you gots to do is believe.
Vionet Avatar
October 21, 2025 at 2:30 PM
Euuww!!! OMG WHAT!? I’m still laughing =] You get FULL credit for a unique line.. but a) uh, no you wouldn’t!cnot if I knew what was going on and b) I’d wander away from that line wondering.. WTF?
Conn Avatar
October 5, 2025 at 8:55 PM
I believe you are, (among other things) [without effort,] wildly attractive. I would pick your nose and eat it and then kiss you right on the mouth.
Vionet Avatar
October 4, 2025 at 4:21 AM
Well, it take a little more effort than THAT ??
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