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Mocking the Dead

Mocking the dead, the vampire on the hill, high above the cityscape. Why does his cloak wrap around? It moves with a hissing sound, blackened on the outside, blue on the molten graveside. Sharpening incisors on the crag, but the villagers with their worn rags tight fisted with their goodly lights - those lanterns, infused with salt of garlic, compelled forward in the dead of night. Mockers and murderers, fed by rage, want to dispel the wine and bread. Hell, the strangulation of fire, lava rolling down the hill. Mocking, laughter - the shivering of the old church rafters. The reborn, new creation, settled on roof-blowing praise. Nettled, old Nick, the vampire king unsettled. Mocking the dead, making his own bed, jutting at jugulars, darkening the atmosphere, drawing congregants, unholy. But, someone holy has his heels on the vampire’s head. He’s been banished…dead heads’ rolling. The glorious light of the lamb, consoling.

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Date: 9/29/2023 4:32:00 PM
Congretutions on your win in the Contest.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/29/2023 5:10:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 9/29/2023 11:30:00 AM
Have to be careful of the vampires and the toxic evil that is around us.. Thank you for writing for my poem and congratulations on your placement..
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/29/2023 12:44:00 PM
Thank you, Silent! Your title and a poster I saw at the museum converged. Enjoyed the contest!
Date: 9/24/2023 10:42:00 AM
It is a constant fight between good and evil, but good will always prevail - The glorious light of the lamb, consoling'. this poem is Incredibly created. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/24/2023 1:15:00 PM
Thank you so much, Jennifer! xx
Date: 9/22/2023 4:40:00 PM
My dear friend, your poem is truly magnificent in its haunting darkness! You have spared no effort in crafting this exquisite piece of art.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/23/2023 5:06:00 AM
Thank you so much, Lasaad!
Date: 9/22/2023 5:59:00 AM
My good friend, this is indeed a fantastically dark poem! You pulled out all the stops on creating this fine poem, a POTD contender for sure! A glowing dark jewel, and an exceptional fav too! God bless you.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/22/2023 4:11:00 PM
Thank you so much, Robert! That means so much!
Date: 9/22/2023 5:39:00 AM
I love the dark and haunting vampire themed imagery and flow of your storytelling. Fitting for the prompt and very creatively youve delivered one with so much depth. Brilliant diction. Loved reading this. Goodluck for the contest
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/22/2023 4:12:00 PM
Thank you so much, I.E.! So glad you enjoyed this one!
Date: 9/22/2023 12:48:00 AM
Best novel about vampires: A Delicate Dependency.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/22/2023 4:35:00 AM
Hmm…will check it out. God bless!
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Chris Con
Date: 9/22/2023 12:56:00 AM
Wrong title. It's called The Delicate Dependency.
Date: 9/21/2023 11:08:00 PM
The murderers will mock their own death, someday. Nicely penned, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/22/2023 4:36:00 AM
Thank you, Subimal!
Date: 9/21/2023 9:03:00 PM
Great poem and great diction ! The tug of war between devilish forces and angelic allies is quite intriguing ! All the Best dear Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/22/2023 4:36:00 AM
Thank you, Valsa!
Date: 9/21/2023 7:12:00 PM
Intriguing 'good vs. evil' confrontation, Kim. The ending both surprising and pleasing. Thanks, gw
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/21/2023 8:12:00 PM
Thank you, my friend!
Date: 9/21/2023 6:13:00 PM
So, you bite one neck and suck a little blood and all of a sudden, you're a bad guy. Farmers with their pitchforks and lanterns chasing you around all night. Geesh. Loved this one Kim. Have a good day my friend.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/21/2023 6:37:00 PM
Thank you, Jerry! Inspired by something I saw at the art museum today.

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