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Moan of the moon

I am in love with the moon
but pledge to abhor this night
as I sleep on a poignant pillow~
soaked with the perfumes
of forlorn lilies and
half-written farewells...
drizzling from these ashen eyes
are the pensive dreams,
that refused to recede 
from the shore of my aching soul...

perhaps, the black cat moan
was meant to mourn 
the death of the disguised devil,
but I let it burn,
dear reaper ~
and those evil-epitaph trinkets 
kept twinkling with 
their treacherous teeth  
that ripped my silhouette apart 
like a samurai lost 
in the deserted oblivion 
of onyx-fuelled fantasies
and slashed seams of sighs ...

so, let us stargaze 
beyond those blazing blisters 
and weep with the chrysalis comets 
that left me wearing 
       a garland of golden cocoons 

and until death do us part,
I'll meet you in camellia valleys 
worn, weathered and withering ~
like a sharp flower 
slit with the silent sword of sunless spice,
walking on the web of woeful wishes, 
asking the scorched sky 
to hold my inkless insecurities,
and let me be 
high on hemlock honey,
one last time...

because all those years,
I remained feverish 
with your shaking schemes
that withheld bleeding blames 
and in the flame 
of faltering mistakes,
I confess to the sienna letters
lamenting in salted sands,
searing with your
far-sailing scents 
that I only lived to love you,
O' darling...
the ghost of me.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Gibbons Avatar
July 28, 2026 at 8:22 AM
Hiya I love this very powerful emotional write. The painting is protracted by your painting of words my dear friend. Pull of love n death in this gothic flavour of love. " love the moon " I'm always saying " I love the moon ~ and the moon loves me " love the crescendo ending " I only lived to love you O' darling ~ the ghost of me" ahhhh power of loveeeee hugs my friend <3
Kerr Avatar
July 28, 2026 at 12:10 AM
A feast of wondrous poetic devices, smooth flow between liness and effortless intelligent story telling at the heart of all this, Hiya. A masterpiece of enduring quality. It caresses the senses. Howard
Jones Avatar
July 20, 2026 at 6:03 AM
“half-written farewells... drizzling from these ashen eyes are the pensive dreams, that refused to recede from the shore of my aching soul...“ How clever and beautiful. I can feel the angst within your word choices. You’ve surely written a winner! I’d fave but no longer see fave button unless it’s the like heart. Well done Hiya!
Jones Avatar
July 24, 2026 at 11:05 PM
I’m just learned how to fave!
Crandall Avatar
July 16, 2026 at 11:10 AM
Wow, this is pretty intense! Lots of wonderful poetic imagery!
Moore Avatar
July 16, 2026 at 9:05 AM
Wow, this flows and ebbs like a current visible on the surface, sensed in the depths. The stanza beginning with "and until death do us part" really pulled me in. "like a sharp flower slit with the silent sword of sunless spice, walking on the web of woeful wishes" - a dream that envelops and carries me away. Cheers.
Poet Avatar
July 14, 2026 at 12:55 PM
Dear Hiya, your poem is strong and makes you feel things. It has strong imagery and a clear emotional arc. The free poem form lets you naturally show how you feel about complicated issues. Your use of metaphors is unique and beautiful. And the way the poem is put together is so well done; it really shows a journey of love, loss, and transformation. The candid tone and rich words make the reading feel intimate and close.
DiMino Avatar
July 14, 2026 at 11:58 AM
"so, let us stargaze beyond those blazing blisters" -- Love that! "I only lived to love you, O' darling... the ghost of me." -- Totally romantic! Great writing my friend.
Croft Avatar
July 14, 2026 at 8:38 AM
very beautiful in the way you depicted the poem. good luck in the contest!!
Dietrich Avatar
July 13, 2026 at 5:22 PM
High on hemlock honey. Wow. What a loaded lines! You are great with metaphors and sounds . A great final line as well. I bet this does well in the contest
Kendrick Avatar
July 13, 2026 at 12:40 PM
Whoa!! That ghost was very telling about the tragedy. Thanks for sharing. Way to go. Sara K.
Empress Avatar
July 13, 2026 at 10:22 AM
I hope the ghost of you, would no longer have the power to haunt the night that only drizzles sparks of sizzling stars ~ this is a very creative take on Glenn Hughes song, beautifully written with such alluring alliterations and metaphors that flow with deep emotions dear hiya. I especially resonated with the opening and also "like a sharp flower slit with the silent sword of sunless spice, walking on the web of woeful wishes, " sunless spice! Is brilliant! Hah! Well Meow ~ and I must say I love the way you are showing healing through this poem, no longer a victim of mindless schemes... pleasure reading you ~ best wishes. Sending you light always
Sharma  Avatar
July 13, 2026 at 10:33 AM
Awwss ma fairy goddessss is here! And meow ~ what a beautiful comment.. thank you for feeling me ever so deeply! Yes I'm liberated from those false blames and mindless schemes, don't have time haha. And yup that sunless spice was a last minute tweak! I'll waltz with poetry instead ~ oh, moon, take me with you lol. Sending you mermaid magic, fairy lights and starbeams!!
Lane Avatar
July 13, 2026 at 9:25 AM
Hiya, those heartfelt, agonizing pangs would have me moaning with mourning through all nine of my lives if I were a black cat. Well written.
Sharma  Avatar
July 13, 2026 at 10:31 AM
Your sincerity really reaches me, sweet Lin.. thank you for encouraging me so kindly..
Lane Avatar
July 13, 2026 at 10:15 AM
I am always sincere when writing comments, and I feel your emotions quite deeply.
Sharma  Avatar
July 13, 2026 at 10:09 AM
Thank you my dear Lin, you always bestow me with such sincere and generous compliments.. I'm moved to know that you felt everything in this with me. I empathise with the black cat. And must I say, your comment is so poetic, ahhhh. Sending you light and love always, hugzzz
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