Missing

She’s gone! Did no-one see her slip away? Nor take her tiny hand and bid her stay? No soul, her coy, cerulean eyes behold None catch a glimpse of silky locks of gold? 14.10.20 An excerpt from my poem 'She's gone' Rithimus Divisa 10 Poetry Contest sponsored by Gregory Barden

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Reason A. Poteet

Date: 10/26/2020 12:34:00 PM

Hopefully all grown up now leaving home for college. Precious pic and open-ended fitting many scenarios. Hurrah on your placement.

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/27/2020 4:36:00 AM

Thank you so much for taking the time to comment. Yes, she has graduated and is now happily married.

Beata Agustin

Date: 10/26/2020 6:07:00 AM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/27/2020 4:37:00 AM

Thank you,Beata. It had a happy ending you'll be pleased to learn.

Carol Louise Moon

Date: 10/25/2020 7:21:00 PM

Wow, Wendy, such a poignant poem. The opening line of this short poem is stunning. If someone could have only seen, perhaps she could have been rescued. Your well-deserved win for a poem that is a stark reminder for each of us to be aware if something seems amiss for a precious little child.

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/27/2020 4:38:00 AM

Thank you for your feedback, Carol and your comment rings true but in this case, the little girl had only gone missing through the passing of time and developes into a beautiful grown up daughter.

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/25/2020 6:37:00 PM

The emotions build to a heartrending realization. Your gifted pen captures so many feelings in so few lines, Wendy. Congratulations for your excellent trophy win.. ~Susan

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/27/2020 4:39:00 AM

That's very kind of you,Susan. Thankfully, the little girl was just a photo in an album and only lost through the passing of time.

John Hamilton

Date: 10/25/2020 12:32:00 PM

Congrats Wendy on a great win!

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/27/2020 4:40:00 AM

Thank you very much, John. I was amazed!

Sam Kauffman

Date: 10/25/2020 11:16:00 AM

The secret horror of every family, Wendy, perfectly described. Congratulations on your first place in Greg's contest.

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/27/2020 4:43:00 AM

Thank you,Sam. Yes, were this an actual experience, no words could describe the feelings it would entail.

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/25/2020 8:25:00 AM

Love it Wendy. Congratulations on your win! Linda

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/27/2020 4:41:00 AM

Thank you for reading and commenting,Linda.

John Watt

Date: 10/24/2020 11:51:00 PM

Wendy, I am elated to see your excerpt receive the first place trophy. How well I remember the original, 'She's Gone', an absolute fave for me. Hearty congratulations, enjoy the honor, my poetry friend! Your fan, John

John Watt
Date: 10/25/2020 2:37:00 PM

I hope so too, Wendy... context means so much! The original is such a lovely poem that I relate to deeply.

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/25/2020 2:20:00 AM

And I am astounded! Thank you for being such an encourager on this site, John. I hope that viewers will read further to discover the context and the reason for the disappearance!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/20/2020 2:27:00 PM

Lovely quatrain--apparently alluding to a horrendous event, a little child missing! Well-written, Wendy. Janice

Wendy Watson
Date: 10/20/2020 2:36:00 PM

Thank you, Janice. Only missing due to the passing of time. The whole poem will reveal a happy ending!