Andrea Dietrich Poet Senryu

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My Westward View from my Pleasant Grove,UT (Utah Lake)/ Eastward view : the mountains

The Flag and the Sea Gull Memorial in Salt Lake:

 

 

 

Misjudged - For a Long Ago Friend

our junior high dance
middle class white kids rock out
to Born to be Wild

girls sitting pretty
standing and doing nothing . . . 
the wall flower guys

the music softens
I only Have Eyes for You
enhances my angst

the boy I adore
rooted with the wall flowers
has started to move

crossing the gym floor
the boy I like is asking
the new girl to dance

she looks like a snob
I hate this beautiful girl
immediately

somehow I end up 
walking home with this new girl
serendipity

laughing and chatting
we have so much in common
fast friends we become


(A true story told with 5/7/5 line verses)

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Ralph Sergi July 28, 2015 at 7:40 AM Hi Andrea: Sometimes good things occur from bad things. I really enjoyed your poem.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma July 28, 2015 at 12:36 AM Lovely string of senryus Andrea! Congrats on fine win!

Thomas Martin July 26, 2015 at 11:57 AM Interesting haiku sequence,Andrea! Glad to visit you again, have been sick and struggling withcomputer problems! Btw, 21 degrees of Leo born, moon in gemini, sagittitarius rising and all the personal planets in virgo! That's why do not seem very leonine.

Jennifer Walker July 25, 2015 at 10:17 PM Can't write can I, I meant to say, Can't figure out who this poem is about.

Jennifer Walker July 25, 2015 at 10:16 PM Love that you can take a poem and have it be true to life. Can't figure out this is though.

Debbie Duncan July 25, 2015 at 6:33 PM This tells a great story, people getting upset with me over some slight they think I did. So did you win with this too :) Thanks for liking my CINNABONS :) xx

James Fraser July 25, 2015 at 12:28 PM Yep, life twists are wonderful sometimes Andrea. Nice one Utah Babe, hugs, wishing you a lovely weekend, James :) :)

Alexis Y. July 24, 2015 at 10:55 PM Hi Andrea, I'm wondering if I should just say congratulations when I read your skillful writes? Congratulations on a well deserved win:-)Alexi

Skat A July 24, 2015 at 4:51 PM WOW,,,, ANDREA, congratulations, awesome senryu. SKAT LOVE

Eve Roper July 24, 2015 at 11:37 AM Congratulations on your win a seven. Hugs Eve

Kp Nunez July 24, 2015 at 10:33 AM Back to congratulate you, Andie!

Jan Allison July 24, 2015 at 8:30 AM Dropping back with my congratulations Andrea:-) hugs jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 23, 2015 at 10:45 PM Andie, strings of senryu wow!!! short phrases but knitted well to deliver the pictures!!! Hey, I like the them of your contest :D it made me really smile when I read it!!! Hope I can find my muse for short sweeeeeets!!! hahaha ~Olive Eloisa =')

Emile Pinet July 23, 2015 at 7:27 PM You managed to nicely capture the suffrage of young passionate love in this poem, creating the ambiance of the moment well. Emile.

Laura Leiser July 23, 2015 at 2:27 PM Ah, yes, this brings me back to junior high days! The emotions, the angst, the peer pressure. So glad you ended up being friends with that beautiful girl...shows your strength of character, even at that young age :) Great poem!

Kelly Deschler July 23, 2015 at 1:37 PM You never really know someone until you know them... I became friends with a girl who used to be mean to me in school... I like the simplicity of this poem and the twist to the ending. Very nicely done, Andrea!... Thanks so much for your kind comments :)

Afolabi Muideen July 23, 2015 at 11:07 AM A beautiful story here, it is well expressed. Thanks for your last visit to my page, when I read it I burst into laughter...............A.M.

Matthew Anish July 23, 2015 at 10:27 AM I once went to a Jewish dance looking for a girlfriend and found a new male friend Your poem bears re - reading. What do you think of my Woodstock poem. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Connie Marcum Wong July 23, 2015 at 1:11 AM Emotions run so high when we are in our teens. You never know what someone is like until you get to know them. Glad you made friends with her. I was that new girl and my best friend got mad at me because her new guy asked me to dance. Wooh the troubles that a guy can cause between friends! I really enjoyed your poem and returning briefly to my youth. 7

Ravi Sathasivam July 23, 2015 at 1:10 AM Beautiful good old memories. Enjoyed reading it. TFS

Tim Smith July 22, 2015 at 3:48 PM We can easily become jealous. Glad you got to know her.

Daver Austin July 22, 2015 at 2:54 PM Sad aint it. In junior high I was very fat - a wall flower. This girl named Donna was also fat. We were both wall flowers. I really do believe we both thought we were too good looking to settle for dancing with each other. Aaaarrrrgggghhhhh! Aint kids nuts. Love, daver

Wilma Neels July 22, 2015 at 9:22 AM I enjoyed your gem Andrea, lovely memories that's for sure :) Hope your week has been a good one.. Over here I am wishing it was Summer already lol

Constance La France July 22, 2015 at 8:27 AM Andrea, I remember those school dances with everyone afraid to make a move and high school where friends are made and lost in a moment , a dancing 7 and thanks for visiting my senryu 13, animal abuse, and you are so right it is not just the animals, but children and women and even men who suffer abuse

Viv Wigley July 22, 2015 at 6:54 AM I just love a happy ending, and I know that sometimes girls and parties don't mix. Great little string of Senryu, Andrea. Viv x

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