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Minuanaetta - On the Scrapheap of Life

ON THE SCRAPHEAP OF LIFE When we married you got my engine running, but now I want to sleep I’ve just failed my annual service, you said my defects ran too deep My sleek curves have lost their polish, I’m destined for the scrapheap So you’re trading me in for a younger model, now I just sit and weep Because this once racy little motor you no longer want to keep My once classy chassis you always used to admire I’ve got many miles to go, maybe I just need a hot wire With some gas in my tank we could re-ignite the fire But my body is rather dented, and I’ve gain a spare tire The trusty mechanics say they’ll work both day and night To ensure that my engine is running just right I’ll be in showroom condition and look a delight After many years, there’s bound to be wear and tear So please don’t trade me in or keep me as a spare! When my intermittent faults are fixed I’ll be going at full throttle! My defects can be reversed, although it won’t be cheap when the wheels are in motion, you’ll be filled with desire all revved up, honey I’ll be giving you the green light My engine is still running, I just need to know you care If you toss me on the scrapheap… I’ll break down and hit the bottle Minuanetta Contest Sponsored by Gregory R Barden 2/21/18
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Sinha-Roy Avatar
April 30, 2018 at 1:55 AM
Congratulations, Jan on you win. Extraordinary subject dealt with nicely.
Haight Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 3:53 PM
So delightful to read, Jan! Love your 'outside the box' theme! Congratulations on your fine podium win. Hugs, Sandra
Barden Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 1:44 PM
This is so imaginative and joyous, Jan, and had me smiling from beginning to end ... I adore the chremamorphism you used, (as I'm a huge classic AND modern car buff), and you wrote the form like it was natural to you! LOVE this poem - and you have a fine ride there, my friend! Congratulations on your placement, and thank you for entering my contest! :-) <3
Gentry Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 8:55 AM
I love this! A unique take, humorous with a lot of truth mixed in. Congratulations on your win!
Gauthier Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 8:02 AM
A fun poem, Jan. Congrats on your win.
Sinha-Roy Avatar
April 29, 2018 at 12:40 AM
Congratulations, Jan on your with. Great.
Roper Avatar
April 28, 2018 at 10:15 PM
This is a wonderful poem, Jan, which is the one talking the girl or the car :) well done... Congratulations on your win. Hugs dear friend..
Wigley Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 7:27 PM
A great piece for a tricky challenge, Jan. Though I doubt I'll be seeing you at Albert Looms in the near future x
Allison Avatar
February 23, 2018 at 8:20 AM
Thanks Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 2:08 PM
Wow Jan, your poem is so smooth and clever! I hope to see this take top honors! Wasn't it a challenge? I spent more time on it than any other recent poem. xxoo
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 2:16 PM
Thanks Connie, yes it sure was a challenge and I hope Greg likes it:-) hugs Jan xx
Haight Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 9:36 AM
Love your poem, Jan, and the analogy with the inanimate object you used! Very well-written, clever and witty! Best wishes for the contest. Hugs, Sandra
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 9:56 AM
Thanks Sandra it was quite a challenge I hope I did it correctly:-) hugs Jan xx
Y. Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 7:27 AM
Hi Jan, Challenge or not, you made it look easy with this humorous write. I'm sure many of "us" lady's can relate to what you so skillfully wrote. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 8:51 AM
Thanks Alexis it was a tough challenge indeed:-) hugs Jan xx
Talbot Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 11:10 PM
Hey don't hit the bottle, there are better things in life. I'm sure when you've been serviced you'll make someone's life worth living, and from what I have gleaned from your poetry, I think your very nice! Best of success in the contest... Mick
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 4:59 AM
No worries on that score Mick the most likely bottle i dive for is hair dye as I rarely drink alcohol:-) hugs Jan xx
Duet Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 9:56 PM
Very clever, Jan, a delight to read. GL in the contest! :D
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 4:58 AM
Thanks Carole:-) hugs Jan xx
Tripp Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 9:25 PM
I couldn't have done it. You've mastered it. Congratulations. Great entry, Jan.
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 4:58 AM
Thanks Rhoda i hope I have interpreted the rules correctly:-) hugs Jan xx
Medders Tobechi Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 7:36 PM
Great take on the contest that I have failed to understand. Good luck with your entry.
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 4:57 AM
I struggled with it too Janis I hope I have interpreted the theme correctly... it was quite a challenge to write:-) hugs jan xx
Gauthier Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 6:36 PM
Most interesting take on the contest, Jan. Who is this most perfect specimen that dispenses of bruised fruit so easily. Just a rhetorical question. Great poem.
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 2:54 AM
Can't answer your question... but I guess the most easily bruised fruit are 'plums lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Adams Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 5:00 PM
I've been rolling around on the scrap heap for quite a while now. It's not too bad!!...My work/sleep rotation is starting to get to me though. Great rhyme and now I'm off to look up MINUANAETTA!!.................Patrick
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 2:52 AM
Thanks Pat:-) the form has been invented by Greg:-) Hugs Jan xx
Rodrigues Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 2:55 PM
Nice work here, Jan!!
Allison Avatar
February 22, 2018 at 2:50 AM
Thanks kim:-) hugs Jan xx
Andresen Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 2:35 PM
- I do not know what the title means ... but, an awsome poem, Jan - Very well done :) - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Allison Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 2:42 PM
I don't know either Anne Lise it's just the theme Greg gave us:-) hugs jan xx
Cunningham Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 2:27 PM
Loved it Jan, a bit of TLC and a coat of wax and you'll soon have a showroom finish. Good luck in the contest Tom
Allison Avatar
February 21, 2018 at 2:30 PM
Thanks Tom, it was quite a challenge to write this poem:-) hugs jan xx
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