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Mind Over Matter

eyes smiling-- lips conveying approval mind thinks not.... Copyright © 2010 By Caryl S. Muzzey Sixth Place Winner ~ "Yet Another Senyru” Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Chris D. Aechtner Oct. 15, 2010

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Date: 9/28/2010 11:29:00 AM
Well done, Caryl, know the conflict. Congratulations, my friend
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Date: 9/28/2010 7:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in the contest, I have only written Senryu in the traditional form but your words are vivid and clear and very well done,~~
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Date: 9/27/2010 11:52:00 PM
very nice Caryl, I'm glad it placed for you. Charles
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Date: 9/27/2010 9:24:00 PM
Many congratulations on this win. Truly a lovely senryu. Thanks for the comments.
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Date: 9/23/2010 2:33:00 AM
Sometimes the mind thinks "NO" , but does it anyway. Great write, Caryl. Congrats on your win in the contest. Dan C
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Date: 9/21/2010 6:40:00 AM
really like this poem, excellent. congrats for your win in the contest. Harry
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Date: 9/21/2010 4:25:00 AM
Congratulations Caryl on your win in Chris D. Aechtner's contest "Not Another Senyru Contest!". Love, Carol
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Date: 9/20/2010 10:47:00 PM
Caryl, about that word Benched, I rewrote one of my lines and must have forgotten to remove benched and substitute the correct word that I changed it for inside the poem. thanks for pointing that out to me. I'm sure I still used the right word count. I just forgot to show what word was replaced. I looked in a dictionary and saw that benched was a baseball term , not football. hahaha. Just like my poem said, using things I know little about to describe what I know even less about life!
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Date: 9/20/2010 10:47:00 PM
By the way congratulations on your fine win here with this awesome senryu. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 9/20/2010 4:55:00 PM
I was hoping this would win, Caryl. Congratulations! Take care, Diane
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Date: 9/20/2010 3:30:00 PM
Nice one Caryl, another winning gem in this fine contest by Chris. Many congrats >> James :)
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Date: 9/20/2010 3:08:00 PM
My mind thinks..YES.. a winner. congrats. BG
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Date: 9/20/2010 2:23:00 PM
I remember this clever one, Caryl. Great work! Congratulations on your win! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 9/20/2010 1:29:00 PM
Congratulations on ths fine win in the contest, Caryl
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Date: 9/20/2010 12:43:00 PM
Dropping by to say congrats, Caryl :) really enjoyed this one! --nikko :)
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Date: 9/20/2010 11:55:00 AM
Congrats Caryl on your super win in the Senryu contest.. an awesome victory .. enjoy my friend with luv...
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Date: 9/20/2010 10:28:00 AM
good one , congrats on your well deserved win
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Date: 9/19/2010 11:08:00 AM
ahaha -- you definitely got me smiling with this one, Caryl :) -- really liked that last line of yours-- it's the smiling type of deceiver, nice :)-- nikko :)
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Date: 9/19/2010 9:00:00 AM
Brilliant words indicating To do or not to do. Great write. My good wishes..Ravindra...Caryl Muzzey
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Date: 9/17/2010 7:21:00 PM
AHHH, yes, this is the ticket!!!
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Date: 9/17/2010 1:06:00 PM
Reads like a winner to me....Should be in the winners' circle for sure..Good luck..Sara
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Date: 9/17/2010 11:02:00 AM
enjoyed should be a winner!
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Date: 9/16/2010 10:00:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your poetry today Caryl. Hope you have a wonderful day. The best to you in the contest. Thank you for your kind comments. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/15/2010 8:28:00 PM
Wow! How true! This is really good, Caryl. That's one who's at the top of his game, alright. Thanks for the comments...Peace, Audrey
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Date: 9/15/2010 3:49:00 PM
Yes, the look in one's eyes, can deceive what is one's mind. Great job with this one, Carl ! Good luck!! ~ Carrie
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