M. Hussain Effendi Poet Rhyme

Mile

Drenched all over and pupils soaked
Down, this season, a nostalgic walk
A storm, within, of emotions cloaked
Remnant of treason remains to stalk

Contemptuous breach of a covenant shared
You drifted away to regal sounds
Calamity befell less fortunate, spared
My suffering, apparently, knows no bounds

This ride, in ways, is new to find
Each step drawn deeper, I deign
Tears of heaven and mine, combined
Abridged, somewhat, sorrows reign

Sinking daylight, hopes relinquish
Fading mirage intent on proving
Tranquil drive allures to vanquish
Keeps the undead, however, moving

Each moment spent, not unremembered
Each rise, and fall, is but a smother
And soul, from body, is when dismembered
By the side of you, will rest another

Note: This can be read as a reply to "Deliverance"

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Elizabeth Wesley November 25, 2011 at 4:45 PM OOOH, that last line is so sad, a treason to break a heart. A wonderful story - makes me wonder if based on reality in your life. I find most of mine touch on something going on in mine. Good to hear from you dear friend! Hugs to you

Laura Breidenthal November 18, 2011 at 11:42 PM I enjoyed every word of this poem. Excellent one, and thanks for your gracious feedback on my poetry. Always, Laura

Joe Maverick November 9, 2011 at 3:45 PM A deep and meaningfull write by my estimation Hussain...! a 7..

Mohammad Taha Effendi November 5, 2011 at 3:42 PM Brilliant sequel to Deliverance. It couldn't have been put in better words. Exquisite!

Jslambert Mister Roboto November 4, 2011 at 3:30 PM this is a top notch flow, I diGG the twists and turns. You got it on this one!

Laura Breidenthal November 2, 2011 at 9:17 PM Thank you for the comments, and you are indeed a wonderful poet!!! Always, Laura

Elizabeth Wesley October 31, 2011 at 10:09 PM I like a man with deep emotions and you certainly show you have them Hussain.

Sara Kendrick October 26, 2011 at 11:16 AM Enjoyed reading your work..Felt that it was kind of scary..Must be a Halloween time of the year work..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara

Daver Austin October 25, 2011 at 11:14 AM "Keeps the undead, however, moving." Great line. And the last two are Universally Transcendental. Much enjoyment. daver

Elizabeth Wesley October 24, 2011 at 9:57 AM I guess we couldn't write unless we had the full range of emotions and could interpret what we see. You are unique dear friend in your feeling and seeing Hugs, Lizzie :)

Poet Destroyer A October 21, 2011 at 10:55 AM ,Good morning,~ M.H.E ~ how are you this wonderful Friday :-) morning... As for me, I'm missing everyone I know here on the soup PLUS more. *glad we are back up*. By the way I'm also stopping by to read a couple of poems OR commenting the ones I could not all week or yesterday, after being shut out for them awful few days..ENJOYED YOUR POEM, thank you for sharing! Take care and have yourself a wonderful Friday~ ;-) Always,..p.d.

Elizabeth Wesley October 15, 2011 at 2:17 PM You can't hold on to someone who doesn't want to be held but, take comfort in the fact that sun always follow the rain.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart October 14, 2011 at 8:02 PM a fascinating tale Hussain... soul, from body when dismembered.. an outstanding visual line to compliment this elegant piece luv.. tears of heaven and mine, combined.. so much emotionally charged feelings resonate ...thankxx for sharing this rare beauty luv..