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Drenched all over and pupils soaked Down, this season, a nostalgic walk A storm, within, of emotions cloaked Remnant of treason remains to stalk Contemptuous breach of a covenant shared You drifted away to regal sounds Calamity befell less fortunate, spared My suffering, apparently, knows no bounds This ride, in ways, is new to find Each step drawn deeper, I deign Tears of heaven and mine, combined Abridged, somewhat, sorrows reign Sinking daylight, hopes relinquish Fading mirage intent on proving Tranquil drive allures to vanquish Keeps the undead, however, moving Each moment spent, not unremembered Each rise, and fall, is but a smother And soul, from body, is when dismembered By the side of you, will rest another Note: This can be read as a reply to "Deliverance"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Date: 11/25/2011 4:45:00 PM
OOOH, that last line is so sad, a treason to break a heart. A wonderful story - makes me wonder if based on reality in your life. I find most of mine touch on something going on in mine. Good to hear from you dear friend! Hugs to you
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Date: 11/18/2011 11:42:00 PM
I enjoyed every word of this poem. Excellent one, and thanks for your gracious feedback on my poetry. Always, Laura
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Date: 11/9/2011 3:45:00 PM
A deep and meaningfull write by my estimation Hussain...! a 7..
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Date: 11/5/2011 3:42:00 PM
Brilliant sequel to Deliverance. It couldn't have been put in better words. Exquisite!
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Date: 11/4/2011 3:30:00 PM
this is a top notch flow, I diGG the twists and turns. You got it on this one!
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Date: 11/2/2011 9:17:00 PM
Thank you for the comments, and you are indeed a wonderful poet!!! Always, Laura
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Date: 10/31/2011 10:09:00 PM
I like a man with deep emotions and you certainly show you have them Hussain.
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Date: 10/26/2011 11:16:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your work..Felt that it was kind of scary..Must be a Halloween time of the year work..Your presence at my work was uplifting..Sara
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Date: 10/25/2011 11:14:00 AM
"Keeps the undead, however, moving." Great line. And the last two are Universally Transcendental. Much enjoyment. daver
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Date: 10/24/2011 9:57:00 AM
I guess we couldn't write unless we had the full range of emotions and could interpret what we see. You are unique dear friend in your feeling and seeing Hugs, Lizzie :)
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Date: 10/21/2011 10:55:00 AM
,Good morning,~ M.H.E ~ how are you this wonderful Friday :-) morning... As for me, I'm missing everyone I know here on the soup PLUS more. *glad we are back up*. By the way I'm also stopping by to read a couple of poems OR commenting the ones I could not all week or yesterday, after being shut out for them awful few days..ENJOYED YOUR POEM, thank you for sharing! Take care and have yourself a wonderful Friday~ ;-) Always,..p.d.
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Date: 10/15/2011 2:17:00 PM
You can't hold on to someone who doesn't want to be held but, take comfort in the fact that sun always follow the rain.
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Date: 10/14/2011 8:02:00 PM
a fascinating tale Hussain... soul, from body when dismembered.. an outstanding visual line to compliment this elegant piece luv.. tears of heaven and mine, combined.. so much emotionally charged feelings resonate ...thankxx for sharing this rare beauty luv..
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