Lin Lane Poet Ottava rima

Merlot Was Overflowing

With trembling fingers I poured Merlot wine
Overflowing the rim of his chalice
Salty drops on my lips, the taste of brine
from tears spilled as he spoke words of malice
His offensive, "Cheers," I chose to decline
the sting of mockery, cold and callous
    Piteous, I lingered without relief
    Flooded with torment, I'm drowning in grief



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               May 7th, 2017
Form "O"  Contest for Broken Wings

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Charlie Smith May 24, 2017 at 8:49 AM Congratulations Lin, so very well done. Maybe a better outcome with a nice Cabernet... Lin Lane May 24, 2017 at 9:15 AM I should've known better than to pour a red wine. I'm more of a pinot noir rose. Thanks, as always, Charlie.

Constance La France May 22, 2017 at 8:33 AM Lin congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem Lin Lane May 22, 2017 at 8:55 AM Thanks ever so much for the honor and the compliment, Constance.

Paul Callus May 21, 2017 at 3:19 PM Congratulations on placing first, Lin. I had no doubt it would be a winner! Regards // paul Lin Lane May 22, 2017 at 8:55 AM Your comments are always encouraging and most appreciated, Paul. Thank you.

Paul Callus May 18, 2017 at 12:06 PM One drowns in drink and the other drowns in grief...what a pity, suffering because of somebody's egoism! You have tackled this form with an able pen, Lin...in my eyes...a winner! Regards // paul Lin Lane May 20, 2017 at 4:29 AM I appreciate your kind thoughts, Paul. The first line of your comment is poetic in itself. Thank you.

Eve Roper May 10, 2017 at 5:41 PM Love the poem, Lin, fantastic flow and theme :) good luck in the contest ~* Lin Lane May 18, 2017 at 10:47 AM Thanks so much, Eve. Sorry I missed seeing this earlier.

Darren White May 8, 2017 at 8:14 AM There is a pain there, that I fel deeply within myself. So I will say nothing further, but sit next to you instead... and read it again, and again. Lin Lane May 8, 2017 at 8:20 AM Thank you for the company, Darren. It's enough that you understand, and you're here.

Chris Green May 8, 2017 at 7:25 AM Very deep and dark Lin. Some are like that and sadly have an effect on us that they probably don't even realize. I too fell drowned in your words today. Lin Lane May 8, 2017 at 7:33 AM He realized it long ago. Sadly, he's done nothing to change, but I managed to save myself from drowning. Thank you for empathizing with me, Chris.

Anne-Marie Coreggia May 7, 2017 at 8:49 PM Lin this is a beautifully done. We can clearly see the scene unraveling and your ending is tragic, the more he drinks and the more you're 'drowning in grief'. I am sure you will do very well in the contest. 7:) Amitiés Lin Lane May 8, 2017 at 7:29 AM Thanks ever so much, Anne-Marie. To know that you saw the foreshadowing is a great compliment. I appreciate the favoring.

Connie Marcum Wong May 7, 2017 at 2:52 PM This poem has a full moon sadness to it Lin. Imbibing only makes it worse. Best of luck in the contest.7 ; ) Lin Lane May 8, 2017 at 7:28 AM "full moon sadness" ~ Connie, that should be a poem title. If I may, I'd love to write one using it. Thanks so much for the wonderful comments and the insight.

Tim Smith May 7, 2017 at 12:03 PM Very sad Lin...I despise such men. Lin Lane May 7, 2017 at 2:11 PM I should pity them, but having been through it, that's difficult to do. Forgiveness is all I have to offer. Thank you, Tim

Jan Allison May 7, 2017 at 11:05 AM Dark and sad Lin - makes me glad I keep off the wine - can cause so much grief in life in so many ways:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane May 7, 2017 at 11:21 AM It can, and in many instances people are lost, the guilty and the innocent. Thank you for the well wishes, Jan.