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Merlot Was Overflowing

With trembling fingers I poured Merlot wine
Overflowing the rim of his chalice
Salty drops on my lips, the taste of brine
from tears spilled as he spoke words of malice
His offensive, "Cheers," I chose to decline
the sting of mockery, cold and callous
    Piteous, I lingered without relief
    Flooded with torment, I'm drowning in grief



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               May 7th, 2017
Form "O"  Contest for Broken Wings

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Date: 5/24/2017 8:49:00 AM
Congratulations Lin, so very well done. Maybe a better outcome with a nice Cabernet...
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Date: 5/24/2017 9:15:00 AM
I should've known better than to pour a red wine. I'm more of a pinot noir rose. Thanks, as always, Charlie.
Date: 5/22/2017 8:33:00 AM
Lin congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem
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Date: 5/22/2017 8:55:00 AM
Thanks ever so much for the honor and the compliment, Constance.
Date: 5/21/2017 3:19:00 PM
Congratulations on placing first, Lin. I had no doubt it would be a winner! Regards // paul
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Date: 5/22/2017 8:55:00 AM
Your comments are always encouraging and most appreciated, Paul. Thank you.
Date: 5/18/2017 12:06:00 PM
One drowns in drink and the other drowns in grief...what a pity, suffering because of somebody's egoism! You have tackled this form with an able pen, Lin...in my eyes...a winner! Regards // paul
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/20/2017 4:29:00 AM
I appreciate your kind thoughts, Paul. The first line of your comment is poetic in itself. Thank you.
Date: 5/10/2017 5:41:00 PM
Love the poem, Lin, fantastic flow and theme :) good luck in the contest ~*
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Date: 5/18/2017 10:47:00 AM
Thanks so much, Eve. Sorry I missed seeing this earlier.
Date: 5/8/2017 8:14:00 AM
There is a pain there, that I fel deeply within myself. So I will say nothing further, but sit next to you instead... and read it again, and again.
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Date: 5/8/2017 8:20:00 AM
Thank you for the company, Darren. It's enough that you understand, and you're here.
Date: 5/8/2017 7:25:00 AM
Very deep and dark Lin. Some are like that and sadly have an effect on us that they probably don't even realize. I too fell drowned in your words today.
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Date: 5/8/2017 7:33:00 AM
He realized it long ago. Sadly, he's done nothing to change, but I managed to save myself from drowning. Thank you for empathizing with me, Chris.
Date: 5/7/2017 11:11:00 PM
I am glad tonight I selected a Shiraz! :) I read this poem over and over for some reason, feeling the pain in each and very line. This is a fav for me. :)
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Date: 5/8/2017 7:31:00 AM
Your sincere thoughts mean a lot to me, Arthur. Thank you for expressing your feelings.
Date: 5/7/2017 8:49:00 PM
Lin this is a beautifully done. We can clearly see the scene unraveling and your ending is tragic, the more he drinks and the more you're 'drowning in grief'. I am sure you will do very well in the contest. 7:) Amitiés
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Date: 5/8/2017 7:29:00 AM
Thanks ever so much, Anne-Marie. To know that you saw the foreshadowing is a great compliment. I appreciate the favoring.
Date: 5/7/2017 2:52:00 PM
This poem has a full moon sadness to it Lin. Imbibing only makes it worse. Best of luck in the contest.7 ; )
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/8/2017 7:28:00 AM
"full moon sadness" ~ Connie, that should be a poem title. If I may, I'd love to write one using it. Thanks so much for the wonderful comments and the insight.
Date: 5/7/2017 12:03:00 PM
Very sad Lin...I despise such men.
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Date: 5/7/2017 2:11:00 PM
I should pity them, but having been through it, that's difficult to do. Forgiveness is all I have to offer. Thank you, Tim
Date: 5/7/2017 11:05:00 AM
Dark and sad Lin - makes me glad I keep off the wine - can cause so much grief in life in so many ways:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 5/7/2017 11:21:00 AM
It can, and in many instances people are lost, the guilty and the innocent. Thank you for the well wishes, Jan.