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Merlot Was Overflowing

With trembling fingers I poured Merlot wine
Overflowing the rim of his chalice
Salty drops on my lips, the taste of brine
from tears spilled as he spoke words of malice
His offensive, "Cheers," I chose to decline
the sting of mockery, cold and callous
    Piteous, I lingered without relief
    Flooded with torment, I'm drowning in grief



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               May 7th, 2017
Form "O"  Contest for Broken Wings

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Charlie Smith Date: 5/24/2017 8:49:00 AM Congratulations Lin, so very well done. Maybe a better outcome with a nice Cabernet... Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/24/2017 9:15:00 AM I should've known better than to pour a red wine. I'm more of a pinot noir rose. Thanks, as always, Charlie.

Constance La France Date: 5/22/2017 8:33:00 AM Lin congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/22/2017 8:55:00 AM Thanks ever so much for the honor and the compliment, Constance.

Paul Callus Date: 5/21/2017 3:19:00 PM Congratulations on placing first, Lin. I had no doubt it would be a winner! Regards // paul Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/22/2017 8:55:00 AM Your comments are always encouraging and most appreciated, Paul. Thank you.

Paul Callus Date: 5/18/2017 12:06:00 PM One drowns in drink and the other drowns in grief...what a pity, suffering because of somebody's egoism! You have tackled this form with an able pen, Lin...in my eyes...a winner! Regards // paul Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/20/2017 4:29:00 AM I appreciate your kind thoughts, Paul. The first line of your comment is poetic in itself. Thank you.

Eve Roper Date: 5/10/2017 5:41:00 PM Love the poem, Lin, fantastic flow and theme :) good luck in the contest ~* Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/18/2017 10:47:00 AM Thanks so much, Eve. Sorry I missed seeing this earlier.

Darren White Date: 5/8/2017 8:14:00 AM There is a pain there, that I fel deeply within myself. So I will say nothing further, but sit next to you instead... and read it again, and again. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/8/2017 8:20:00 AM Thank you for the company, Darren. It's enough that you understand, and you're here.

Chris Green Date: 5/8/2017 7:25:00 AM Very deep and dark Lin. Some are like that and sadly have an effect on us that they probably don't even realize. I too fell drowned in your words today. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/8/2017 7:33:00 AM He realized it long ago. Sadly, he's done nothing to change, but I managed to save myself from drowning. Thank you for empathizing with me, Chris.

Anne-Marie Coreggia Date: 5/7/2017 8:49:00 PM Lin this is a beautifully done. We can clearly see the scene unraveling and your ending is tragic, the more he drinks and the more you're 'drowning in grief'. I am sure you will do very well in the contest. 7:) Amitiés Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/8/2017 7:29:00 AM Thanks ever so much, Anne-Marie. To know that you saw the foreshadowing is a great compliment. I appreciate the favoring.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 5/7/2017 2:52:00 PM This poem has a full moon sadness to it Lin. Imbibing only makes it worse. Best of luck in the contest.7 ; ) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/8/2017 7:28:00 AM "full moon sadness" ~ Connie, that should be a poem title. If I may, I'd love to write one using it. Thanks so much for the wonderful comments and the insight.

Tim Smith Date: 5/7/2017 12:03:00 PM Very sad Lin...I despise such men. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/7/2017 2:11:00 PM I should pity them, but having been through it, that's difficult to do. Forgiveness is all I have to offer. Thank you, Tim

Jan Allison Date: 5/7/2017 11:05:00 AM Dark and sad Lin - makes me glad I keep off the wine - can cause so much grief in life in so many ways:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 5/7/2017 11:21:00 AM It can, and in many instances people are lost, the guilty and the innocent. Thank you for the well wishes, Jan.