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Merlot Was Overflowing

With trembling fingers I poured Merlot wine Overflowing the rim of his chalice Salty drops on my lips, the taste of brine from tears spilled as he spoke words of malice His offensive, "Cheers," I chose to decline the sting of mockery, cold and callous Piteous, I lingered without relief Flooded with torment, I'm drowning in grief ~. .~ ~. .~ ~. .~ ~. .~ May 7th, 2017 Form "O" Contest for Broken Wings

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Charlie Smith

Date: 5/24/2017 8:49:00 AM

Congratulations Lin, so very well done. Maybe a better outcome with a nice Cabernet...

Lin Lane
Date: 5/24/2017 9:15:00 AM

I should've known better than to pour a red wine. I'm more of a pinot noir rose. Thanks, as always, Charlie.

Constance La France

Date: 5/22/2017 8:33:00 AM

Lin congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem

Lin Lane
Date: 5/22/2017 8:55:00 AM

Thanks ever so much for the honor and the compliment, Constance.

Paul Callus

Date: 5/21/2017 3:19:00 PM

Congratulations on placing first, Lin. I had no doubt it would be a winner! Regards // paul

Lin Lane
Date: 5/22/2017 8:55:00 AM

Your comments are always encouraging and most appreciated, Paul. Thank you.

Paul Callus

Date: 5/18/2017 12:06:00 PM

One drowns in drink and the other drowns in grief...what a pity, suffering because of somebody's egoism! You have tackled this form with an able pen, Lin...in my eyes...a winner! Regards // paul

Lin Lane
Date: 5/20/2017 4:29:00 AM

I appreciate your kind thoughts, Paul. The first line of your comment is poetic in itself. Thank you.

Eve Roper

Date: 5/10/2017 5:41:00 PM

Love the poem, Lin, fantastic flow and theme :) good luck in the contest ~*

Lin Lane
Date: 5/18/2017 10:47:00 AM

Thanks so much, Eve. Sorry I missed seeing this earlier.

Darren White

Date: 5/8/2017 8:14:00 AM

There is a pain there, that I fel deeply within myself. So I will say nothing further, but sit next to you instead... and read it again, and again.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/8/2017 8:20:00 AM

Thank you for the company, Darren. It's enough that you understand, and you're here.

Chris Green

Date: 5/8/2017 7:25:00 AM

Very deep and dark Lin. Some are like that and sadly have an effect on us that they probably don't even realize. I too fell drowned in your words today.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/8/2017 7:33:00 AM

He realized it long ago. Sadly, he's done nothing to change, but I managed to save myself from drowning. Thank you for empathizing with me, Chris.

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/7/2017 11:11:00 PM

I am glad tonight I selected a Shiraz! :) I read this poem over and over for some reason, feeling the pain in each and very line. This is a fav for me. :)

Lin Lane
Date: 5/8/2017 7:31:00 AM

Your sincere thoughts mean a lot to me, Arthur. Thank you for expressing your feelings.

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 5/7/2017 8:49:00 PM

Lin this is a beautifully done. We can clearly see the scene unraveling and your ending is tragic, the more he drinks and the more you're 'drowning in grief'. I am sure you will do very well in the contest. 7:) Amitiés

Lin Lane
Date: 5/8/2017 7:29:00 AM

Thanks ever so much, Anne-Marie. To know that you saw the foreshadowing is a great compliment. I appreciate the favoring.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 5/7/2017 2:52:00 PM

This poem has a full moon sadness to it Lin. Imbibing only makes it worse. Best of luck in the contest.7 ; )

Lin Lane
Date: 5/8/2017 7:28:00 AM

"full moon sadness" ~ Connie, that should be a poem title. If I may, I'd love to write one using it. Thanks so much for the wonderful comments and the insight.

Tim Smith

Date: 5/7/2017 12:03:00 PM

Very sad Lin...I despise such men.

Lin Lane
Date: 5/7/2017 2:11:00 PM

I should pity them, but having been through it, that's difficult to do. Forgiveness is all I have to offer. Thank you, Tim

Jan Allison

Date: 5/7/2017 11:05:00 AM

Dark and sad Lin - makes me glad I keep off the wine - can cause so much grief in life in so many ways:-( Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 5/7/2017 11:21:00 AM

It can, and in many instances people are lost, the guilty and the innocent. Thank you for the well wishes, Jan.