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Mending Life

i watched you take the needle, thread the eye, cautiously, as if one wrong slip could draw blood and make it drip down, like tears in fine lines or little rows just hemmed. mend it tight! tie the knot, before it slips away like a lost little soul, tuck it under, crooked little loop, no one will notice what lies underneath, flawed by your unsteady hands. go ahead, unravel life as if it were an old rag, tattered from abuse, toss it out, disregard what you made, you can't go on mending something so full of holes, it's an unworthy cause. don't you see? (i watched you thread my eye) you slipped and bled yourself dry, (i still cry in little rows, tucked beneath your life) yet, i'm still flawed the same, (crooked little loop) and no one notices, they only see you, through me, (who died anyway)?

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 3/29/2020 7:58:00 AM
I’m so glad you dusted off this amazing piece of poetry and placed it in this contest or I never would have seen it. Congrats on your win, Sandy. Stay safe. Hugs, John
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Date: 9/13/2019 2:58:00 PM
Yi, heavy duty laid on heavy - such outstanding imagery and feel that I got goosebumps. I cannot help but hope that you aren't still AS angry, that such as lessened over time. You are extremely capable of compelling therapy writes that universally apply to all in some way or another. Why do I want so to hug you? Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Sandra Adams
Date: 9/13/2019 6:47:00 PM
I have mixed emotions, if i feel the pain of anger i write it out....i will take the hugs though and give you one back :) hugs
Date: 9/2/2013 8:16:00 PM
Your poetry is some of the best I have read here. I am in awe ! You have been so kind with your comments on my own......but I see that you can write what I can only wish to write........this is wonderful!
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Date: 9/2/2013 2:42:00 PM
very good Sandra a powerful write Shadow x smiles
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Date: 8/31/2013 9:57:00 AM
Your metaphors are crafted very well...very nicely penned
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Date: 8/29/2013 8:48:00 AM
wow.. wow... Sandra.. what a poem!!! xox...Linda
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/29/2013 8:56:00 AM
Thank you so much Linda :) Hugs
Date: 8/29/2013 2:33:00 AM
Very beautiful and painful. It reminds me a little bit of the Bjork song 'Unravel', but yours cuts deeper.
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/29/2013 8:57:00 AM
Thank you Jeremy...going to have to check that song out....have a great day!
Date: 8/29/2013 2:17:00 AM
Hi Sandra, Well crafted write..I liked this one from you.. Ken
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/29/2013 8:57:00 AM
Thank you very much Ken! Hugs
Date: 8/27/2013 7:44:00 PM
Oh wow....this is an awesome write!!! Best read tonight thus far!!!! :)
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/29/2013 8:59:00 AM
Wow, thanks for your kind words! Have a great day! Hugs
Date: 8/27/2013 6:42:00 PM
Stunning...
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/27/2013 6:46:00 PM
thank you so very much Tim...I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment....hugs
Date: 8/27/2013 3:25:00 PM
I loved how you began threading the needle beautiful piece
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/27/2013 6:47:00 PM
thank you so much for stopping by and commenting, hugs
Date: 8/27/2013 7:38:00 AM
Twisted & intense. This writing contained very dark & gripping lines. Tremendous job!
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Sandra Adams
Date: 8/27/2013 6:48:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words Drake...have a great night...hugs

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