Mending Life

i watched you take the needle,
thread the eye, cautiously,
as if one wrong slip could draw blood
and make it drip down, like tears in fine lines
or little rows just hemmed.

mend it tight! tie the knot,
before it slips away
like a lost little soul,
tuck it under, crooked little loop,
no one will notice what lies underneath,
flawed by your unsteady hands.

go ahead, unravel life
as if it were an old rag,
tattered from abuse,
toss it out, disregard what you made,
you can't go on mending something
so full of holes, it's an unworthy cause.

don't you see?
(i watched you thread my eye)
you slipped and bled yourself dry,
(i still cry in little rows,
tucked beneath your life)
yet, i'm still flawed the same,
(crooked little loop)
and no one notices,
they only see you, through me,
(who died anyway)?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Gondolf Avatar
March 29, 2020 at 7:58 AM
I’m so glad you dusted off this amazing piece of poetry and placed it in this contest or I never would have seen it. Congrats on your win, Sandy. Stay safe. Hugs, John
Godwin Avatar
September 13, 2019 at 2:58 PM
Yi, heavy duty laid on heavy - such outstanding imagery and feel that I got goosebumps. I cannot help but hope that you aren't still AS angry, that such as lessened over time. You are extremely capable of compelling therapy writes that universally apply to all in some way or another. Why do I want so to hug you? Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Adams Avatar
September 13, 2019 at 6:47 PM
I have mixed emotions, if i feel the pain of anger i write it out....i will take the hugs though and give you one back :) hugs
Richards Avatar
September 2, 2013 at 8:16 PM
Your poetry is some of the best I have read here. I am in awe ! You have been so kind with your comments on my own......but I see that you can write what I can only wish to write........this is wonderful!
Hamilton Avatar
September 2, 2013 at 2:42 PM
very good Sandra a powerful write Shadow x smiles
May Avatar
August 31, 2013 at 9:57 AM
Your metaphors are crafted very well...very nicely penned
A   Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 8:48 AM
wow.. wow... Sandra.. what a poem!!! xox...Linda
Adams Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 8:56 AM
Thank you so much Linda :) Hugs
Martin Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 2:33 AM
Very beautiful and painful. It reminds me a little bit of the Bjork song 'Unravel', but yours cuts deeper.
Adams Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 8:57 AM
Thank you Jeremy...going to have to check that song out....have a great day!
Carroll Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 2:17 AM
Hi Sandra, Well crafted write..I liked this one from you.. Ken
Adams Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 8:57 AM
Thank you very much Ken! Hugs
Ink-U-Script Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 7:44 PM
Oh wow....this is an awesome write!!! Best read tonight thus far!!!! :)
Adams Avatar
August 29, 2013 at 8:59 AM
Wow, thanks for your kind words! Have a great day! Hugs
Ryerson Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 6:42 PM
Stunning...
Adams Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 6:46 PM
thank you so very much Tim...I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment....hugs
Mcdaid Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 3:25 PM
I loved how you began threading the needle beautiful piece
Adams Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 6:47 PM
thank you so much for stopping by and commenting, hugs
Tacito Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 7:38 AM
Twisted & intense. This writing contained very dark & gripping lines. Tremendous job!
Adams Avatar
August 27, 2013 at 6:48 PM
Thank you for your kind words Drake...have a great night...hugs
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