Mending Life

i watched you take the needle,
thread the eye, cautiously,
as if one wrong slip could draw blood
and make it drip down, like tears in fine lines
or little rows just hemmed.

mend it tight! tie the knot,
before it slips away
like a lost little soul,
tuck it under, crooked little loop,
no one will notice what lies underneath,
flawed by your unsteady hands.

go ahead, unravel life
as if it were an old rag,
tattered from abuse,
toss it out, disregard what you made,
you can't go on mending something
so full of holes, it's an unworthy cause.

don't you see?
(i watched you thread my eye)
you slipped and bled yourself dry,
(i still cry in little rows,
tucked beneath your life)
yet, i'm still flawed the same,
(crooked little loop)
and no one notices,
they only see you, through me,
(who died anyway)?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013


Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 3/29/2020 7:58:00 AM
I’m so glad you dusted off this amazing piece of poetry and placed it in this contest or I never would have seen it. Congrats on your win, Sandy. Stay safe. Hugs, John
Login to Reply
Date: 9/13/2019 2:58:00 PM
Yi, heavy duty laid on heavy - such outstanding imagery and feel that I got goosebumps. I cannot help but hope that you aren't still AS angry, that such as lessened over time. You are extremely capable of compelling therapy writes that universally apply to all in some way or another. Why do I want so to hug you? Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Login to Reply
Adams Avatar
Sandra Adams
Date: 9/13/2019 6:47:00 PM
I have mixed emotions, if i feel the pain of anger i write it out....i will take the hugs though and give you one back :) hugs
Date: 9/2/2013 8:16:00 PM
Your poetry is some of the best I have read here. I am in awe ! You have been so kind with your comments on my own......but I see that you can write what I can only wish to write........this is wonderful!
Login to Reply
Date: 9/2/2013 2:42:00 PM
very good Sandra a powerful write Shadow x smiles
Login to Reply
Date: 8/31/2013 9:57:00 AM
Your metaphors are crafted very well...very nicely penned
Login to Reply
Date: 8/29/2013 8:48:00 AM
wow.. wow... Sandra.. what a poem!!! xox...Linda
Login to Reply
Adams Avatar
Sandra Adams
Date: 8/29/2013 8:56:00 AM
Thank you so much Linda :) Hugs
Date: 8/29/2013 2:33:00 AM
Very beautiful and painful. It reminds me a little bit of the Bjork song 'Unravel', but yours cuts deeper.
Login to Reply
Adams Avatar
Sandra Adams
Date: 8/29/2013 8:57:00 AM
Thank you Jeremy...going to have to check that song out....have a great day!
Date: 8/29/2013 2:17:00 AM
Hi Sandra, Well crafted write..I liked this one from you.. Ken
Login to Reply
Adams Avatar
Sandra Adams
Date: 8/29/2013 8:57:00 AM
Thank you very much Ken! Hugs
Date: 8/27/2013 7:44:00 PM
Oh wow....this is an awesome write!!! Best read tonight thus far!!!! :)
Login to Reply
Adams Avatar
Sandra Adams
Date: 8/29/2013 8:59:00 AM
Wow, thanks for your kind words! Have a great day! Hugs
Date: 8/27/2013 6:42:00 PM
Stunning...
Login to Reply
Adams Avatar
Sandra Adams
Date: 8/27/2013 6:46:00 PM
thank you so very much Tim...I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment....hugs
Date: 8/27/2013 3:25:00 PM
I loved how you began threading the needle beautiful piece
Login to Reply
Adams Avatar
Sandra Adams
Date: 8/27/2013 6:47:00 PM
thank you so much for stopping by and commenting, hugs
Date: 8/27/2013 7:38:00 AM
Twisted & intense. This writing contained very dark & gripping lines. Tremendous job!
Login to Reply
Adams Avatar
Sandra Adams
Date: 8/27/2013 6:48:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words Drake...have a great night...hugs
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Reflection on the Important Things

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter