Jan Allison Poet Pantoum

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Memory of Your Betrayal

Those lying eyes, yes I knew them so well 
I found out you’d had another affair 
Your deception made life a living hell 
On your jacket I’d found her long blonde hair 

I found out you’d had another affair 
Our wedding vows, they meant nothing to you 
On your jacket I’d found her long blonde hair 
No more chances, because this time we’re through 

Our wedding vows, they meant nothing to you 
I bid adieu to your cold cheating heart 
No more chances, because this time we’re through 
I’ve packed my bags, as I need a fresh start

I bid adieu to your cold cheating heart 
Your deception made life a living hell 
I’ve packed my bags, as I need a fresh start 
Those lying eyes, yes I knew them so well
 
FICTION WRITE  for Dust off a Memory Contest
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Pantoum Form 10 syllables per line

10-20-17

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Eve Roper October 30, 2017 at 10:27 AM Jan, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve Jan Allison October 30, 2017 at 1:18 PM Thanks Eve-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France October 30, 2017 at 9:29 AM Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest with this excellent fictional write, you do fiction well, dear heart ! Jan Allison October 30, 2017 at 1:18 PM Thanks so much Constance i do adore the pantoum form:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May October 30, 2017 at 7:44 AM Congrats on your win Jan Jan Allison October 30, 2017 at 1:18 PM Thanks Joseph:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight October 29, 2017 at 6:41 PM Wonderfully written, Jan, and so emotionally charged. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra Jan Allison October 30, 2017 at 1:18 PM Thanks Sandra:-) hugs jan xx

Brian Davey October 29, 2017 at 12:18 PM Great Pantoum Jan and congrats on your well deserved win Jan Allison October 29, 2017 at 5:19 PM Thanks Brian I think this is one of my favourite forms to write its a challenge but so rewarding when the poem is finished:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. October 29, 2017 at 9:28 AM Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis Jan Allison October 29, 2017 at 5:19 PM Thanks so much Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

John Gondolf October 29, 2017 at 9:09 AM Congrats, Jan, well deserved! Jan Allison October 29, 2017 at 5:18 PM Thanks John I love writing this form:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y. October 21, 2017 at 12:51 PM WoW! Jan, You've penned a well written piece. That many can relate to. You could feel an intense anger all through your poem. Betrayal is never okay, I would rather my mate tell me we we’re through than to get betrayed. It would hurt like hell but I would get over it. Excellent emotive write. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis Jan Allison October 21, 2017 at 2:06 PM Thanks Alexis, I am lucky its not something that has happened to em but i do have friends who have had unfaithful partners and can use that in my writing:-( hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey October 21, 2017 at 6:57 AM This is a very powerful write, so full of passion and anger! I know that this is fiction, but it feels so real that I would have thought you've been through this before, just by the words of your poem! You have portrayed your piece quite excellently, and have written a remarkable poem, Great Work!! Jan Allison October 21, 2017 at 9:36 AM Thanks Russell I do enjoy this form and the impact of the repeated lines:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley October 20, 2017 at 8:48 PM A well-written, sadly emotional pantoum Jan. Your poem has a really wonderful flow and rhyme and the content is excellent. Many can relate to the heartbreak, sadness and anger of a betrayal like this. Good luck in the contest! Jan Allison October 21, 2017 at 3:06 AM I love the pantoum form Susan , I never know what my muse will come out with, I hope Constance likes the poem, its fiction for me but sadly others can relate to the betrayal of a partner:-( hugs jan xx

Sunlite Wanter October 20, 2017 at 5:28 PM Oh, yes, there is betrayal in most of our memories. How brave you are to attack this form and make such a lovely story within it. Jan Allison October 20, 2017 at 5:30 PM Thankfully the poem is fiction for me Sunlite but I know there are people who can sadly relate to it:-( hugs jan x