Susan Ashley Poet Alliteration

Memories and Mourning

Trickle tender tears - those that take their time
born to bathe and baptize bereavement;
dew drops cling to fragile petals of forlorn feelings ~

aged and alone
sentiments from sorrowful soul slowly seeps
revived in rising rivers of rhythmic release
emptying from eclipsed eyes
in reverberant regrets and reveries ~

retrospective reviews with resilient realism
offered to an overdue oldster oppressed by outliving others -
reflections retrieved and remembrances retained
gifts given from the gravestone-garden of growing grief
watered with wept woebegone wine
cherished with chaste caressing care 
memories and mourning ~

hallowed in a harrowed heart


Susan Ashley
March 24, 2018


~ Second Place ~
Contest: Alliteration Poem
Sponsor: Silent One

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John Michaels November 14, 2018 at 3:53 PM Hi Susan! Wow, this is such a powerful poem, expertly-crafted using fantastic alliteration (one of my personal favourite devices). Congratulations on your win!! Regards, John. Susan Ashley November 15, 2018 at 4:34 PM John, you are wonderfully adept at employing alliteration in your poems so your generous praise of my use of a favored poetic device is a thrill to receive. Thank you for both your gracious visit and your heartwarming words. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Pandita Sietesantos April 28, 2018 at 4:51 PM Dear Susan, please accept my huge congratulations on your big win with this beautiful well-conceived and constructed piece! I love alliterations and you make it seem so easy to select the perfect words that flow so beautifully, artfully pulling the reader into your story! Best regards and hugs. Pandita Susan Ashley April 28, 2018 at 5:24 PM Dear Pandita, thank you for the joy of your wonderful visit and for my gladdened heart inspired by your beautiful and uplifting comments and kindhearted congrats. I cherish your endearing thoughts, lovely lady.. Warmest wishes and hugs. ~Susan

Besma Riabi Dziri April 27, 2018 at 10:25 AM Serene, majestic imagery related to aging, memories, grief and nostalgia.. An amazing poem that plays on the heart strings a captivating tune! A great joy to read dear Susan! Stay blessed. Susan Ashley April 28, 2018 at 5:13 PM I'm elated that you enjoyed the music of my muse upon your heartstrings, dear Besma. The beauty of your comments and your endearing kindness brings a smile to my face and inspires happiness in my heart. Many thank you's for sharing your lovely spirit with me.. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan

FJ Thomas April 16, 2018 at 11:21 AM Wow Susan I've never seen such an alliterative alliteration! Awesomeness! Susan Ashley April 16, 2018 at 6:47 PM FJ, thank you for your beautiful and quite alliterative comment! :) Your visits are always so wonderful.. Warmest wishes, my friend. ~Susan

Chuck Melugin April 6, 2018 at 9:29 AM Susan...You send me! Do you have a spare bottle of that woebegone wine? You, my dear, are a wonder writer! Susan Ashley April 6, 2018 at 3:58 PM Chuck, your beautiful comments have made my day and brightened my heart. Thank you for your lovely sentiments! Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Eve Roper April 3, 2018 at 9:48 PM Congratulations on your win, Susan, excellent alliteration. Hugs Eve ~`* Susan Ashley April 5, 2018 at 6:15 PM Thank you for your kindness Eve. Your heartwarming congrats and wonderful comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes and hugs, my friend. ~Susan

Line Gauthier April 3, 2018 at 3:44 PM Congrats on your winning poem, Susan. Well done. Susan Ashley April 3, 2018 at 4:09 PM Many thanks for your kindhearted congrats and lovely comments, Line. I enjoyed your entry as well and a fine congrats to you too.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Elaine George April 3, 2018 at 7:44 AM I knew this one would be high on the winners list, Susan. Many congrats. Susan Ashley April 3, 2018 at 4:10 PM Thank you Elaine for your confidence in my poem and for your heartwarming congrats.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Laura Breidenthal April 3, 2018 at 1:21 AM "offered to an overdue oldster oppressed by outliving others" Wow, what a line. I also love, "watered with wept woebegone wine" Beautiful work. Nice alliterations for sure! Always, Laura Susan Ashley April 3, 2018 at 4:20 PM Laura, your beautiful comments are treasured and I enjoy your perspective. Many thanks for your time spent here reading my poetry and much appreciation for your lovely thoughts that gladden my heart.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Judith S April 2, 2018 at 7:51 PM Wow!!! This is just amazing my dear NE friend!! As always, your mastery of vocabulary leaves me in awe of your talents. Congratulations on your win Susan!!! (here's to Spring in N.E.!!!) Susan Ashley April 3, 2018 at 4:29 PM Judy, my wonderful NE friend! Thank you for your wonderful comments and for your heartwarming congrats. Much appreciation for the 'Wow!!!' as well :)) Spring has kinda sprung, with a warm sunny Easter weekend, but then, heavy snow for hours yesterday.. I think we need another 'toast' to Spring ~ I'll get some more champagne lol! Cheers! clink!! :) Happy Spring ~Susan

Probir Gupta April 1, 2018 at 9:12 PM My vocabulary is poor ... So words from me is bound to be insufficient for the evaluation of the beautiful poem ... Let me just say it is lovely and very rich in alliteration ... Susan Ashley April 3, 2018 at 4:13 PM Probir, your comments have the ability to uplift and inspire me always.. thank you for your wonderful kindness my friend.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen April 1, 2018 at 3:25 PM - The winners are named Susan ... and it was great to see your poem on the winning list :) - Congratulations !!! :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Susan Ashley April 1, 2018 at 7:09 PM Thank you, Anne-Lise for your lovely comments and heartfelt congrats.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Silent One April 1, 2018 at 2:51 PM The first line is brilliant in this deep poem, which has great use of alliteration.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest... Susan Ashley April 1, 2018 at 7:08 PM Thank you, Silent One, for the delight of my wonderful placement in your contest and for your lovely comments as well.. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~ Susan

Daniel Turner April 1, 2018 at 2:48 PM Congratulations Susan on you placement in the contest. You are becoming quite a regular on the podium:) Susan Ashley April 1, 2018 at 6:28 PM Thank you Daniel, for your kindhearted congrats and your wonderful comments. I always appreciate your presence on my poetry page, my friend.. ~ the Meek One :))

Elaine George March 31, 2018 at 4:38 PM Sure to top the winners list. Susan Ashley March 31, 2018 at 7:33 PM Thank you Elaine for our lovely comment. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Jack Horne March 31, 2018 at 2:50 PM a sure winner here - tender & touching &, as always, very well written Susan Ashley March 31, 2018 at 3:54 PM Thank you Jack for your heartwarming comments and for the pleasure of your visit - I'm always thrilled when you stop by.. Warmest wishes my friend. ~Susan

Maria Williams March 31, 2018 at 6:16 AM This is definitely a winning entry Susan my dear friend.There is not more that I can add to Michael Robinson's poetic review, or indeed the astute comment of Paul Callus. Its a difficult form and you have embroidered two sentiments so well into the pattern of your poem. Definitely a fave....Maria xxx Susan Ashley April 1, 2018 at 9:16 AM Happy Easter greetings,as well, to you and those you hold dear, my lovely friend.. Maria Williams April 1, 2018 at 1:02 AM Yes thank you Susan I did. I will be contacting you again, in the meanwhile my lovely friend a Very Happy Easter to you and yours.xxx Susan Ashley March 31, 2018 at 8:41 AM Good morning, my dear friend Maria.. your response to my poem just thrills me and it's always such a pleasure when I see your lovely presence gracing my page. Thank you for your exquisite 'embroidered' comments, so beautiful. Your shining sentiments uplift my heart and inspire me to reach higher, my lovely friend.. Many thanks as well for your support and for the Fave. Warmest wishes and hugs always. ~Susan - p.s. did you receive the soup mail I sent a few days ago..? :))

Demetrios Trifiatis March 30, 2018 at 6:17 AM Well, my friend, Susan after you been declared a winner there is nothing else left for me but congratulations for this masterful poem! Susan Ashley March 30, 2018 at 11:17 AM Thank you, my friend, Demetrios, for the delight of your visit. I relish your lovely comments and treasure your friendship. Warmest wishes always. ~Susan

Robert Lindley March 30, 2018 at 5:38 AM Superb alliteration my extremely talented friend! Last stanza, pure genius at lighting up and out with the truth! A true and shining gem this jewel is... A fav... Susan Ashley March 30, 2018 at 11:13 AM Thank you for your glowing comments Robert. I cherish your opinion and your lovely sentiments brighten my heart. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Many thanks for your kindness and for the fav. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit March 29, 2018 at 4:40 PM Enjoyed reading your artistic rendering..intertwined with memories wrapped in words carefully chosen..delivered beautifully..best for a win, Susan. Susan Ashley March 30, 2018 at 11:02 AM Vijay, your insightful and beautifully expressed comments are always such a pleasure to receive. Many thanks for your kindness. Warmest wishes to you, my friend. ~Susan

Paul Callus March 29, 2018 at 4:11 PM Well done, Susan...you make alliteration sound and look easy, when in truth it is not! You intermingle and describe memories and mourning so well, giving the impression that you have experienced both in life. ~ I see from the comment below that this is a winning entry, so...Congratulations!! ~ Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley March 30, 2018 at 10:59 AM Thank you Paul for your beautiful and insightful comments.. I have experienced both, memories and mourning, but fortunately I'm not alone like the aged subject of my poem. The contest has not been judged as of yet, but hopefully Anne-Lise's predictions are correct :)) I relish your visit and your wonderful thoughts my friend. ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen March 29, 2018 at 2:37 PM - Susan, a pleasure to read this winning poem ... this is already "in the box" ... I come back, when the contest is finished ... to congratulate :) - Excellent! - Happy Easter - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Susan Ashley March 30, 2018 at 10:52 AM Anne-Lise, thank you for your uplifting and confident comments :) It's gratifying to know that you consider my poem a 'winning poem'.. hopefully the judge sees it the same way :)) Many thanks for your kindness. Happy Easter and hugs to you, my friend. ~Susan

Yazmin Malik March 28, 2018 at 6:44 AM Wow! :) Susan Ashley March 28, 2018 at 12:24 PM Thank you, Yazmin! Pleased to meet you :) Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Kai Michael Neumann March 28, 2018 at 3:12 AM Beautiful. Good luck for the contest. Kai Susan Ashley March 28, 2018 at 12:25 PM Thank you, Kai for your lovely comments and good luck wishes. Your visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton March 26, 2018 at 11:59 PM All aside with the alliteration, this poem is very delicately constructed, like fine lace. You had me at go, "Trickle tender tears - those that take their time born to bathe and baptize bereavement"...beautiful Su. Susan Ashley March 27, 2018 at 8:51 PM I relish your beautiful response to my poem Leanne. Your appreciation is truly heartwarming and means so much to me. Many thanks for your kind comments. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

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