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Memories and Mourning

Trickle tender tears - those that take their time born to bathe and baptize bereavement; dew drops cling to fragile petals of forlorn feelings ~ aged and alone sentiments from sorrowful soul slowly seeps revived in rising rivers of rhythmic release emptying from eclipsed eyes in reverberant regrets and reveries ~ retrospective reviews with resilient realism offered to an overdue oldster oppressed by outliving others - reflections retrieved and remembrances retained gifts given from the gravestone-garden of growing grief watered with wept woebegone wine cherished with chaste caressing care memories and mourning ~ hallowed in a harrowed heart Susan Ashley March 24, 2018 ~ Second Place ~ Contest: Alliteration Poem Sponsor: Silent One

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John Michaels

Date: 11/14/2018 3:53:00 PM

Hi Susan! Wow, this is such a powerful poem, expertly-crafted using fantastic alliteration (one of my personal favourite devices). Congratulations on your win!! Regards, John.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/15/2018 4:34:00 PM

John, you are wonderfully adept at employing alliteration in your poems so your generous praise of my use of a favored poetic device is a thrill to receive. Thank you for both your gracious visit and your heartwarming words. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 4/28/2018 4:51:00 PM

Dear Susan, please accept my huge congratulations on your big win with this beautiful well-conceived and constructed piece! I love alliterations and you make it seem so easy to select the perfect words that flow so beautifully, artfully pulling the reader into your story! Best regards and hugs. Pandita

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/28/2018 5:24:00 PM

Dear Pandita, thank you for the joy of your wonderful visit and for my gladdened heart inspired by your beautiful and uplifting comments and kindhearted congrats. I cherish your endearing thoughts, lovely lady.. Warmest wishes and hugs. ~Susan

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 4/27/2018 10:25:00 AM

Serene, majestic imagery related to aging, memories, grief and nostalgia.. An amazing poem that plays on the heart strings a captivating tune! A great joy to read dear Susan! Stay blessed.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/28/2018 5:13:00 PM

I'm elated that you enjoyed the music of my muse upon your heartstrings, dear Besma. The beauty of your comments and your endearing kindness brings a smile to my face and inspires happiness in my heart. Many thank you's for sharing your lovely spirit with me.. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan

FJ Thomas

Date: 4/16/2018 11:21:00 AM

Wow Susan I've never seen such an alliterative alliteration! Awesomeness!

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/16/2018 6:47:00 PM

FJ, thank you for your beautiful and quite alliterative comment! :) Your visits are always so wonderful.. Warmest wishes, my friend. ~Susan

Chuck Melugin

Date: 4/6/2018 9:29:00 AM

Susan...You send me! Do you have a spare bottle of that woebegone wine? You, my dear, are a wonder writer!

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/6/2018 3:58:00 PM

Chuck, your beautiful comments have made my day and brightened my heart. Thank you for your lovely sentiments! Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Eve Roper

Date: 4/3/2018 9:48:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Susan, excellent alliteration. Hugs Eve ~`*

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/5/2018 6:15:00 PM

Thank you for your kindness Eve. Your heartwarming congrats and wonderful comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes and hugs, my friend. ~Susan

Line Gauthier

Date: 4/3/2018 3:44:00 PM

Congrats on your winning poem, Susan. Well done.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/3/2018 4:09:00 PM

Many thanks for your kindhearted congrats and lovely comments, Line. I enjoyed your entry as well and a fine congrats to you too.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Elaine George

Date: 4/3/2018 7:44:00 AM

I knew this one would be high on the winners list, Susan. Many congrats.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/3/2018 4:10:00 PM

Thank you Elaine for your confidence in my poem and for your heartwarming congrats.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 4/3/2018 1:21:00 AM

"offered to an overdue oldster oppressed by outliving others" Wow, what a line. I also love, "watered with wept woebegone wine" Beautiful work. Nice alliterations for sure! Always, Laura

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/3/2018 4:20:00 PM

Laura, your beautiful comments are treasured and I enjoy your perspective. Many thanks for your time spent here reading my poetry and much appreciation for your lovely thoughts that gladden my heart.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Judith S

Date: 4/2/2018 7:51:00 PM

Wow!!! This is just amazing my dear NE friend!! As always, your mastery of vocabulary leaves me in awe of your talents. Congratulations on your win Susan!!! (here's to Spring in N.E.!!!)

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/3/2018 4:29:00 PM

Judy, my wonderful NE friend! Thank you for your wonderful comments and for your heartwarming congrats. Much appreciation for the 'Wow!!!' as well :)) Spring has kinda sprung, with a warm sunny Easter weekend, but then, heavy snow for hours yesterday.. I think we need another 'toast' to Spring ~ I'll get some more champagne lol! Cheers! clink!! :) Happy Spring ~Susan

Probir Gupta

Date: 4/1/2018 9:12:00 PM

My vocabulary is poor ... So words from me is bound to be insufficient for the evaluation of the beautiful poem ... Let me just say it is lovely and very rich in alliteration ...

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/3/2018 4:13:00 PM

Probir, your comments have the ability to uplift and inspire me always.. thank you for your wonderful kindness my friend.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/1/2018 3:25:00 PM

- The winners are named Susan ... and it was great to see your poem on the winning list :) - Congratulations !!! :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/1/2018 7:09:00 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise for your lovely comments and heartfelt congrats.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 4/1/2018 2:51:00 PM

The first line is brilliant in this deep poem, which has great use of alliteration.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest...

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/1/2018 7:08:00 PM

Thank you, Silent One, for the delight of my wonderful placement in your contest and for your lovely comments as well.. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~ Susan

Daniel Turner

Date: 4/1/2018 2:48:00 PM

Congratulations Susan on you placement in the contest. You are becoming quite a regular on the podium:)

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/1/2018 6:28:00 PM

Thank you Daniel, for your kindhearted congrats and your wonderful comments. I always appreciate your presence on my poetry page, my friend.. ~ the Meek One :))

Elaine George

Date: 3/31/2018 4:38:00 PM

Sure to top the winners list.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/31/2018 7:33:00 PM

Thank you Elaine for our lovely comment. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Jack Horne

Date: 3/31/2018 2:50:00 PM

a sure winner here - tender & touching &, as always, very well written

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/31/2018 3:54:00 PM

Thank you Jack for your heartwarming comments and for the pleasure of your visit - I'm always thrilled when you stop by.. Warmest wishes my friend. ~Susan

Maria Williams

Date: 3/31/2018 6:16:00 AM

This is definitely a winning entry Susan my dear friend.There is not more that I can add to Michael Robinson's poetic review, or indeed the astute comment of Paul Callus. Its a difficult form and you have embroidered two sentiments so well into the pattern of your poem. Definitely a fave....Maria xxx

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/1/2018 9:16:00 AM

Happy Easter greetings,as well, to you and those you hold dear, my lovely friend..

Maria Williams
Date: 4/1/2018 1:02:00 AM

Yes thank you Susan I did. I will be contacting you again, in the meanwhile my lovely friend a Very Happy Easter to you and yours.xxx

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/31/2018 8:41:00 AM

Good morning, my dear friend Maria.. your response to my poem just thrills me and it's always such a pleasure when I see your lovely presence gracing my page. Thank you for your exquisite 'embroidered' comments, so beautiful. Your shining sentiments uplift my heart and inspire me to reach higher, my lovely friend.. Many thanks as well for your support and for the Fave. Warmest wishes and hugs always. ~Susan - p.s. did you receive the soup mail I sent a few days ago..? :))

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 3/30/2018 6:17:00 AM

Well, my friend, Susan after you been declared a winner there is nothing else left for me but congratulations for this masterful poem!

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/30/2018 11:17:00 AM

Thank you, my friend, Demetrios, for the delight of your visit. I relish your lovely comments and treasure your friendship. Warmest wishes always. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 3/30/2018 5:38:00 AM

Superb alliteration my extremely talented friend! Last stanza, pure genius at lighting up and out with the truth! A true and shining gem this jewel is... A fav...

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/30/2018 11:13:00 AM

Thank you for your glowing comments Robert. I cherish your opinion and your lovely sentiments brighten my heart. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Many thanks for your kindness and for the fav. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/29/2018 4:40:00 PM

Enjoyed reading your artistic rendering..intertwined with memories wrapped in words carefully chosen..delivered beautifully..best for a win, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/30/2018 11:02:00 AM

Vijay, your insightful and beautifully expressed comments are always such a pleasure to receive. Many thanks for your kindness. Warmest wishes to you, my friend. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 3/29/2018 4:11:00 PM

Well done, Susan...you make alliteration sound and look easy, when in truth it is not! You intermingle and describe memories and mourning so well, giving the impression that you have experienced both in life. ~ I see from the comment below that this is a winning entry, so...Congratulations!! ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/30/2018 10:59:00 AM

Thank you Paul for your beautiful and insightful comments.. I have experienced both, memories and mourning, but fortunately I'm not alone like the aged subject of my poem. The contest has not been judged as of yet, but hopefully Anne-Lise's predictions are correct :)) I relish your visit and your wonderful thoughts my friend. ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/29/2018 2:37:00 PM

- Susan, a pleasure to read this winning poem ... this is already "in the box" ... I come back, when the contest is finished ... to congratulate :) - Excellent! - Happy Easter - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/30/2018 10:52:00 AM

Anne-Lise, thank you for your uplifting and confident comments :) It's gratifying to know that you consider my poem a 'winning poem'.. hopefully the judge sees it the same way :)) Many thanks for your kindness. Happy Easter and hugs to you, my friend. ~Susan

Yazmin Malik

Date: 3/28/2018 6:44:00 AM

Wow! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/28/2018 12:24:00 PM

Thank you, Yazmin! Pleased to meet you :) Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 3/28/2018 3:12:00 AM

Beautiful. Good luck for the contest. Kai

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/28/2018 12:25:00 PM

Thank you, Kai for your lovely comments and good luck wishes. Your visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton

Date: 3/26/2018 11:59:00 PM

All aside with the alliteration, this poem is very delicately constructed, like fine lace. You had me at go, "Trickle tender tears - those that take their time born to bathe and baptize bereavement"...beautiful Su.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/27/2018 8:51:00 PM

I relish your beautiful response to my poem Leanne. Your appreciation is truly heartwarming and means so much to me. Many thanks for your kind comments. Warmest wishes. ~Susan