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Memories and Mourning

Trickle tender tears - those that take their time
born to bathe and baptize bereavement;
dew drops cling to fragile petals of forlorn feelings ~

aged and alone
sentiments from sorrowful soul slowly seeps
revived in rising rivers of rhythmic release
emptying from eclipsed eyes
in reverberant regrets and reveries ~

retrospective reviews with resilient realism
offered to an overdue oldster oppressed by outliving others -
reflections retrieved and remembrances retained
gifts given from the gravestone-garden of growing grief
watered with wept woebegone wine
cherished with chaste caressing care 
memories and mourning ~

hallowed in a harrowed heart


Susan Ashley
March 24, 2018


~ Second Place ~
Contest: Alliteration Poem
Sponsor: Silent One

Copyright © Susan Ashley | Year Posted 2018

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John Michaels Date: 11/14/2018 3:53:00 PM Hi Susan! Wow, this is such a powerful poem, expertly-crafted using fantastic alliteration (one of my personal favourite devices). Congratulations on your win!! Regards, John. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 11/15/2018 4:34:00 PM John, you are wonderfully adept at employing alliteration in your poems so your generous praise of my use of a favored poetic device is a thrill to receive. Thank you for both your gracious visit and your heartwarming words. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~Susan

Pandita Sietesantos Date: 4/28/2018 4:51:00 PM Dear Susan, please accept my huge congratulations on your big win with this beautiful well-conceived and constructed piece! I love alliterations and you make it seem so easy to select the perfect words that flow so beautifully, artfully pulling the reader into your story! Best regards and hugs. Pandita Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/28/2018 5:24:00 PM Dear Pandita, thank you for the joy of your wonderful visit and for my gladdened heart inspired by your beautiful and uplifting comments and kindhearted congrats. I cherish your endearing thoughts, lovely lady.. Warmest wishes and hugs. ~Susan

Besma Riabi Dziri Date: 4/27/2018 10:25:00 AM Serene, majestic imagery related to aging, memories, grief and nostalgia.. An amazing poem that plays on the heart strings a captivating tune! A great joy to read dear Susan! Stay blessed. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/28/2018 5:13:00 PM I'm elated that you enjoyed the music of my muse upon your heartstrings, dear Besma. The beauty of your comments and your endearing kindness brings a smile to my face and inspires happiness in my heart. Many thank you's for sharing your lovely spirit with me.. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan

FJ Thomas Date: 4/16/2018 11:21:00 AM Wow Susan I've never seen such an alliterative alliteration! Awesomeness! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/16/2018 6:47:00 PM FJ, thank you for your beautiful and quite alliterative comment! :) Your visits are always so wonderful.. Warmest wishes, my friend. ~Susan

Chuck Melugin Date: 4/6/2018 9:29:00 AM Susan...You send me! Do you have a spare bottle of that woebegone wine? You, my dear, are a wonder writer! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/6/2018 3:58:00 PM Chuck, your beautiful comments have made my day and brightened my heart. Thank you for your lovely sentiments! Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Eve Roper Date: 4/3/2018 9:48:00 PM Congratulations on your win, Susan, excellent alliteration. Hugs Eve ~`* Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/5/2018 6:15:00 PM Thank you for your kindness Eve. Your heartwarming congrats and wonderful comments are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes and hugs, my friend. ~Susan

Line Gauthier Date: 4/3/2018 3:44:00 PM Congrats on your winning poem, Susan. Well done. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/3/2018 4:09:00 PM Many thanks for your kindhearted congrats and lovely comments, Line. I enjoyed your entry as well and a fine congrats to you too.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Elaine George Date: 4/3/2018 7:44:00 AM I knew this one would be high on the winners list, Susan. Many congrats. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/3/2018 4:10:00 PM Thank you Elaine for your confidence in my poem and for your heartwarming congrats.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Laura Breidenthal Date: 4/3/2018 1:21:00 AM "offered to an overdue oldster oppressed by outliving others" Wow, what a line. I also love, "watered with wept woebegone wine" Beautiful work. Nice alliterations for sure! Always, Laura Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/3/2018 4:20:00 PM Laura, your beautiful comments are treasured and I enjoy your perspective. Many thanks for your time spent here reading my poetry and much appreciation for your lovely thoughts that gladden my heart.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Judith S Date: 4/2/2018 7:51:00 PM Wow!!! This is just amazing my dear NE friend!! As always, your mastery of vocabulary leaves me in awe of your talents. Congratulations on your win Susan!!! (here's to Spring in N.E.!!!) Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/3/2018 4:29:00 PM Judy, my wonderful NE friend! Thank you for your wonderful comments and for your heartwarming congrats. Much appreciation for the 'Wow!!!' as well :)) Spring has kinda sprung, with a warm sunny Easter weekend, but then, heavy snow for hours yesterday.. I think we need another 'toast' to Spring ~ I'll get some more champagne lol! Cheers! clink!! :) Happy Spring ~Susan

Probir Gupta Date: 4/1/2018 9:12:00 PM My vocabulary is poor ... So words from me is bound to be insufficient for the evaluation of the beautiful poem ... Let me just say it is lovely and very rich in alliteration ... Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/3/2018 4:13:00 PM Probir, your comments have the ability to uplift and inspire me always.. thank you for your wonderful kindness my friend.. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 4/1/2018 3:25:00 PM - The winners are named Susan ... and it was great to see your poem on the winning list :) - Congratulations !!! :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/1/2018 7:09:00 PM Thank you, Anne-Lise for your lovely comments and heartfelt congrats.. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Silent One Date: 4/1/2018 2:51:00 PM The first line is brilliant in this deep poem, which has great use of alliteration.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest... Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/1/2018 7:08:00 PM Thank you, Silent One, for the delight of my wonderful placement in your contest and for your lovely comments as well.. Warmest wishes my friend.. ~ Susan

Daniel Turner Date: 4/1/2018 2:48:00 PM Congratulations Susan on you placement in the contest. You are becoming quite a regular on the podium:) Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/1/2018 6:28:00 PM Thank you Daniel, for your kindhearted congrats and your wonderful comments. I always appreciate your presence on my poetry page, my friend.. ~ the Meek One :))

Elaine George Date: 3/31/2018 4:38:00 PM Sure to top the winners list. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/31/2018 7:33:00 PM Thank you Elaine for our lovely comment. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Jack Horne Date: 3/31/2018 2:50:00 PM a sure winner here - tender & touching &, as always, very well written Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/31/2018 3:54:00 PM Thank you Jack for your heartwarming comments and for the pleasure of your visit - I'm always thrilled when you stop by.. Warmest wishes my friend. ~Susan

Maria Williams Date: 3/31/2018 6:16:00 AM This is definitely a winning entry Susan my dear friend.There is not more that I can add to Michael Robinson's poetic review, or indeed the astute comment of Paul Callus. Its a difficult form and you have embroidered two sentiments so well into the pattern of your poem. Definitely a fave....Maria xxx Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 4/1/2018 9:16:00 AM Happy Easter greetings,as well, to you and those you hold dear, my lovely friend.. Maria Williams Date: 4/1/2018 1:02:00 AM Yes thank you Susan I did. I will be contacting you again, in the meanwhile my lovely friend a Very Happy Easter to you and yours.xxx Susan Ashley Date: 3/31/2018 8:41:00 AM Good morning, my dear friend Maria.. your response to my poem just thrills me and it's always such a pleasure when I see your lovely presence gracing my page. Thank you for your exquisite 'embroidered' comments, so beautiful. Your shining sentiments uplift my heart and inspire me to reach higher, my lovely friend.. Many thanks as well for your support and for the Fave. Warmest wishes and hugs always. ~Susan - p.s. did you receive the soup mail I sent a few days ago..? :))

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 3/30/2018 6:17:00 AM Well, my friend, Susan after you been declared a winner there is nothing else left for me but congratulations for this masterful poem! Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/30/2018 11:17:00 AM Thank you, my friend, Demetrios, for the delight of your visit. I relish your lovely comments and treasure your friendship. Warmest wishes always. ~Susan

Robert Lindley Date: 3/30/2018 5:38:00 AM Superb alliteration my extremely talented friend! Last stanza, pure genius at lighting up and out with the truth! A true and shining gem this jewel is... A fav... Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/30/2018 11:13:00 AM Thank you for your glowing comments Robert. I cherish your opinion and your lovely sentiments brighten my heart. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Many thanks for your kindness and for the fav. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit Date: 3/29/2018 4:40:00 PM Enjoyed reading your artistic rendering..intertwined with memories wrapped in words carefully chosen..delivered beautifully..best for a win, Susan. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/30/2018 11:02:00 AM Vijay, your insightful and beautifully expressed comments are always such a pleasure to receive. Many thanks for your kindness. Warmest wishes to you, my friend. ~Susan

Paul Callus Date: 3/29/2018 4:11:00 PM Well done, Susan...you make alliteration sound and look easy, when in truth it is not! You intermingle and describe memories and mourning so well, giving the impression that you have experienced both in life. ~ I see from the comment below that this is a winning entry, so...Congratulations!! ~ Warm regards // paul Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/30/2018 10:59:00 AM Thank you Paul for your beautiful and insightful comments.. I have experienced both, memories and mourning, but fortunately I'm not alone like the aged subject of my poem. The contest has not been judged as of yet, but hopefully Anne-Lise's predictions are correct :)) I relish your visit and your wonderful thoughts my friend. ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 3/29/2018 2:37:00 PM - Susan, a pleasure to read this winning poem ... this is already "in the box" ... I come back, when the contest is finished ... to congratulate :) - Excellent! - Happy Easter - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/30/2018 10:52:00 AM Anne-Lise, thank you for your uplifting and confident comments :) It's gratifying to know that you consider my poem a 'winning poem'.. hopefully the judge sees it the same way :)) Many thanks for your kindness. Happy Easter and hugs to you, my friend. ~Susan

Yazmin Malik Date: 3/28/2018 6:44:00 AM Wow! :) Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/28/2018 12:24:00 PM Thank you, Yazmin! Pleased to meet you :) Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 3/28/2018 3:12:00 AM Beautiful. Good luck for the contest. Kai Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/28/2018 12:25:00 PM Thank you, Kai for your lovely comments and good luck wishes. Your visit is truly appreciated. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

Leanne Lovejoy-Burton Date: 3/26/2018 11:59:00 PM All aside with the alliteration, this poem is very delicately constructed, like fine lace. You had me at go, "Trickle tender tears - those that take their time born to bathe and baptize bereavement"...beautiful Su. Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 3/27/2018 8:51:00 PM I relish your beautiful response to my poem Leanne. Your appreciation is truly heartwarming and means so much to me. Many thanks for your kind comments. Warmest wishes. ~Susan

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