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A Notional Ekphrasis in Alexandrine couplets.

Microsoft Bing: DALL-E 2

Memento on the Moon

Memento on the Moon, our demise that’s too soon—
since ancient moral laws, our reasoning had flaws.
The Ten Commandments bold, the wisdom of old told,
its light spread in a rush, but now collective hush.
Man’s creation will bloom, like destructive mushroom 
casts the atomic streams over our shattered dreams.
Echoes of progress vast – tyranny’s shadow cast,
encapsulated whim in firmament now swim.
The paradox of Man of should he if he can,
or must he heed balance between greed and lost glance?
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Anaya Avatar
April 9, 2025 at 5:55 AM
A lesson of mankind's image and decline, a subtle looking mushroom cloud brings more depth, I think, Suzette this one has me quite excited~
Richards Avatar
April 9, 2025 at 6:10 AM
I hope that this contest gets the creative juices flowing as the design has long been in the making - waiting for it to coincide with Duke 's visit to the moon :)
Empress Avatar
April 3, 2025 at 3:43 AM
The ending, with the question, is profound and thought provoking, as mankind since forever has been full of greed, and has led to so many downfalls due to that! I must say in this not only the depth of what youv delivered but also assonance and wordplay and how youv articulated lines in such a catchy cadence is why this left me in awe! Admiring the beauty of your soulfully meaningful poem! Best wishes if for a contest! Sending you light always dear suzette!
Richards Avatar
April 5, 2025 at 11:25 PM
Thank you for the encouraging comment, Ink. I am toying with the idea of using this poem in my next contest challenge.
Goldsmith Avatar
March 24, 2025 at 10:41 AM
I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Great Picture... They need to bring back The Ten Commandments. Things went down hill when they took them out. Have a blessed spring day writing away.........
Richards Avatar
March 31, 2025 at 1:54 AM
Thank you, Paula:)
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