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Melting Wax , Burn My Hand

melting wax , burn my hand , flowing down , like a droplet, white in color , round as a band , melting wax , burn my hand . killing me , burning me , ruining me , destroying me , doing something , nothing good , same as a piece of burning wood . giving me light , during night , badder than a bulb , better than nothing , help me , or do something , melting wax , burn my hand . curtains on fire , running , I'm tired ! not on time , I'm fired melting wax , burn my hand !!!

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Date: 9/18/2013 7:52:00 AM
very interesting.....not a subject people usually write about...making this a very good poem.
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Date: 8/20/2013 6:43:00 PM
I sure felt the burn in this one... ouch. That melting wax is a great metaphor in this very imaginative poem :)
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Date: 8/16/2013 7:48:00 AM
Very powerful write, Saanvi! The pain come through in every line...we all have issues we deal with...I hope in the end you don't concentrate on the pain, but on the LIGHT! :) Thanks for your visits!
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Date: 8/14/2013 2:22:00 PM
The tone is painful. LIke you are hurting! I liked the repeating of the main line in this one.
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Saanvi Dua
Date: 8/15/2013 1:22:00 AM
thanks !!
Date: 8/14/2013 8:53:00 AM
Sannvi, hope you find the light you need,,,, a raw feeling,,, painful images... xox~ Linda
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Saanvi Dua
Date: 8/15/2013 1:23:00 AM
Thanx for the sweet visit and comment !!
Date: 8/14/2013 5:50:00 AM
Nice symbol and imagery in this poem. I like the rhythm. "melting wax , burn my hand ". Nice alteration.
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Saanvi Dua
Date: 8/15/2013 1:23:00 AM
Thank you soooo much !!! ;))

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