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Melting Snowball: Wars Hold

Silver blades in deathmatch, sound of thunder, lightning cuts flesh in half. Robotic feet march, shaking redwood trees, frightening bird wings. Bobbing heads in claustrophobic helmets, decomposing. Cannonballs block out the sunny skies — fate’s abysm.* Fat furry rats scurry, from trench to trench that reeks, With dead men’s bones and meat, like drowning flotsam. Tears like a raging hurricane scream out, For their mother’s arms to hold them tight. How is it, the sun’s glow appears? The nightmare’s invisible. You tuck your son in bed Then kiss his sweet head And shake with fear. Will war grab His soul? NO! 3/19/2018 Line Gauthier’s A Melting Snowball Contest *syllable counter counted abysm as two syllables but dictionary has 3

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Date: 4/19/2018 10:50:00 AM
Goodness! Congratulations on your win with this write of war's horror. Compelling read.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/19/2018 1:36:00 PM
Thanks, Susan!
Date: 4/18/2018 3:51:00 AM
Congratulations, Kim on your win with a fine poem.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2018 8:50:00 AM
Thanks, Subimal!
Date: 4/17/2018 8:07:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Kim.. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2018 8:50:00 AM
Thanks, Eve! :)
Date: 4/17/2018 12:08:00 PM
- Best wishes and congratulations with your 3rd place in the contest, Kim :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2018 8:50:00 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise!
Date: 4/17/2018 11:11:00 AM
such vivid imagery Kim, lets hope our children never have to face the horror of war. congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/18/2018 8:49:00 AM
I agree with you! Thanks, Jan!
Date: 4/17/2018 10:35:00 AM
Congrats on your bronze medal finish, Kim. Well done with this poem of impending doom.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/17/2018 10:49:00 AM
Thanks so much, Line! <3
Date: 3/21/2018 3:22:00 PM
You chose a great theme to this form with. To allow you to end with a resounding NO to WAR. I am a bit confused on whether to reduce line by line with syllables or words. Maybe I will have to see other examples or talk with Line on how to do this. I think her contest gives different options? (looks like you did syllables) GREAT imagery.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/21/2018 6:37:00 PM
Yes, there were different options! Thank you, Andrea!
Date: 3/21/2018 8:31:00 AM
I love the twist, the comparison of domestic sweetness to war hell was well delivered to hard smack the contrast (if you will.) As much as the first lines were dark and bothersome, the end was poetry shedding light on a feeling, a truth that all should ponder. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/21/2018 6:39:00 PM
Thanks so much CayCay! I appreciate the comment!
Date: 3/19/2018 6:51:00 AM
You did this form very well Kim, some great lines in this.. good luck in the contest..
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/19/2018 6:53:00 AM
Thank you, dear Silent!

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