Melting Snowball: Wars Hold

Silver blades in deathmatch, sound of thunder, lightning cuts flesh in half.
Robotic feet march, shaking redwood trees, frightening bird wings.
Bobbing heads in claustrophobic helmets, decomposing.
Cannonballs block out the sunny skies — fate’s abysm.*
Fat furry rats scurry, from trench to trench that reeks,
With dead men’s bones and meat, like drowning flotsam.
Tears like a raging hurricane scream out,
For their mother’s arms to hold them tight.
How is it, the sun’s glow appears?
The nightmare’s invisible.
You tuck your son in bed
Then kiss his sweet head
And shake with fear. 
Will war grab
His soul?
NO!


3/19/2018
Line Gauthier’s A Melting Snowball Contest

*syllable counter counted abysm as two syllables but dictionary has 3
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Gentry Avatar
April 19, 2018 at 10:50 AM
Goodness! Congratulations on your win with this write of war's horror. Compelling read.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 19, 2018 at 1:36 PM
Thanks, Susan!
Sinha-Roy Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 3:51 AM
Congratulations, Kim on your win with a fine poem.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 8:50 AM
Thanks, Subimal!
Roper Avatar
April 17, 2018 at 8:07 PM
Congratulations on your win, Kim.. Hugs Eve ~`*
Rodrigues Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 8:50 AM
Thanks, Eve! :)
Andresen Avatar
April 17, 2018 at 12:08 PM
- Best wishes and congratulations with your 3rd place in the contest, Kim :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Rodrigues Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 8:50 AM
Thank you, Anne-Lise!
Allison Avatar
April 17, 2018 at 11:11 AM
such vivid imagery Kim, lets hope our children never have to face the horror of war. congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Rodrigues Avatar
April 18, 2018 at 8:49 AM
I agree with you! Thanks, Jan!
Gauthier Avatar
April 17, 2018 at 10:35 AM
Congrats on your bronze medal finish, Kim. Well done with this poem of impending doom.
Rodrigues Avatar
April 17, 2018 at 10:49 AM
Thanks so much, Line! <3
Dietrich Avatar
March 21, 2018 at 3:22 PM
You chose a great theme to this form with. To allow you to end with a resounding NO to WAR. I am a bit confused on whether to reduce line by line with syllables or words. Maybe I will have to see other examples or talk with Line on how to do this. I think her contest gives different options? (looks like you did syllables) GREAT imagery.
Rodrigues Avatar
March 21, 2018 at 6:37 PM
Yes, there were different options! Thank you, Andrea!
Godwin Avatar
March 21, 2018 at 8:31 AM
I love the twist, the comparison of domestic sweetness to war hell was well delivered to hard smack the contrast (if you will.) As much as the first lines were dark and bothersome, the end was poetry shedding light on a feeling, a truth that all should ponder. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
Rodrigues Avatar
March 21, 2018 at 6:39 PM
Thanks so much CayCay! I appreciate the comment!
One Avatar
March 19, 2018 at 6:51 AM
You did this form very well Kim, some great lines in this.. good luck in the contest..
Rodrigues Avatar
March 19, 2018 at 6:53 AM
Thank you, dear Silent!
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