Melancholic

A true picture of melancholy you paint here, Hiya:) congratulations:) p.s: soupmail:)

Lovely Hiya. Each line exquisite in your penning. Congratulations! :)

Melancholic could not be described more aptly - your first line 'dear Hiya , 'I'm sunbird of the sketched skyline' such bliss, such freedom, in contrast to your last line 'Inhaling gossamer death tonight' which symbolizes such darkness and sadness - this brief write tells how fabulous and eloquent you are in creating poetry with stunning imagery. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

- Congratulations on your win in the contest, Hiya :) - hugs

beautifully written, with lovely alliteration and imagery, but with a dark undercurrent - congrats on your win in the contest :)

great description of melancholy!

Remember a one liner should be on one line, even when it over flows it is not a paragraph.. Congratulations on your win in the contest.

Though short , your poem is a crystallised gem of fire and feeling.... Hiya. The phrase 'ebony moonflowers' suggests a lot. The 'sunbird tangled in gossamer death' is so evocative. Like a true artist, through suggestions, you have portrayed a grievous picture of one drowning in the whirlpool of melancholy! Incredibly beautiful and acutely touching.

Dear Hiya, your exceptional verse is a potent little package of poetry. "Ebony moonflowers" is powerfully evocative and a great lead into your last impactful line for a grand finale! The contrast between a "sunbird" and "ebony moonflowers" is striking and sparkles of alliteration enhance the deep beauty of your artistry. Your last line is a soulful mournful poetic gem! Your golden pen shines ever brighter in the darkness. Warmest wishes, sweet friend.. ~Susan

Sometimes a short form is better when you pack a powerful punch as you do, Hiya. Your imagery is soothing and message clear. Have a joyful weekend, my friend. Bill

Dear Hiya, your poem is a wonderful depiction to your high poetry skills. You manage to convey so much thoughts in only a few lines. Your great imagery and metaphorical diction shed more beauty layers to this already stunning brevity. Blessings

The metaphor to this is very dark and deep. Sometimes, we find ourselves in dark places, though....emphasis on 'find' :)

Hello Hiya, you listened to my requests of writing short and simple language poems. To me the present poem is a masterpiece. Thanks.

Such a beautiful, descriptive verse dear Hiya with a very dramatic, profound ending. Great alliterations and imagery as always. Keep shining and believing. Hugs to you. Xx :):)

- Even in death you bring beauty, Hiya :) - hugs

Wonderfully metaphoric depiction, Hiya. Much you say in just a few words. I hear the tenor of melancholy you conveyed, so succinctly.

ebony moonflower. What a flower description leading to death. Excellent verse. Your poems deserve admiration. Blessings.

Beautiful bold alliteration! Ebony moonflowers? Sooo creative. Love how you put this together Hiya!

I am absolutely loving the alliterations and flow of this mini poem where you’ve expressed melancholia so well! I especially love the opening line here “ im sunbird” and “ sketched skyline” “ soaring across soft sheaths” so creative, beautiful imagery and choice of words. “ ebony moonflowers” the kind of words i would like to use too! So good! I love that! “ inhaling gossamer death tonight” darkness can be beautified , and thats what poets do, turn pain into poetRy. And you’ve done just that!