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Form:  Infinite Dot Thirteen Verse

Is a rare form of poetry, where by the poem is made up of thirteen lines and within the poem has interspersed dots for emphasis on the spoken word. However the total number of dots must add up to 33, and the additions to arrive at this number must have significance. Examples would be 16/17 or 10/10/13 or mystical such as 12/12/9 and you can subdivide the 12 say as 7/5 to equal 12. In this example I Used the combination 6/3//7/5/12

 

All my friends have..... gone Underground ....... they rest at my bare feet Leaves blowing sequestered on this barren earth Grey skies melodies of wistful sad notes Lovers too... have died on me .....underground they lie The heart is a terrible cavern of loss Alone, I amble to and fro Knowing full well I too have died Infinite is Death My judgment soon to arrive ............underground

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 10/21/2015 7:05:00 PM
TRULY BRILLIANT WRITE MY FRIEND! A7
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 11/29/2015 1:45:00 AM
Thank you Robert!
Date: 4/28/2015 8:55:00 AM
Good lines and a wonderful message relayed so plainly and transparently. A def7
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 5/2/2015 10:32:00 PM
You are very kind Funom
Date: 4/6/2015 1:30:00 AM
Hey you...this is a lovely sad poem...Hauntingly sad...We lose many we love and death....is never far. However, there is a living death as well. Thanks for introducing this form. I use those dots all the time!!! Congrats on your amazing POTD!!! :)
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 10:32:00 AM
Thanks Eileen, you have to use the right number of dots, you should give it a go!!!! ops I mean a go...............
Date: 4/5/2015 8:47:00 PM
My friend I love the form and your poem is excellent. congrats .....Seren
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 10:30:00 AM
Thank you my friend!
Date: 4/4/2015 8:08:00 PM
Amazing write, Arthur!I feel the depths of pain and sorrow. Congrats on being chosen TPOD!! Happy Easter to you and yours...hugs, Rhonda
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 10:30:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words!
Date: 4/4/2015 6:30:00 PM
Sincere congratulations on this fine write being selected for POTD. Have a happy Easter, Arthur! Hugs, Kimberly
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 10:30:00 AM
Thank you Kimberly, a belated Happy Easter to you too!
Date: 4/4/2015 3:09:00 PM
Well done on the poem of the day Arthur..'
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/6/2015 10:29:00 AM
Thank you very much Joe, much appreciated!!
Date: 4/4/2015 10:45:00 AM
Oops! Congratulations your write being chosen poem of the day!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:20:00 PM
Thanks again!!!!!
Date: 4/4/2015 9:23:00 AM
Congratulations on Poem of the Day. Very heartbreaking, good write. Happy Easter
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:20:00 PM
Thank you Eve, I hope you have a very happy Easter holidays!
Date: 4/4/2015 9:12:00 AM
Horray, poem of the day!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:19:00 PM
:) Thanks Richard!
Date: 4/4/2015 8:45:00 AM
A depressing beauty..thanks...Peter.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:19:00 PM
Thanks Peter, much appreciated!
Date: 4/4/2015 8:42:00 AM
This is a mega poem. Keep it up! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:18:00 PM
Thank you Mathew! :) much appreciated!
Date: 4/4/2015 8:32:00 AM
Just an excellent write my friend. A Fav!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:18:00 PM
Thank you brother, very kind of you! Hope you are doing well!
Date: 4/4/2015 8:31:00 AM
Grats on poem of the day! Judgments awaits us all, no one survives death, all the more reason to live spectacularly, hugs babe xxx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:17:00 PM
Thank you Cas xoxo
Date: 4/4/2015 8:22:00 AM
Congratulations Arthur on your selection for Poem Of the Day, well deserved. Great lament ,much enjoyed.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:17:00 PM
Thanks Robert much appreciated!!!
Date: 4/4/2015 6:58:00 AM
This is good piece, more of sorrow. Well done arthur.
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:16:00 PM
Thank you so much for your nice comment!
Date: 4/4/2015 6:16:00 AM
Arthur I am so so delighted for getting Poem of the Day - I am full of admiration for your creativity - simply outstanding! Hugs jan xxx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:16:00 PM
Why thank you, being surrounded by such fine writers is great inspiration!
Date: 4/4/2015 1:01:00 AM
Ahh when loniliness replaces solitude..Yes We d feel that way Arthur,but We know that We can dig and dig from that underground ,and that warm light od the sun on our face,would make us remember ,its beautiful to breathe and taste the serene solitude without the damp cold loniliness.Have a blessed Easter dear friend.A deep poem indeed!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/4/2015 12:14:00 PM
You are so kind and beautiful, thank you!
Date: 4/3/2015 10:13:00 AM
This is very cool, thanks for the explanation Arthur. May your Easter be significant!
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 4/4/2015 2:05:00 AM
Mmmmmm.......chocolatttte!
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/3/2015 8:14:00 PM
Sadly Richard my Easter is too significant, I bought many chocolates for Timmy and Maya the week before and then proceeded to eat them all, I now have to rush out and buy replacement chocolates!!! :)
Date: 4/3/2015 3:25:00 AM
Our bodies might die but our souls live on...excellent my friend
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/3/2015 8:17:00 PM
Thanks Tim, for sure the Habs are dying sadly LOL Haven't been here much, am catching up on my reading and commenting now! Cheers
Date: 4/3/2015 2:33:00 AM
deep and sad ... and outstanding write my friend ... the imagery is awesome ... the picture is so stark and to me captures the feeling of isolation ... am in total awe my friend 7 and faves:-) Hugs jan xx
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Arthur Vaso
Date: 4/3/2015 8:17:00 PM
You dear are very very sweet! Thank you

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