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Meadow Cloaked In White

meadow cloaked in white
   lambent moon in ebon sky
   lustrous winter night



December 8th, 2019
Nature Haiku
for Tania Kitchin

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 1/3/2020 6:10:00 AM

I also love the lambent moon in ebon sky. Wonderful, Kai

Lin Lane
Date: 1/5/2020 5:39:00 AM

Thank you very much, Kai.

John Hamilton

Date: 12/18/2019 5:47:00 PM

Lambent moon in ebon sky, Tania HAS to love this one! Lambent is one of my fave words!

Lin Lane
Date: 12/18/2019 5:52:00 PM

If 8th is considered a win, then I suppose she liked it well enough. How kind of you to check. Thank you. I KNOW that line appeals to you...me, too.

John Hamilton
Date: 12/18/2019 5:50:00 PM

I see you won, and deservedly so, nice Lin!

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 12/14/2019 6:17:00 AM

Another couple of remarks on this outstanding haiku. This is trochee, as far as I can see. The Russian haiku I mentioned is dactyl. It would be fun to do something like that with iambus. Hm, it's kinda challenge)

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 12/14/2019 7:42:00 AM

Done)

Lin Lane
Date: 12/14/2019 6:25:00 AM

I would love to read it presented that way, Kurt. If it pleases you, write it in that style.

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 12/13/2019 11:07:00 AM

How come rhymes in haiku?! I saw it once in Russian, never in English, let alone alliterations and so on. Amazing! Great thing and win, as far as I can seeing)

Lin Lane
Date: 12/13/2019 3:21:00 PM

I am very pleased by your commendation, and apologize if you think I assumed you didn't know how to write Haiku. I don't stray from the 5-7-5 form. I'm guess I'm old school.

Kurt Ravidas
Date: 12/13/2019 11:55:00 AM

I know how to make haiku (who doesn't?). That's why I exalt this outstanding one. It's off the charts.

Lin Lane
Date: 12/13/2019 11:30:00 AM

Haiku usually does not rhyme, but it can include the repetition of words or sounds. Many traditional rules of Haiku have been broken, rhyming being one. It was not intentional that my 1st and 3rd lines rhymed, but when all 3 lines are read in one breath(as Haiku should be) it flows lyrically to my ears. Thank you for the interest.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/12/2019 6:57:00 PM

love the two L words you used here. And aha! You are a double L word named lady!! congrats on the win. Long time no see.

Peter W Iversen

Date: 12/11/2019 10:41:00 AM

Makes me enjoy the snow, very nice

Lin Lane
Date: 12/12/2019 2:46:00 PM

I'm glad you enjoyed something from this Haiku. Thanks.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 12/10/2019 7:23:00 AM

Thank you for sharing. I have not seen proper snow for ages. Maybe this year ...Kind wishes, Kai

Lin Lane
Date: 12/10/2019 7:55:00 AM

Thank you very much, Kai. I saw enough snow while living in Colorado for 4 years. Now I'm back in New Orleans where winter sets the stage with greenery and a mid temp of 40. I do miss the first snow, though.