Richard Lamoureux Poet Blitz

Me Between Minds

Smile little child
Smile for me
Me who is you
Me who cries
Cries for her
Cries because
Because I knew
Because I was there
There is no excuse
There was a way
Way back then
Way too much pain
Pain we carry
Pain we hid
Hid behind smiles
Hid under years
Years passed quickly
Years changed nothing
Nothing was done
Nothing was a difficult easy
Easy does it
Easy to wait
Wait for the right moment
Wait for courage
Courage to say
Courage to feel
Feel our way here
Feel all those feeling
Feelings will be hurt
Feelings can heal
Heal all of us
Heal what was taken
Taken childhood
Taken trust
Trust is hard
Trust me
Me who was there
Me who witnessed
Witnessed too much
Witnessed more
More than I knew
More of the shame
Shame on him
Shame games
Games in the dark
Games played with our minds
Minds controlled by need
Minds bound by unspoken
Unspoken
Need

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Edlynn Nau May 28, 2016 at 4:32 PM I had trouble with: "Nothing was a difficult easy." It stopped my flow and reading. Suggestion: Nothing was difficult, all was easy? Other than this tiny glitch, I loved this! So well done. You made me WANT to try a Blitz & I haven't wanted to before. Ha! My favorite: "Wait for the right moment, Wait for courage, courage to say, courage to feel" YES! Richard Lamoureux May 29, 2016 at 7:53 AM What I am saying with the line is how easily it is to do nothing and ultimately it leads to other difficulties in life when we bury our pain.

Eileen Manassian May 27, 2016 at 12:00 PM WOW...this was an awesome write, Richard. So many lines speak to my heart tonight. My heart is heavy. This is a lovely thing to write about. I trust you...because you have integrity. Many....don't. Hugs Richard Lamoureux May 28, 2016 at 1:14 AM You are sweet, I try my best to live with integrity. Thanks for the visit, I'm sorry your heart is heavy.

Timothy Hicks May 26, 2016 at 1:51 PM .... and yet again you excel with the Blitz! The memories and the heartache felt absolutely real to me, as if I was living it. You ought to do this more often! What I love about the blitz is that I almost never know what it's going to be about when you start ... you can't control it, but rather you just got let if flow out, and unlock whatever is there inside of you. Richard Lamoureux May 26, 2016 at 2:44 PM It's a combination of letting it flow and still maintaining focus. Kind of like riding a wild bronco, it's easy to get thrown off! Thanks for commenting Timothy.

Miraj Raha May 26, 2016 at 12:24 PM breathe,sir Richard,breathe.your every line is a rhetoric,punching my heart over and over again.Immaculate write. Richard Lamoureux May 26, 2016 at 7:21 PM Thanks Miraj, a great comment.;0)

John Hamilton May 26, 2016 at 12:21 PM What a powerful write Richard, a coherent theme throughout, forcefully short expressions, loved the form. Is there a syllable restriction to each line? I will try it maybe. Richard Lamoureux May 26, 2016 at 7:26 PM Not that I am aware of John. It is a difficult form to stay on point with but when you do the results are powerful.

Tim Smith May 26, 2016 at 11:39 AM Not many times will this form carry a message throughout but I got everything you said Richard. Many times it is hard to speak up when we are on the "inside". Once we are removed from the situation we can see and speak out. Richard Lamoureux May 26, 2016 at 7:27 PM Even then the truth can be held back for many years.

Lukas Ficklin May 26, 2016 at 9:18 AM WOW Richard.. this is excellent! I've been looking at this form to try it. Great example here. I hope you don't mind me saying that the proper homonym in lines 12 and 39 is "too much"... an extra o in too signifies an amount. :) I will come back to read this one again for sure. Thanks for sharing Richard Lamoureux May 26, 2016 at 7:28 PM Feel free to speak up any time. Take care. Richard Lamoureux May 26, 2016 at 9:40 AM Thanks Lukas, for some reason I make that same mistake over and over again. If you have time checkout my web page www.wisedummypoet.com I appreciate your visit, welcome to the soup.