Maze

With timid steps and a trembling heart I walked through verdant barren paths. Toward a rusty gate it took my feet Into a garden of roses among the weeds. Carmine flowers, dripping in blood Wrung my heart in pain of fear. They caught me from every side With their lithe and sharp thorny fingers. Raveled in clutches of copious wines Turning and twisting I struggled to escape. Evening shades pirouetting ghosts Trapped in light tracing fiery faces. Pouring perspiration pooled my feet Shedding grappling thoughts I decided to run. Back to the sinuous path, Away from the puzzle of life, Till I reached the black bricked wall, Beyond it I lost my memories, Maze of mind closing behind me. First Place in Maze - 10 Word Challenge Poetry Contest sponsored by A Dear Heart

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Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/1/2020 3:52:00 PM

Hi Jenish, congratulations for your top win with this incredible write! Beautiful interweaving of those 10 challenging words! Hugs. Pandita

Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/1/2020 11:29:00 PM

Thank you Pandita for your kind words.. Have a great day..

Constance La France

Date: 7/1/2020 3:28:00 PM

Jenish, congratulations on your win in my maze contest, excellent writing and a FAV for me, and I love that image too _Constance

Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/1/2020 11:29:00 PM

Thank you Constance.. Your FAV is sweeter than the win.. Thank you for your contest.. It really inspiring our imagination to fly..

Aditi Mishra

Date: 7/1/2020 2:12:00 PM

This is really creative and intriguing Jenish! Love how you unravel the mystery of mind and memories in the maze. Congratulations on your win. Keep writing and inspiring :)

Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/1/2020 11:27:00 PM

Thank you Aditi.. A sweet appreciation from the winner.. I'm delighted..

Sandra Adams

Date: 7/1/2020 6:09:00 AM

wow this is an excellent write...I can see the word choices led us on a similar path with some of the same imagery, though yours was deeper and better... congratulations on your first place win! hugs

Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/1/2020 11:26:00 PM

Thank you Sandra for the appreciation.. Have a great day..

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 7/1/2020 5:07:00 AM

You scripted an amazing maze here.

Jenish Somadas
Date: 7/1/2020 5:10:00 AM

Thank you Kai..

Panagiota Romios

Date: 6/29/2020 6:09:00 AM

One of the best I have ever read at the soup. Thank you. You have a new follower, Jenish in me! Best, best to you. Panagiota xx

Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/29/2020 11:45:00 PM

Thank you Panagiota for your delightful comment.. Takecare always..

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 6/27/2020 12:31:00 PM

This takes you down the twisting path of fear and pain with such evocative skill, I really like 'lithe and sharp thorny fingers' - best wishes for the contest!

Jenish Somadas
Date: 6/29/2020 11:44:00 PM

Thank you Michelle.. I'm happy to know that you liked it..