May We Always Create Together

Might we return to clear, flawful epitomes of our past,
where feelings bloomed into unoccupied realities,
worlds where we roamed, explored, traversed in our seditious verse…

Where conviction engraved our rivals’ lips with lightning bolts of silver, 
raiding their muddled hills with the chaos of our creations,
daring to beguile, snatch, and dissolve, all misjudged resolve…

Were I to grab hold of the passion you once called Father, 
were I to fill your brittle ribs with the epiphanies you have long let lost,
our words would tread along the broken, the troubled and the scorned
melting the creases of anger from every weary brow
challenging and regenerating the one you are now…

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 5/23/2015 6:39:00 AM
Hey, your words are potent like the creator (forces of nature for those of us who do not anthropomorphize). They have lightning bolt power. You also use all kinds of allusions. So you ain't no lightweight. You know you are a creative genus. Out there all by yourself. I am so impressed, but I do fall easily. It's part of my nature. Though, I can't help it when I read your work.
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Date: 5/23/2015 2:32:00 AM
Ah to have those moments again. Hold on to these memories before they pass. The wisdom of your word mortify me. Always ~Kilmer
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 3:15:00 AM
Thanks so so much, Stephen!!! This poem is in part to one who is struggling in life, and whom I wish I can rekindle a fire that has long gone out. Love ya! Take care! Will be reading lots of your poems! ~Laura
Date: 5/8/2015 1:26:00 PM
Ohhh...I wish I have read this earlier! Such an inspiring creativity, dear Laura. I love your word combines, so effortless, even as you try to deliver a message, it shines through without distracting from the artistic flow. I wasn't here for a day and a half (was counting... lol!), had to attend some seminar. Glad to be back though. A 7! HUgs! :-) Kim
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/9/2015 2:20:00 AM
You've got to be...like one of the sweetest people ever. I love ya Kim! Thanks for the sweetness! ~Laura
Date: 5/7/2015 8:50:00 PM
Were the breath of my wings to touch the spine of your heart our union would avenge the needless worry and sorrow that stifle latent creativity for all...This is a passionate poem of nostalgia and a faith that you can inspire your Love Laura...J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/8/2015 7:02:00 AM
<3 You've got magic in your words Justin, always... ~Laura
Date: 5/7/2015 8:38:00 AM
Your words are beautifully expressed in a sea of swirling phrases that dance upon the tongue and give pause for thought. Emile.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/8/2015 7:00:00 AM
Your comments are always colorful and creative. Thanks immensely Emile~Laura
Date: 5/6/2015 8:57:00 PM
Laura, brilliantly penned, deep and profound, 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, the garden picnic
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/6/2015 11:26:00 PM
Thank you for the kind review! Loved your poem immensely:) ~Laura
Date: 5/6/2015 11:17:00 AM
precious memories. Good poem -JT
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/6/2015 11:23:00 PM
Thanks for reading fellow poet! ~Laura
Date: 5/6/2015 5:19:00 AM
Hello Laura, This one is indeed quite passionate and most compelling. The flow of your free verse and the tenor and power of your words make the reader (and in this case -- this reader) want to read this poem over and over. "Lightning bolts of silver" and "brittle ribs with the epiphanies" are particular image phrases of great import. All I can say is "WOW"!! Enjoyed this one immensely!! A "7" and A FAV!! Best Always, Gary
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Gary Bateman
Date: 5/6/2015 6:51:00 AM
Laura! Thanks so much. I too admire your poetry greatly. You write words of great wisdom so, in you comment below!! We all, from time-to-time, need to feel the healing effect of words and the continuous challenge they bring us as we write and weave our images, themes, and verse as one!! Best Wishes . . . Gary
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/6/2015 6:10:00 AM
Gary! It's you again, brilliant poet. This means a lot coming from you. As you know I admire your poetry greatly. When passionate poets' purpose is to create, one will not settle with another's downtrodden failure. They will raise them up and support them with new refreshed words! Words that will heal and challenge him! ~Laura
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