John Freeman Poet Blank verse

Loves Breach

“Tis pain not concern, life in earth hath become off as vague scorn. 
      The poison of asp drips ahead of her tongue…her honeycomb hath dried… 

       Life sourest as wine gone wild of natural fermenting, 
       wrong of love she chose extreme delusion ere her love of truth. 
       Loose the yoke, chaotic, psychosis, strife let life's people renew.”

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Dr.Ram Mehta August 24, 2011 at 6:22 PM Soup Mail!!!!!!!!!!!

Judy Ball August 24, 2011 at 5:27 PM WWoW! Heavens to Williem Snakesnear, er Shookrear, um Oh you know who I mean. Great job here my friend. Loved it. But then I'm a big Sheepshear fan. ;) God Bless, JB

Dr.Ram Mehta August 24, 2011 at 3:20 PM Very very insightful and engrossing write, john Soup Mail!!!!!

Andrea Dietrich August 23, 2011 at 10:27 PM sounds like she made all the wrong choices, john. I love the line about the asp and the honeycomb!

Sara Kendrick August 23, 2011 at 2:25 PM A different one from you enjoyed reading..I am glad that I chose it to read this afternoon..Sara

Nette Onclaud August 23, 2011 at 12:25 PM my devotional for today, moe.. so wisel written with compassin.. comgats on yoir win in my contest.. i'll start on yours and post soon... btw, i have a new one, hopefully you can check my latest blog! come join..:) huggs and blessings, nette

Fabiyas M V August 23, 2011 at 11:09 AM Thanks for your nice comments,john.This is really wonderful!An exceptional piece............

James Fraser August 22, 2011 at 5:28 PM Oh my, another Bard on the Soup. Terrific poetry John, it reminds me of James Perantaeu's writes, now both of you are leaving the readers smiling :)

Kash Poet August 22, 2011 at 5:15 PM An insightful write here john.enjoyed reading it.

Carolyn Devonshire August 22, 2011 at 2:35 PM The first two lines made me think of Eve in the Garden of Eden, especially the "asp" dripping ahead of her tongue. However, the thought of pain being inflicted on others instead of offering concern is a chilling look at our world. There are many who find it easier to live with delusion than accept the truth. A sad, but powerful perspective on human nature, my friend. Love, Carolyn