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Love Will Always Win

Might make this into a song. Hope you guys like it. --------- I want to save your life with this love I bear, To hold you in my arms and tell you it was always there All around you, the darkness sways But inside you the light still stays I’m sorry my words fail me I’m sorry I’m so weak If only you could see me If only love could speak I want to take you to the top of the mountain And let the rain pour down on you To allow those tears to spurt in fountains To sooth your core of blue But you are strong And words always ring My heart will pull you along With every boil and every sting I’m sorry my words fail me I’m sorry I’m so weak If only you could see me If only love could speak I want to say that I do love you But you cannot hear me until the darkness leaves you So I will wait here with an open hand Hoping, always hoping to understand You are strong Words will always pull you on And the light inside you from deep within Tells me love will always win

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John Hamilton

Date: 4/20/2016 9:09:00 PM

Great lyric, not a lot of difference between song writing and poetry, in music the melody is the key, weak lyrics can be overcome by the melody, the hook is the key.Song writing needs to be elemental(look at coldplay) is much easier than poetry. You have your 4 verses and chorus now you just need a bridge and your done!

Paul Callus

Date: 2/20/2016 4:48:00 AM

Hi Laura...I hope you have made this into a song, and it would be great to listen to it! These are beautiful words, poetical and romantic (nothing mushy!) coming from a sincere heart. Words might fail to describe what a person truly feels, but in your case you got so close to doing so! Great refrain, too! [once I had a song...Words are not Enough....] ~ Warm regards // paul

Valerie Staton

Date: 2/17/2016 11:51:00 PM

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Nice rhythm!

Timothy Hicks

Date: 2/17/2016 12:06:00 AM

A hopeful song that wishes to be understood, and to be embraced wholeheartedly. Your lyric has the rhythm and sincerity to be a good song. I especially enjoyed the mountains-fountains stanza.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/14/2016 3:27:00 PM

Beautiful! Congratulations on POTD Laura! ; )

Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/14/2016 7:19:00 AM

Laura, so sweet and unselfish is this! A great friend you are to the one covered by a shadow. You bring light and healing to this world of ours with your verses and some wonder and joy to those of us lucky enough to read this.

Kp Nunez

Date: 2/11/2016 7:02:00 PM

Great, contemporary heartsong, Laura. Congratulations on your POTD! Kim

Wilfred Aniagyei

Date: 2/11/2016 1:03:00 AM

Strong piece, makes you wanna believe...... Congrats on POtD!!

Michelle James

Date: 2/10/2016 5:40:00 PM

Wonderful write, it would make a wonderful song.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/10/2016 7:19:00 PM

Thanks Michelle, I certainly hope so! I want to make it powerful and sweet. ~Laura

Ralph Sergi

Date: 2/10/2016 12:46:00 PM

Hi Laura: Love will always make you strong. Great POTD!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/10/2016 7:19:00 PM

Yes, Ralph, for certain! Thank you very much! ~Laura

Brian Davey

Date: 2/10/2016 12:27:00 PM

Beautiful words and very heartfelt! Congrats on poem of the day

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/10/2016 7:19:00 PM

Thank you Brian! (: Means a lot. ~Laura

Danea Scates

Date: 2/10/2016 11:53:00 AM

Beautiful read ....

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/10/2016 7:18:00 PM

Thanks very much for stoppin by and reading, Danea. ~Laura

James Inman

Date: 2/10/2016 8:46:00 AM

Beautiful write Laura! A poem full of anguish and love.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/10/2016 7:17:00 PM

Thanks James. Glad you could read! :) ~Laura

Rainbow Promise

Date: 2/10/2016 8:26:00 AM

Great Romanticism! Women waited in the past for their true love, yours will come true too. Keep the faith. Congrats on a well deserved POTD! Hugs, RP.

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/10/2016 7:17:00 PM

True love comes in all shapes and forms. Thank you RP. I really appreciate your thoughts. Always, Laura

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/10/2016 3:38:00 AM

- CONGRATULATIONS - A VERY DESERVED POEM !!!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/10/2016 7:15:00 PM

: D Thanks so much Anne!~Laura

Justin Bordner

Date: 2/9/2016 9:27:00 PM

This weathered, and righteous love will overcome the darkness, your strength will ensure this Poetess. A beautiful harmony of rhyme and tender endurance woman...your love song is pitch perfect in the studio of my heart Laura...Justin A FAV!

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/10/2016 7:14:00 PM

Thanks, sweetheart, can't wait to sit down and put this to music. Hope all's well. ~Laura

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/8/2016 6:13:00 AM

- Dear Laura, I find this poem very beautiful - Enjoy reading, thanks - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/8/2016 8:24:00 PM

Thanks sweet Anne (: I appreciate your visit. ~Laura

Tim Smith

Date: 2/8/2016 3:55:00 AM

Yes, definitely could make it into a song..I’m sorry my words fail me I’m sorry I’m so weak If only you could see me If only love could speak.....that is a very strong verse...well done

Laura Breidenthal
Date: 2/8/2016 8:25:00 PM

Aww, thank you very much, Tim. I'm trying to get a good melody for the chorus. Been busy this week. I wrote this song for a friend who was struggling with deep depression. It kind of just came out, so it's pretty raw right now. I dunno if I wanna change up the words, we'll see where it takes me. Again, thanks for the encouraging words. ~Laura