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For Regina McIntosh's Love Story poetry contest

My voice was mute like featherless songbirds, without vocal chords to sing doting tunes. Sleeping spirit yearned for amorous words, composing twin flames to ignite from fumes. Glance of her eyes and embers kindled bright, like gold moonlight kissing indigo waves. Symphonic stars formed in a lonely night, as we sang among galactic airwaves. Her touch is a cliché of butterflies, her lips kiss like ballads with boundless verse. Without her I can feel my heart capsize, in sickness and in health, she is my nurse. Her name remains on the tip of my tongue, as her love completes lyrics, once unsung.

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Crystol Woods

Date: 5/6/2024 2:19:00 AM

Another home run sonnet...I wish I could express myself so gracefully. Thank you for sharing so others can be inspired! Xo

Duke Beaufort

Date: 5/5/2024 12:55:00 PM

Silent One...Now this is a love story with a happy ending! You compose and parse words with such grace. The poem itself caresses me as a reader.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 5/4/2024 10:05:00 PM

This love story is so touching, with its exceptionally lovely imagery. It's a fave for me, Silent One. :)

Nancy Kaufman

Date: 5/4/2024 10:21:00 AM

Hi Silent One, This is such a touching love story. Best wishes in your contest with Regina."Symphonic stars formed in a lonely night". Absolutely gorgeous imagery in this penning sir.

Tonye George

Date: 5/4/2024 7:00:00 AM

Deeply written dear Silent. We all need that one love that would make us better singers and poets. I love your romantic love poems. We need more men that would tell us how our smile would shake the earth's feet. Her name remains on the tip of my tongue, as her love completes lyrics, once unsung." As it should.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/4/2024 4:37:00 AM

Delightfully romantic poem, SO--words from the heart speak in voice of longing. Beautiful descriptions like: Her touch is a cliché of butterflies, her lips kiss like ballads with boundless verse-- lovely!

Valsa George

Date: 5/3/2024 9:58:00 PM

"Glance of her eyes and embers kindled bright, like gold moonlight kissing indigo waves. Symphonic stars formed in a lonely night, as we sang among galactic airwaves." Highly poetic and deeply romantic. All the images used are so alluring. How the muse in you is rendered a new life and how you sing in galactic airwaves with the very sight of your loved one. A great entry for the contest. All the Best. You are a great sonneteer too, dear Silent One.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/3/2024 9:29:00 PM

Very romantic, indeed. Nothing like a loved one to inspire poetry

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 5/3/2024 6:09:00 PM

My voice was mute like featherless songbirds… Symphonic stars formed in a lonely night… her lips kiss like ballads with boundless verse…Your poetic voice is heard and is lovely!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/3/2024 4:20:00 PM

Very beautiful. You can be quite an amazing sonneteer!

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 5/3/2024 3:56:00 PM

delightful images and colorful words captured the deep desire for a love, for a soulmate. So many outstanding lines, hard to pick just one but this one was memorable for me. 'her lips kiss like ballads with boundless verse. Without her I can feel my heart capsize' An easy flowing read for me. Best wishes for the contest, Sara

Deb M

Date: 5/3/2024 3:48:00 PM

How very beautiful!! Debx

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/3/2024 12:19:00 PM

Wonderful poetry on romantic love and the yearning for a soulmate dear SO. The profound emotions felt for a loved one and the sense of fulfillment and delight that their presence brings are beautifully expressed by you. The poem was already stunning before you used descriptive words to show how intense the feelings were. The use of evocative and charming language such as "amorous," "kindled bright," "galactic airwaves," and "boundless verse" sets a vibrant and enchanting mood. The use of metaphors like "her touch is a cliché of butterflies" and "her lips kiss like ballads" further serves to highlight the loved one's tenderness and attractiveness."

Ink Empress

Date: 5/3/2024 10:54:00 AM

How beautiful! You are one of them that writes sonnets so well! And this is no exception! I absolutely love the love youv expressed in a way that would touch any readers soul and heart. I felt the depth of emotions flowing throughout! You are one of my faves for romantic poetry! So creatively soulful! I especially love “ like gold moonlight kissing indigo waves. Symphonic stars formed in a lonely night,” awwn so ethereal and divine! “ Her touch is a cliché of butterflies” wow! How do you come up with such lines! This truly is a masterpiece! Poetically pleasing and just impeccable! Best wishes for the contest

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/3/2024 10:41:00 AM

Your "Love Story" is a wonderful story/write. One is very lucky if it happens once in a lifetime. "Good Luck" Have a wonderful day...........