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Love Falls

You, my love, you
Entrusted me into the burning arms of fervor,
Rested your knowing fingers upon skin ever glistened with tears
Graced the breath I dared to breathe when moments masterfully collided

We stand upon the edge like devils daring nature’s wrath
Your heels wrap around the very rim that border you and I from the air
The sky blue black vapors swirl into dark wonder vanishing, the stars like eyes flashing
As you whisper fiercely in my ear, daring me to push the limit
Begging me with pupils that reflect my own desires

Your entwining smile rivets in me nerve beyond present night
I squeeze the angels out of you in one melodious measure of movement
Encumbering you in all of me, rattling your frames 
A lasting forest tall as terror thrilled upon a demon possessed storm

I push us off the sheer edge,
As we spiral in the depths of the ocean’s welcoming mouth
The weight of our past and present sufferings melting into complete passion
Cradling us in the bed of her deepest, darkest waters
My lips meeting the substance of your future words
Your tongue running along the traces of silence ever kept
Deep into the screams of inner woe, embellishing warmth from head to toe

Surrounded by the echoey, treasured lines of your heart,
Mastered from the very start
You lift me high into the love falls
Splashes of poetry dispersing my hair all around
Our eyes staring into each other’s
Locked into a world like no other

With revitalizing surety otherwise crippling,
With the deep dip of your sexy soul and perforating body, 
I enter the realm of your rapturous reality
Captured willingly in your picturesque hungers 
Through the very tunnel of your never-ending eyes…
The penetrating roars of your fulfillment take me by surprise

Yes, you, my love, you
Took me there tonight…
For down within those depths with you I would have eagerly allowed
The sorrows and agonies of my doubts to succumb
For inside the ancient oceans of your poetry do we love
We prevail as seraphs released from the prisons of poverty-stricken despair
Their descending smiles fermenting scents of eternal ecstasy


~For Justin Bordner's "Make Love To Me In That Ancient Place" Contest
~Thank you again for inspiring! Lots of love! 

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014

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Date: 11/30/2014 1:27:00 PM
Many congrats on your win Laura:-) Hugs jan xxx
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Date: 11/30/2014 6:51:00 AM
Congratulations Laura on your high placed win with this beautifully written piece.
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Date: 11/29/2014 10:15:00 PM
Congrats Laura :)
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Date: 11/27/2014 9:57:00 AM
sweetly explosive, laura... such a luscious image done with finesse.. huggs
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/27/2014 4:07:00 PM
What a sweet comment, many thanks! I've gottah checkout some of your work!~Laura
Date: 11/26/2014 6:50:00 AM
powerful piece of writing laura very beautifully painted dear friend
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/27/2014 4:06:00 PM
Hey Liam! Thanks for the kind words. I appreciate it! ~Laura
Date: 11/26/2014 1:59:00 AM
Diving into love with you is an adrenaline kiss that could fuel a heart with devoted bliss Laura. What an angellic adventure into daredevil dreams, using a metaphor to make love in the ancient home of true passion, the heart of poet lovers, so smart and beautiful! My heart is charged up, you start this poem with such a vivid rush of wild trust and rough landscape, and finish with such complete and tender affection Laura. You make me crazy happy! A FAV! J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/26/2014 5:15:00 AM
I am delighted this verse brought you happiness! That means so much to me. Given the genius and love you have so generously shared with me through your writings, it is only fair that I return the generosity with this piece. Inspired by the one and only you- you are an incredible writer, and an incredible man, and a lot of credit goes straight to you.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/26/2014 5:15:00 AM
This sweet comment makes me beam. Thank you!! Lots and lots of love! ~Laura
Date: 11/24/2014 4:00:00 PM
Well, well, well... This is quite a passionate write. :o) Such beauty in your words. Soup mail........
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/25/2014 3:55:00 PM
Thanks, Dan. Lots of love sending your way! ~~~ Always, Laura
Date: 11/23/2014 8:29:00 AM
You have described love in a sensual exotic way. The level of passion is so detailed, thai it is more fun reading than you might imagine. Much love hall come your way in this world of ours.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/24/2014 2:52:00 PM
Duke! It's very nice to hear from you. I always look forward to your sweet comments. Glad you had fun reading. .I am grateful for all of the love I have encountered. Even in the darkest of places and the darkest of times, love can be can be found. Sending you love your way! ~Laura
Date: 11/22/2014 1:32:00 PM
The flavors of poets, ah, poets. I've been a bit of an extremist in other ways in life. Love never dies in my mind. Our father in heaven is love actually, so with all things, we never really lose that huh? :) smile, enjoyed some, scared me some.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/24/2014 2:46:00 PM
Cindy, thanks for taking the time to read. I do agree that love never dies, just as God never dies..interesting thoughts, Cindy, I appreciate your input very much. ~Laura
Date: 11/22/2014 5:51:00 AM
I truly do love this poem! It is fluid and lucid - just like water.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/24/2014 2:44:00 PM
Thanks John! I like this comment. Water is a very important element in this poem. Glad you enjoyed this ocean of passion. You are a fantastic poet, and I can't wait to read more from you! ~Laura
Date: 11/22/2014 4:50:00 AM
WOW! Just great Laura.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 11/22/2014 5:31:00 AM
Thank you very kindly, Wayne. I'm excited about this poem and glad it is finished. ~Laura