Lost Love

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She sits and reads, or chatters on the phone
voice lilting, dancing, chirping like a bird,
he sits in the same room with her, alone
and stares at her, his thoughts all go unheard.
He vowed to sacrifice, the day they wed,
have and to hold for better or for worse,
beguiling promises that he was fed
curdled like sour milk into a curse.
Silence between them like a washing line,
passion dried in the wind then put away,
to all around them everything is fine
soiled love can be hung out another day.

When nothing is the bond, then nothing ties
hollow relationships, false smiles and lies


(not for contest, it's a rough draft I finally got round to finishing)

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 2/25/2018 10:03:00 AM
hi Viv you have pointed out todays generation indifferent behaviour to love .........and ....the use of crdled like sour milk has very strong meaning........ i also like the last line which sums up all "When nothing is the bond, then nothing ties hollow relationships, false smiles and lies
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Date: 2/23/2018 9:49:00 PM
Liked two lines about, promises curdled like sour milk, Wish what you do and how you do it could be taught. I'd be in line. bbn
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Date: 2/8/2018 3:16:00 PM
gosh, I hope it is completely fictional. It paints a dismal picture but it does it quite well! I really like this sonnet.
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Date: 2/7/2018 8:24:00 AM
This has touched a nerve with me Viv. My X husband and I were experts at small talk.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 2/8/2018 3:14:00 AM
yes, Jean, sadly a silent siren warning. Viv x
Date: 2/4/2018 9:40:00 AM
Powerful and so easy to relate to, Lovely build up and delivery, Viv. Definitely another FAVE for me.
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Viv Wigley
Date: 2/8/2018 3:14:00 AM
Thanks, Line, pleased you like it. Regards, Viv
Date: 2/4/2018 1:32:00 AM
Wow Mr Viv what an awesome sonnet - I am sure there are many that can relate to this sad scenario when a relationship is floundering but they still stay together. I adore this line - 'The silence ties them like a washing line, passion dried in the wind then put away,'. Into my faves:-) hugs jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 2/4/2018 2:24:00 AM
yes it works much better my friend:-) hugs jan xx
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Viv Wigley
Date: 2/4/2018 1:35:00 AM
Thanks, Jan, I was just closing the draft when I modified that line to 'silence between them like a washing line', which I think works better. Viv x
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