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Lost In a Maze

A cryptic note:  
“Meet me in the middle of Nowhere,
Tonight when the moon is full.”
What is my wife playing at? Is this her idea of a honeymoon?
Below is a picture of a garden,
With a large maze in it.

Nothing to do but obey.
The moon has barely risen.
I see a sign: The Opening to Nowhere
Why do I tremble?

I go in and soon get lost
In the sinuous paths.
It is a worse puzzle in the night.
Twisting, turning back
Only to find a wall of thick foliage.
I am trapped but will not give up.

Suddenly I notice 
A small opening in the foliage.
So I cheat and find myself in the middle of the circuit.
In the middle is a sun dial,
A torch and a note:
“What are you waiting for?
I’m in bed waiting.”

The problem is how to get out.
Too complicated.
The moon shines on me
By the time I find my way out 
I’ll be dead tired,
Sleeping in my bed.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Rose  Avatar
December 29, 2023 at 2:38 PM
lol this is so creative congrats on your top 100
Goldsmith Avatar
December 29, 2023 at 8:45 AM
Congratulations on being on the "100 Best New Poems" list for Soup. A creative/fun write. Have a great/wonderful day/2024 writing away.................
Rodrigues Avatar
November 5, 2023 at 10:52 AM
Love this! Well done! A fave. Hugs ~ Kim
Hind Avatar
November 4, 2023 at 4:31 PM
A poem of angst... I could feel the spiral of your feelings.
Seeker Avatar
November 4, 2023 at 3:35 AM
How creative can you get? Another amazing write from, Victor-the-romantic
Baker Avatar
November 3, 2023 at 5:05 PM
I like the way you think, Victor, and the way you put those thoughts into poetic form. I enjoyed this mystery poem; the maze was intriguing to say the least. The ending had a unexpected twist ... made it all the better. Thanks for sharing your talent with us, my friend. Bill
Buehler Avatar
November 3, 2023 at 4:07 PM
Intriguing, mysterious and romantic, with traces of humor, this story takes the reader on a delightful, moonlight adventure. Best wishes.
Roper Avatar
November 3, 2023 at 1:13 PM
"What are you waiting for? I’m in bed waiting.” She got you :) Some times being tired are the best,, She has power over you. :) Love the poem my friend.... hugs
Eslinger Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 11:06 PM
Victor! Straight out, a Fav! Mind bending, mind expanding! Profound imagination! “Path to nowhere” is provocative, slightly fearsome. And such an acceptale, cathertic ending, not a bit contrived. A superbly told vision. Huge hugs! sally
Sharma  Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 8:19 PM
Woah, you've so creatively crafted this piece and described the chaotic imageries of being trapped in a maze.. Quite metaphorical as well! Your wordplay is impeccable throughout and the lines flow so well together! Wonderfully delivered in a storytelling way..
Rolland Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 4:35 PM
a deep meaning about going out of this mess, enjoyed your precious and thougtful poem, thanks poet
Rose  Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 2:41 PM
lol, you have such a creative imagination, you never disappoint me when I drop in to your poetry, love this , Victor, I can see the young man in you :)
Kendrick Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 2:19 PM
Ahhh!! When the veil between the living and dead is the thinnest, you go in the maze trying to find your wife, but only in a dream. Very romantic in specific way. Thanks for sharing your creativity with us. Sara K
Dietrich Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 12:58 PM
haha. I really like this. One time I went into a maze with my son when he was 8 years old. We got SO lost and it was dark when we finally got it. I really hate mazes
Yvonne Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 11:30 AM
Deep & inspirational. I love this particular piece of writing. The overall metaphor & the magnificen twist at the end. A fave for me. I’ve put up a poem if you have time to give it a read. I’d love some feedback.
Anaya Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 10:22 AM
We get lost in a maze, labyrinth we find ourselves. I just saw "The Shining" for the first time...so scary reminded me of your maze poem twist and turns of life's traps! Enjoyed. xhugs ~Anaya
Poet Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 10:05 AM
Victor, you have really strong storytelling talents. A metaphorical portrayal of life, which is like being trapped in a maze with few exits and few ways out.
DiMino Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 8:55 AM
Lol! Love it. Freewill can seem like a maze, predetermined by the gardener. Blessings my friend.
Pandit Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 5:44 AM
A metaphor for life--being lost in a maze and hard to escape. Splendid story telling, Victor.
Ball Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 5:06 AM
You never fail to impress me with such a great imagination and way with words. You spin quite a tail. A great beginning for a short story. Loved it. Gods Bless, JB
Empress Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 4:27 AM
Beautiful storytelling and flow of words! Love the opening and ending the most! Especially the way you’ve written in a very descriptive manner! Impressive and soulful
Bangalee Avatar
November 2, 2023 at 2:49 AM
in the middle of a puzzled life everything is lost! great to read
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