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Lost Frost Minichu

Between ice and sun, frost swathe— By the last green floor of life; One white blush— bride's cheeks bathe. From the phantasm spinning gossamer fire This stillness after my lies; On one willow's night— my hooks in desire. Nowhere find A fading chime Plies Between ice and sun, frost swathe— This stillness after my lies; Plies.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/16/2024 1:35:00 PM

I bet you score with this one, Paige . Nicely done.

Sotto Poet

Date: 1/12/2024 7:14:00 PM

A great poem about the juxtaposition of light and darkness, life and death, and the fleeting nature of existence, Hilda.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/12/2024 4:13:00 PM

One white blush— bride's cheeks bathe…gossamer fire…my hooks in desire…enjoyed the imagery!

Hiya Sharma

Date: 1/10/2024 6:25:00 PM

Woah, this is an incredible minichu poem, dear Paige.. You've really conquered this form and your creativity shines through, so flawlessly, in that last stanza which flows in an elegant way! I like the imagery of ice and sun here, their ambience makes this poem a very intriguing & spellbinding one! "By the last green floor of life; One white blush— bride's cheeks bathe" Ahh that's so beautifully written. I'm awestruck really! A FAV for me, sending you lots of love & light ~ keep shining :)

Silent One

Date: 1/10/2024 10:56:00 AM

I hope this one is a top winner.. you did it so well..

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/10/2024 10:45:00 AM

I appreciate the contrasts and the phrasing of your words. "Lost Frost" was the perfect title, Paige. I especially liked "between ice and sun, frost swathe--and the stillness after my lies." If this was for a contest, best wishes with this entry. hugs, Sara

Ink Empress

Date: 1/10/2024 12:04:00 AM

You do this form in such an enthusiastic manner as always dear paige. I love the flow of this and how you’ve expressed too. Especially “ Between ice and sun, frost swathe— By the last green floor of life;“ how deep and creative is that! You really do leave me in awe everytime! Pleasure reading this. Sending you light always

Mat Ignacio

Date: 1/9/2024 8:22:00 PM

beautiful phrasings, pairings, contrasts - creatively balanced