Lost

It slides along like snails without a sound Their footprint smears like sludge upon the ground It takes no form but seeps into my heart Where chambers clenched in chaos can’t impart The darkness dampens thoughts with dreaded depth Removing reason renders me inept I feel the fearful fingers of despair The blackness always brings too much to bare I blindly flail at torn and dangling threads Whatever frees me from thoughts in my head Thin webs of spider spun silk so they seem A frantic fall but with a muted scream Now lost in languid waves of numbing fear My heart hopes SUNSHINE finally appears. __________________________________________ March 19, 2018 Sunshine English Sonnet Contest Sponsor: John Hamilton [Verified in howmanysyllables.com]

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Al Juman

Date: 7/4/2018 12:17:00 PM

Excellently composed my friend

Elaine George

Date: 4/12/2018 11:50:00 PM

I AGREE WITH SUSAN. This is a wonderful sonnet, Judith

Susan Ashley

Date: 4/10/2018 5:07:00 PM

Hope lives in the light of the heart even in the darkest moments... a deep and emotional sonnet Judy with expressive lines of dark poetic feelings and awesome imagery; 'I blindly flail at torn and dangling threads / Whatever frees me from thoughts in my head' - enthralling! Belated congrats on a well deserved win my lovely NE friend. It is Spring in New England, isn't it..?

Judith S
Date: 4/11/2018 1:50:00 PM

THANK you so much sweet lady! YES ... I think Spring is coming tomorrow !!! ;) I will be out in your neck of the woods to get away from the impending rain in mine! Thank you for your kind visits!! ~Judy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/27/2018 8:37:00 PM

I love the sunshine ending!! Your imagery is great in this sonnet, Judith. So glad you liked my poem today.

Judith S
Date: 3/28/2018 9:03:00 AM

My dear friend Andrea ... thank you for your comments. I do apologize I've been absent of late. Hopefully back on task now :) Although the weather IS starting to finally get nicer ! ~Judy

Yazmin Malik

Date: 3/27/2018 1:41:00 PM

Sunshine on its way :). Smile :)

Judith S
Date: 3/28/2018 9:02:00 AM

Thank you Yazmin for your kind visit :) ~Judy

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/26/2018 10:11:00 PM

Awesome sonnet, Judith. Superbly written. Congrats on a most deserving win.

Judith S
Date: 3/28/2018 9:01:00 AM

Thank you so much Line!! Best, Judy

Ricky Muse

Date: 3/23/2018 11:18:00 PM

Form and topic mesh nicely here. Such a well crafted poem. Thanks for sharing.................peace!

Judith S
Date: 3/28/2018 9:01:00 AM

Thank you for your visit Richard! Appreciate your encouraging comments :) ~Judy

John Hamilton

Date: 3/21/2018 11:06:00 AM

I was happy to see sunshine appear in the last line, I was tempted to not place this one as it was contrary to what I was looking for...but...my my... what an awesomely dark sonnet, I could not ignore the excellence of this piece, congrats Judith.

Judith S
Date: 3/21/2018 3:49:00 PM

Thank you so much John Hamilton for leaving me in!! I wasn't feeling sunshine ... and there was only one spot left in your contest!! And I L O V E writing sonnets :) Best, Judy

Mike Gentile

Date: 3/20/2018 7:43:00 AM

I can really feel the deep emotion in your poem, Judy! many of us get lost in fear, Well done xxoo

Judith S
Date: 3/21/2018 3:47:00 PM

Thank you Mike! The best compliment ever is that you feel an emotion that I write :) (Nice new pic by the way!) Best, Judy

Lewis Raynes

Date: 3/19/2018 6:30:00 PM

wow, this took me on a deep and dark ride, with a glimmer of hope, i can relate to this so much Judy, great writing :)

Judith S
Date: 3/21/2018 3:46:00 PM

Thank you so much Lewis! Exactly how I meant it to read. Many times we ride the same wave my Aussie mate ;)

Jack Ellison

Date: 3/19/2018 3:11:00 PM

Judith my love, this was so moving! Not familiar with this poetic diversion, but enjoyed it as S1 did! Love, Happy Jack XOX

Jack Ellison
Date: 3/19/2018 6:32:00 PM

Nope... toddled over, all by myself!!! My mommy actually still lets me out by myself if I'm a good fellow and promise not to molest the young ladies!!!!!! XOXOX

Judith S
Date: 3/19/2018 5:47:00 PM

Ahhhh my dear Canadian friend!!! I MISS you!!! I must go visit! I've been so absent lately. You always give my spirits a lift. Thank you my dear Jack for your visit today!!! (hmmm ... did our British friend send you my way???) XO ~Judy

Silent One

Date: 3/19/2018 1:51:00 PM

English sonnet is the best in my opinion...You write angst so well... this is a cry for help expressed so deeply through your words...I think John will love it..

Judith S
Date: 3/19/2018 2:25:00 PM

Thank you Silent One!!

Vijay Pandit

Date: 3/19/2018 1:09:00 PM

A beautiful sonnet..expressive and full of feelings..you captured the emotions splendidly, Judy! Best for a win.

Judith S
Date: 3/19/2018 2:15:00 PM

Thank you Vijay !!! :)