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Loss

LOSS

sitting on the bus
watching shops pass by
passengers reflected exit like ghosts
she’s gone
and another      and another


in the park
by a phone booth
wanting to call my love
sudden shade startles me
sun behind a cloud


Dave Austin

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 8/18/2015 11:32:00 AM
This is so descriptive!! :)
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Date: 1/10/2015 2:48:00 PM
Wow, strangers leaving the bus heading for their own destinations. Not a good time to take a shortcut through the park, Daver! Maybe I watch too much television? Yesterday I'd been invited out to dinner, had a lecture on being silly. When as the other battled to remove a slippery shrimp tail, the whole shrimp flew into my glass of wine. Sheesh, silly isn't always by choice.:) Love, Mikki
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Date: 1/10/2015 7:49:00 AM
Brilliant! A Fav!
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Date: 1/4/2015 3:21:00 PM
just here to say hello!! thanks for your comment today.
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Date: 12/31/2014 1:58:00 AM
I just love these, daver. You are so good with this form.
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Date: 12/30/2014 3:30:00 PM
wrenching and beautiful, daver... one fine quality set of tankas deeply scribed.. higgs abd a blessed new year you!
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Date: 12/30/2014 2:50:00 PM
Sad one..I hope just a work and not an actual recent happening. Very descriptive work..Thanks for stopping by. Sara
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Date: 12/30/2014 10:21:00 AM
Very nice...effective imagery.
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Date: 12/30/2014 10:13:00 AM
Ahh yes Daver, Indifference, immediacy, tragedy and awareness..' well done with this bitter-sweet one..
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