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Submerged in his fanciful palette of feigned perfection his fetid smile suffused through the cold laps of the sun. A lantern of ruffled acquiescence, a maquillage of stiff gaze of giggles. The bowels of his heart soaked in muddy threads of rejection, forever lost in the pillows of bruised winds. Alone in the oysters of sorrow, blemishes orchestrate in the valley of his fermented blood. His scars, musty as a tainted weaponized creamy spaghetti. His thoughts enveloped in moulds of decayed grapes. Tears threw in the tunes of stale rhythm. Where have his flavours gone? They have sailed in the crunchiness of a hybrid tree. His textures crumbled in the fangs of misery, buried in the tomb of melancholic barks. Oh, I watch him ride in the incessant anguish of his recurring sail as it echoes through the landscape of his drained soul. Bereft of every genuine chuckle, his sweats a pungent of titan arum. Look, look and you'll see his desperate eyes snare beetles of discombobulation. A delve in his skin puked rashes of anxiety. Each mark a peddle to the oasis of disaster. Each pattern a kiss to depression as mercy killing. In a search for fingers at the expense of his toes, he got penitence in plethora. In scrutiny of the shallow ballet he swirls in, you'll see a mask too stuck to pull out. And in that dance, they are all masked with same lethal mosaic.

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Date: 6/23/2024 5:55:00 AM
In a world of masked men, we see that beneath the layers of their heart, they hide a kind of melancholy, no one can ever surmise. "Oh, I watch him ride in the incessant anguish of his recurring sail as it echoes through the landscape of his drained soul. " I see here a mind plunged in deep misery and dejection. Life is often a tight rope walk for many. The conundrum of life is powerfully delineated here.
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Date: 5/30/2024 9:03:00 AM
WOW!!! I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Your pen was working overtime on this one. Have A Great Day.............
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Tonye George
Date: 5/30/2024 10:02:00 AM
I guess it did. Thank you, Paula. Cheers.
Date: 5/26/2024 9:33:00 AM
I see you are prolific again.. Your poem powerfully conveys themes of sorrow, rejection, and the tension between outward appearances and inner realities. Through its vivid, often grotesque imagery and free verse structure, it creates an intense emotional impact that resonates with the reader. The use of metaphor and symbolism deepens the exploration of the character’s internal struggle, making it a poignant reflection on the nature of suffering and the facades people maintain..
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Tonye George
Date: 5/26/2024 2:42:00 PM
I appreciate your thoughtful, inspiring and insightful comments Dear Silent. Thank you so much. I always appreciate it.
Date: 5/25/2024 9:35:00 PM
beautifully executed - dynamic, bold, powerful last stanza
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Tonye George
Date: 5/26/2024 2:41:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed it Mat. Thank you.
Date: 5/25/2024 5:05:00 PM
a brilliantly constructed poem, Tonye, with some of the most unique but beautiful imagery. Your words captured the emotions of confusion and discombobulation. I felt twinges of sadness, vulnerability and that of being overwhelmed. This is a deep poem and deserves my reading it a number of times. Wishing you a splendid evening, hugs, Sara
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Tonye George
Date: 5/26/2024 2:41:00 PM
Thank you dear Sara.

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