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Submerged in his fanciful palette of feigned perfection his fetid smile suffused through the cold laps of the sun. A lantern of ruffled acquiescence, a maquillage of stiff gaze of giggles. The bowels of his heart soaked in muddy threads of rejection, forever lost in the pillows of bruised winds. Alone in the oysters of sorrow, blemishes orchestrate in the valley of his fermented blood. His scars, musty as a tainted weaponized creamy spaghetti. His thoughts enveloped in moulds of decayed grapes. Tears threw in the tunes of stale rhythm. Where have his flavours gone? They have sailed in the crunchiness of a hybrid tree. His textures crumbled in the fangs of misery, buried in the tomb of melancholic barks. Oh, I watch him ride in the incessant anguish of his recurring sail as it echoes through the landscape of his drained soul. Bereft of every genuine chuckle, his sweats a pungent of titan arum. Look, look and you'll see his desperate eyes snare beetles of discombobulation. A delve in his skin puked rashes of anxiety. Each mark a peddle to the oasis of disaster. Each pattern a kiss to depression as mercy killing. In a search for fingers at the expense of his toes, he got penitence in plethora. In scrutiny of the shallow ballet he swirls in, you'll see a mask too stuck to pull out. And in that dance, they are all masked with same lethal mosaic.

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Date: 7/1/2024 5:09:00 AM
Stunning, beautifully composed piece, Tonye. Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 6/26/2024 11:03:00 AM
Congratulations Tonye, your win is well deserved! I haven't yet caught the heart of this piece but with repeated reading and study I know it will hit me. For now all I can comment on is the emotional toll it struck in me... sorrow, disgust, dread, confusion, and a need to read more! Your imagery is so unique and captivating! Beautifully written! Xo
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Date: 6/26/2024 11:58:00 PM
Thank you so much, Crystal, for your visit and lovely insight. I'm sure it's hidden somewhere in those sly metaphors. Nice meeting you. Cheers Dear.
Date: 6/25/2024 10:15:00 PM
Hi Tonye, Hearty Congratulations on your top placement. Happy I could share the podium with you.
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Date: 6/26/2024 11:53:00 PM
I'm glad too. Thank you so much, Dear, Valsa.
Date: 6/24/2024 3:43:00 PM
Hey kiddo, congrats on your placement in Eddie's contest
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Date: 6/24/2024 10:22:00 PM
Hahaha, Dear Tommy. Thank you so much. I appreciate your support, always. I'm grateful.
Date: 6/24/2024 3:27:00 PM
Congratulations on our win! I liked many of your phrases like "fanciful palette," "fetid smile," and "fermented blood."
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Date: 6/24/2024 10:22:00 PM
Lovely. Thank you, David. I appreciate.
Date: 6/24/2024 2:32:00 PM
Dear Tonye Congratulations on your top winning placement with this fantastic poem that conveys a powerful theme of anguish. Keep writing dear Tonye.
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Tonye George
Date: 6/24/2024 10:21:00 PM
I appreciate your kind wishes. Thank you, Dear Sotto.
Date: 6/23/2024 5:55:00 AM
In a world of masked men, we see that beneath the layers of their heart, they hide a kind of melancholy, no one can ever surmise. "Oh, I watch him ride in the incessant anguish of his recurring sail as it echoes through the landscape of his drained soul. " I see here a mind plunged in deep misery and dejection. Life is often a tight rope walk for many. The conundrum of life is powerfully delineated here.
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Date: 6/24/2024 10:20:00 PM
Yeah! True dear, Valsa. Thank you.
Date: 5/30/2024 9:03:00 AM
WOW!!! I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Your pen was working overtime on this one. Have A Great Day.............
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Tonye George
Date: 5/30/2024 10:02:00 AM
I guess it did. Thank you, Paula. Cheers.
Date: 5/26/2024 9:33:00 AM
I see you are prolific again.. Your poem powerfully conveys themes of sorrow, rejection, and the tension between outward appearances and inner realities. Through its vivid, often grotesque imagery and free verse structure, it creates an intense emotional impact that resonates with the reader. The use of metaphor and symbolism deepens the exploration of the character’s internal struggle, making it a poignant reflection on the nature of suffering and the facades people maintain..
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Tonye George
Date: 5/26/2024 2:42:00 PM
I appreciate your thoughtful, inspiring and insightful comments Dear Silent. Thank you so much. I always appreciate it.
Date: 5/25/2024 9:35:00 PM
beautifully executed - dynamic, bold, powerful last stanza
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Date: 5/26/2024 2:41:00 PM
Glad you enjoyed it Mat. Thank you.

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