Lonesome in a Crowd

Ah, such a dandy with a girl on each arm.
Is it his flaming red hair, or his endearing charm?
Two more behind follow in family extension.
Nice young girls drawn by his questionable intention.

A talked-about scene as they walk down the street,
The townspeople are shocked by this amorous fleet.
Like a barnyard rooster surrounded by hens,
He lives in a fantasy where love merely pretends.

Then, one day, he met the New Age Jezebel.
Rejected, he continued his romance to pursue.
Into her web was where he stumbled and fell,
And for the first time he pledged that his heart would be true.

A single rooster was walking down the road,
When he circled a stone to see what was behind it.
The cock had been young, but he was now growing old.
I wonder why he's searching. I just hope he can find it
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Singh Avatar
February 27, 2026 at 8:17 PM
Life's reality is beautifully depicted in the poem.Very well done
Greenhough Avatar
February 27, 2026 at 9:23 PM
Thank you.
Empress Avatar
February 23, 2026 at 10:53 AM
What a most deep poem this is dear hilda! Iv missed reading your poetry, and i must say for some reason i felt the line "Like a barnyard rooster surrounded by hens, He lives in a fantasy where love merely pretends." so deeply! You always have a very unique way with words which makes you standout, and this is no exception. I felt and thought of so much as i read this poem of yours! Absolute pleasure visiting you today! I hope you are doing well, sending you light always
Greenhough Avatar
February 23, 2026 at 11:47 AM
Thank you for your comment. I need to get back to writing. I'm well but my many birthdays cause me to feel my age. I hope you are well and enjoying bright sunshine
Buhagiar Avatar
January 26, 2026 at 2:11 AM
Another wonderful poem of yours. Hugs.
Greenhough Avatar
January 26, 2026 at 2:13 AM
Thank you. Glad to hear from you.
Bayles Avatar
January 25, 2026 at 7:40 AM
Such a great turn in the poem, Hilda, a true surprise. I like the rhythm, and the poem rings so true.
Greenhough Avatar
January 25, 2026 at 11:25 AM
Thank you. That's the nicest thing I've heard all day. I admit that I write story poems but so have some in history. My memory of events keeps me writing. Thanks.
DiMino Avatar
January 22, 2026 at 7:33 AM
Delightful! The grass is always greener elsewhere for some...in my old age, desert landscape for me. Heat I handle better than cold. Rocks are OK but snakes often behind or under them. So my wife reminds me. We plant barbless cactus together. Desert in bloom is beautiful. Unpretentious. Great writing my friend!
Greenhough Avatar
January 24, 2026 at 1:24 AM
Sounds like you are having a lot of enjoyment of life. Thank you for reading.
Hamilton Avatar
January 19, 2026 at 9:36 AM
I like this poem you are a great writer Hilda keep them coming hugs Shadow
Greenhough Avatar
January 19, 2026 at 4:37 PM
I have to get back on track. Thank you for your words.
Gifford Avatar
January 19, 2026 at 1:55 AM
Hello Hilda, a lovely story, beautifully written and an enjoyable read. Wishing you a wonderful new week ahead, my friend.
Greenhough Avatar
January 19, 2026 at 4:36 PM
Thank you. I enjoy your poems.
George Avatar
December 10, 2025 at 4:35 AM
"Like a barnyard rooster surrounded by hens, He lives in a fantasy where love merely pretends." Interesting analogy. Hilda, really enjoyed your story with a pinch of humor.
Greenhough Avatar
December 10, 2025 at 8:36 AM
Thank you. Glad enjoyed it.
La France Avatar
December 8, 2025 at 2:15 AM
Hilda. You are a storyteller. Well done, Constance ~
La France Avatar
December 8, 2025 at 4:53 PM
Hi, yes we have lots of snow and it is very cold -20
Greenhough Avatar
December 8, 2025 at 6:55 AM
Too much story? I actually held back a lot in this one. Thank you. I imagine that you are having lovely snowfall by now. I wish I were there to see it.
Hamilton Avatar
December 6, 2025 at 11:41 AM
nicely done Hilda fav for me hugs Shadow
Greenhough Avatar
December 6, 2025 at 12:51 PM
I'm glad you liked it. Thank you. I appreciate the fav. I hope you are enjoying the Season.
Rodgers Avatar
December 2, 2025 at 1:17 PM
Dear Hilda, I really enjoyed the way you told this story, it has such a theatrical quality to it. What I appreciated most was how you managed to balance sharp observation with a touch of tenderness at the end. Loved It! Autumn Blessings, Dear Hilda, Daniel
Greenhough Avatar
December 2, 2025 at 2:09 PM
Thank you. I'm sorry if it's a bit sexist. It is an old memory put to rhyme.
Delegans Avatar
December 1, 2025 at 9:50 PM
Entertaining and well written, Hilda.
Greenhough Avatar
December 2, 2025 at 12:08 AM
Thank you.
Crandall Avatar
November 30, 2025 at 9:21 PM
A lesson learned! It's interesting that one can be lonesome with the wrong people or person.
Greenhough Avatar
November 30, 2025 at 10:00 PM
Thank you for reading. This is an old story that continues through the ages.
Ashley Avatar
November 28, 2025 at 9:35 AM
Dear Hilda, wonderful storytelling and rhyming. I enjoyed your vibrant imagery.. all it takes is one good woman to set a carousing man straight! Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
Greenhough Avatar
November 28, 2025 at 8:00 PM
Thank you for your comment. I agree with you.
Rodrigues Avatar
November 24, 2025 at 4:07 PM
He got too sure of himself, and Jezebel broke his heart!
Greenhough Avatar
November 25, 2025 at 7:11 AM
Maybe not. He changed. He continued to woo her, they married and lived happily ever after.
Buhagiar Avatar
November 24, 2025 at 2:05 AM
Oh boy, did he make a stumbling decision. Choosing Jezebel when he had a better choice. Sad ending.
Greenhough Avatar
November 24, 2025 at 5:14 AM
The four girls are better than one? Lol. You should move to Utah. Polygamy is O.K. here.
Poet Avatar
November 23, 2025 at 1:09 PM
The piece's distinctive allure is due to its combination of humor, contemplation, and a hint of sadness. The artwork was beautiful, and the tale was brilliantly told.
Greenhough Avatar
November 23, 2025 at 1:37 PM
That's the nicest comment I've ever read. Thank you very much.
Goldsmith Avatar
November 23, 2025 at 9:10 AM
What a creative write/story you have here. I enjoyed reading this one. Have a fun day/week writing away.....
Greenhough Avatar
November 23, 2025 at 11:05 AM
Thank you for your comment. Enjoy the last of November days.
Jones Avatar
November 23, 2025 at 1:32 AM
Seems he wants what he can’t have in his Jezebel on a deeper level yes he is lonely. Good engaging poem.
Greenhough Avatar
November 23, 2025 at 1:44 AM
Thank you.
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