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Loneliness of Time

Tears oozed down my pale cheeks
As I read the unknown woman’s
last mystic diary entry:

     The acute pain lingers in agony:
     Remembering the smooth skin of his face.
     My tormented heart is empty.
     I can still feel the velvety touch
     As my fingers run down the contours
     Of his soft skinned nape,
     tickling him on the sides of his ribs:

     Did I hear him giggle and gurgle?
     Momentary ecstasy....then painful silence!
     Time has no pity.
     For my offspring is no more.

     Kissing him, I bid him good night
     and the sun has never risen ever since!
     Time stopped.
     Dust to dust and I am now
     In an empty place,
     An estrangement from the world,
     A lost soul miserably trying
     But failing not to despair.

     I cannot weep but forlorn I sweat.
     The sun sets in a blaze of fire,
     The time for a hug dissipated.
     Alas no such fire in me.
     A cold soul wondering why,
     Hoping it will survive
     Many other empty sleepless nights.
     Why can’t time stop?



Am I cruel to read this sad entry?
What right have I to publish that
which was evidently a private confession?
Tears, unrestrained, oozed down my cheeks.

8 November 2021

Placed 1

Subject 5: Time
Enter the '''T'' Contest, New or Old' Poetry Contest
Sponsor	Constance La France
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Andresen Avatar
November 18, 2021 at 2:57 AM
- Lots of emotion ... brings a tear and two to my eyes - Congratulations on this wonderful poem, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Dietrich Avatar
November 16, 2021 at 3:31 PM
Congrats on your great high placement, Victor!
Proxenos Avatar
November 14, 2021 at 5:17 AM
A heartfelt write, and truly emotional, tearful and real, it brought back the loss of my 5 day old baby. Blessings Victor, Jennifer.
Jones Avatar
November 11, 2021 at 4:05 PM
So much agony in the loss of her child if I read that correctly. You capture this with your pen so eloquently. Congrats
La France Avatar
November 11, 2021 at 9:46 AM
Victor, emotional and beautifully penned, your poem touched my heart and congratulations on your First Place win in my "T" Contest ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
Rodrigues Avatar
November 11, 2021 at 4:34 AM
Touching, dear poet!
George Avatar
November 11, 2021 at 12:24 AM
This is a soul stirring story ! You have poignantly depicted the agony, despair and hopelessness of a mother who has lost her child. She experiences a loneliness no one can abate!
Daniel Avatar
November 9, 2021 at 9:41 PM
This is a truly touching write, Victor, glad it won top place:) congratulations:)
Edmonds  Avatar
November 9, 2021 at 4:45 PM
It’s tragically sad to lose a child, a pain that never leaves. A most moving write Victor. Best wishes… Belle
Dietrich Avatar
November 9, 2021 at 3:33 PM
what an interesting provactive entry, Victor!! And I see you are entering contests, which you never used to do. That is awesome
Ball Avatar
November 9, 2021 at 3:07 PM
This is so deeply moving that I got a lump in my throat just reading it. No one should ever have to bury a child. The pain I am sure is the worst pain you could feel. Something you could not recover from. My husband's brother buried two of their sons before they turned 20 yrs. old. Their two oldest. A fine write my friend. God Bless, JB
Rose  Avatar
November 9, 2021 at 2:43 PM
No I would have cried too, what a sad plight when one loses the life within her, it is a very long journey of pain and grief, and only the strong survive, :)
Buehler Avatar
November 9, 2021 at 8:11 AM
The pain of a child's loss is unlike any other. The sadness and grief in these well evoked lines really touch the heart, Victor.
Pandit Avatar
November 9, 2021 at 5:17 AM
Your poignant theme speaks to the agony of loss. Emotions breeze throughout in verses of sadness evoked. Excellent, as always, Victor.
Skelly Avatar
November 9, 2021 at 5:11 AM
Sadness speaks from this entry. I have not got around to writing anything yet..have gone very tired after last week...Delice
Cunningham Avatar
November 8, 2021 at 11:25 PM
A very emotional write Victor, sadly you hear of heartbreaking stories like that. Good luck in the contest. Tom
Roper Avatar
November 8, 2021 at 11:20 PM
Victory , a heart ranching write. Beautiful , but so very sad.
Seeker Avatar
November 8, 2021 at 11:15 PM
Soul searing! A powerful entry for the contest Victor
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