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Loch Ness

The cooling evening breeze lifted and moved the laggard clouds filtering the burnished moon through the sheer curtains on either side, makes nature shiver. Moon holds its gaze with longing over the Scottish Highlands watching Nessie swim in the dark of the silver facets mirror lake. She’s grandiose and magnificent in size, with a towering neck and hump protruding from the shimmering water. She belongs in the vast bottomless depths of blue with her magic of immortality kept hidden. She's welcomed to come to life to cast shadows upon the lake, one to openness that stretch endlessly before her. Mountains rise like giants beautiful and imposing meeting the stark gray sky on the horizon. Light flickers in the distant as the sky begins to darken. Lighting erupts with rumbling growls. Streaks zigzag and fork across the sky in a majestic display shooting from seemingly out of nowhere to hit the ground one after another impressive exhibition of power. With not a soul in sight she feeds while the moon shines. Nature keeps an invisible secret. 12/17/2017
Poetry Contest: Loch Ness Sponsored by: Thvia Shetley
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Moorman Avatar
February 1, 2018 at 6:15 PM
What a great rendering, Eve! You know how to --- in Deep South jargon --- pen them word!! Congratulations!
Dietrich Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 5:49 PM
I TOLD you this was good!!! Big congrats, EVE!!
Haight Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 4:27 PM
Such excellent imagery of this mystical setting in your Poem, Eve. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, Sandra
Smith Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 3:04 PM
Beautiful imagery Eve, congrats :)
Gauthier Avatar
January 31, 2018 at 2:48 PM
Wow - spectacular imagery. Beautifully done, Eve. Congrats on an awesome winning poem.
De Beaulieu Avatar
January 21, 2018 at 5:44 PM
This is a wonderful written poem.I enjoyed to read this poem. Have a nice evening my friend.
Gupta Avatar
December 28, 2017 at 10:10 PM
As we read we really enjoy in suspense "Nessie swim in the dark of the silver facets mirror lake. ...". ... Awesome ...
Callus Avatar
December 26, 2017 at 12:31 PM
This picture has truly inspired you, Eve! Beautiful imagery captures our senses, while somehow urging us to keep Nessie's whereabouts secret. The Scottish Highlands are enticing and full of mystery. Hugs // paul
Horn Avatar
December 23, 2017 at 9:48 AM
I have heard of Lochs and Bagels and having lochs of fun and lochs like great when they are full. A loch full of a crock is not very pretty though.
Roper Avatar
December 23, 2017 at 11:24 AM
:)
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 22, 2017 at 10:22 AM
Wow Eve, your portrait in words matches the magical picture perfectly! This is an awesome write and going into my faves! I can imagine seeing this remarkable poem at the top. Happy holidays to you and your family Eve. : )xxoo
Allison Avatar
December 21, 2017 at 6:50 PM
you tell a wonderful tale Eve, I've been to loch ness and didn't see Nessie:-) hugs Jan xx
Lovejoy-Burton Avatar
December 21, 2017 at 12:13 AM
Magic!
Kendrick Avatar
December 20, 2017 at 4:22 PM
Enjoyed reading about Lock Ness..Maybe one does exsist..Thanks for all the visits to my page..Sara
Andresen Avatar
December 20, 2017 at 2:03 AM
- Excellent described from a myth that often something you can believe is true, but as is not proven, Eve - Best wishes in the contest - Merry Christmas to you and your family - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Kamoonpuri Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 11:40 PM
Wow this reads like a winner. Described so aptly and poetically. Lochness must exist and u bring it to life so charmingly. The invisible secret of nature eh. Kudos. This really ought to catch the judges eye. Do tell me whenever u win any. Hugs n take care.
Canerdy Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 1:46 PM
So lovely and majestically descriptive, Eve! Janice
Canerdy Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 1:46 PM
So lovely and majestically descriptive, Eve! Janice
One Avatar
December 19, 2017 at 7:21 AM
This is one of the best poems I have read for this contest... Great imagery and some great lines...
Dietrich Avatar
December 18, 2017 at 5:16 PM
wow, this is AMAZING, Eve. I don't know if I read many of these but to me, the best one I've seen. So full of description. I just did a tanka on it (not posted yet) and I can't hold a candle to this one!
Hinshaw Avatar
December 18, 2017 at 1:08 PM
What a delightful tale you have written in poetic form, Eve! Kept me captivated to the end. We have visited Loch Ness but have yet to see the monster! Many thx for your kind comments re The Littlest Christmas Tree and a very Merry Christmas to you and your family - Bob H
Gentile Avatar
December 18, 2017 at 12:14 PM
I think you have well captured the tale here Eve, I really enjoyed!!!! Good Luck
Horsman Avatar
December 18, 2017 at 10:35 AM
Oh so classical, burns would read with joy,,truly is a wonderful poem,,good luck in contest.
May Avatar
December 18, 2017 at 7:44 AM
You described the scene well Eve....Great write
Talbot Avatar
December 18, 2017 at 5:17 AM
Nessie, a tale. I have often wondered, but you said it right, 'With not a soul in sight she feeds while the moon shines. Nature keeps an invisible secret.' Long may nature keep that secret! A perfect end to your poem! :-)
Vaso Avatar
December 17, 2017 at 11:01 PM
Having Scottish roots loved this!!!
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