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Like Terminal Stone

At dusk, fragrance of sky’s mint breath Clings on grass waiting near spring’s death Pitch-dark roses moan Crawling to touch nightfall’s last glow A tint without flames of yellow Like terminal stone Contest: Susan Burch’s Tail Rhyme 24 apr 12

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Kash Poet

Date: 6/21/2012 1:53:00 PM

Actually from this browser of my mobile I can't do two things.... Can't open soupmail and cannot comment on blog.I will comment on your blog tomorrow while Doing from PC.But I can send a soup mail now...Just comment on a poem after receiving that.Do not reply in suopmail.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/17/2012 2:04:00 PM

A belated congratulations on your win in Susan's "Tail Rhyme Time" contest Nette. Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/14/2012 9:08:00 PM

congrats, Nette. It sure was one of the tail rhymes with best imagery.

Ralph Taylor

Date: 5/14/2012 7:35:00 PM

Congrats on your win, nette. Awesome piece. Great job. Nice going. hugs, Ralph

Debra Squyres

Date: 5/14/2012 3:50:00 PM

Hey girlie !! We both placed in the contest !! Again...I absolutely love the imagery here...Congrats !!

Kash Poet

Date: 5/14/2012 11:49:00 AM

Hi Nette,Congrats on your another top win.Enjoyed.

Deborah Burch

Date: 5/14/2012 11:34:00 AM

Congrats on your win Nette!!! this is awsome!! your gifted personification take my breath, girl!! Well done

David Williams

Date: 5/14/2012 11:30:00 AM

Nette, congrats on your win..David

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 5/14/2012 10:58:00 AM

Congrats on your win nette xx

Don Johnson

Date: 5/2/2012 3:23:00 AM

pretty doggone bloody good, the dark roses moan and could, be without the tint of yellow flame, love your poetic insight frame, cos its bloody good....

Dinda Minardi

Date: 5/1/2012 7:38:00 AM

Love every line, Nette! I can never write something this beautiful bout nature ;)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/30/2012 8:52:00 PM

ZOWIE, this is GOOD!!!!!

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 4/29/2012 9:53:00 AM

You know so much about the different forms of poetry Nette; it sure give so much lattitude in your writing and they never fail to fascinate. I gather something sad happened in your family; pls accept my condolences. Love, Lizzie

Gwendolen Song

Date: 4/29/2012 2:39:00 AM

These roses moaning is fantastic and crawling to touch nightfall is magical...a great tail rhyme...can't wait to see the outcome of this one! Hope u are doing okay, Nette. :) Gwendolen

Kash Poet

Date: 4/28/2012 7:49:00 AM

Hey....where??

Jack Horne

Date: 4/27/2012 3:09:00 PM

beautiful piece, nette - a sure winner in the contest

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/27/2012 12:20:00 PM

Hi nette - Have a lovely weekend! - oxox love Anne-Lise

Debra Squyres

Date: 4/26/2012 9:25:00 AM

hmmmm Tail Rhyme?? Not sure about that form....but I am sure this is a great poem. Love your imagery !! Well done !! Best of luck in the contest !!!

Tim B

Date: 4/25/2012 3:25:00 PM

Wow, miss nette, that is all I can say for this one. Love that line, 'Pitch-dark roses moan', a very unique personification. A sure winner, best of luck.

Laila Andresen Mjelde

Date: 4/25/2012 2:36:00 PM

Wonderful poem! Good luck in the contest Nette!! xoxo - Laila

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/25/2012 11:49:00 AM

Reads like a winning work to me..Good luck in the contest..I need to check this contest out..Those tail rhymes are hard but fun to write...Thanks for stopping bywith congrats ...Sara