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Like a Horse With a Carriage

Love goes with marriage
Like a horse with a carriage. . . 
but what of the horse?
The horse may lead the carriage,
but often stumbles or dies.

What of the carriage?
It often falls apart or
gets stuck in a rut.
But how beautiful the horse
and the carriage that endure!


For  SandyIvy Davis's 
Tanka - Love & Marriage Tanka Poetry Contest

Copyright © Andrea Dietrich | Year Posted 2012

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Jon A Cavanaugh Date: 12/21/2012 10:33:00 PM I love the analogy here. There are so many nuances to consider. I will be pondering on this poem for some time to come. What a great write. Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 10/23/2012 5:47:00 PM Creative way to go..Congrats on your win..Yes, someimes that horse stumbles and sometimes the carriage gets a broken spoke but they still plod along..Sara Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 10/23/2012 7:11:00 AM Congratulations on your winning poem in SandyIvy's "Tanka-Love & Marriage" contest Andrea. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 10/20/2012 9:55:00 PM Hi Miss Poet Queen, congrats luv*Siddy Login to Reply

Len Gasun Date: 10/20/2012 8:50:00 PM Oh, but I love this more than mine my dearest friend Andrea! My biggest hearty congratulations on your awesome win my dear! love/hugs always, Leonora Login to Reply

Linda-Marie Sweetheart Date: 10/20/2012 8:03:00 PM CONGRATS ANDREA ON WINNING AN HM FOR THIS WONDERFUL TANKA .. FIRST PLACE WITH ME LUV .. Login to Reply

Sandy Ivy D Date: 10/20/2012 3:55:00 PM Andrea,enjoy your win' Sandy Login to Reply

Black Eyed Susan Date: 10/15/2012 8:01:00 AM I like the "stuck in a rut" line - so true for many people. so cute how you played on the love and marriage song :) good luck in the contest! Login to Reply

Robert Pettit Date: 10/15/2012 12:18:00 AM A deceased man named Frank who hailed from Hoboken, NJ sang about love and marriage going together like a horse and carriage. Your double tanka is a good write as usual Andrea. Login to Reply

Michael J. Falotico Date: 10/14/2012 1:17:00 PM A marriage message indeed. A constant work in progress. But is there a better job? Luv n hugs to you. Michael Login to Reply

Joy Wellington Date: 10/13/2012 6:54:00 PM A sweet muse on love and marriage...best wishes for the best. One love. Joy Wells Login to Reply

Phyllis Babcock Date: 10/13/2012 12:37:00 PM Nicely done Andrea. You are keeping up with lots of poetry. I have not had time to even think about writing at the moment. soup mail. love phyl Login to Reply

Sara Kendrick Date: 10/13/2012 7:06:00 AM Great use of metaphoric language in these Tanka's ..Enjoyed reading your creative ideas..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by..I did go a little Tanka crazy..Don't know if they were done correctly though..Sara Login to Reply

Bukang Liwayway Date: 10/13/2012 3:46:00 AM horse with a carriage...hmmm perfect combination...great write from one of the great poet on PS. base on my life I am like a carriage waiting for my horse to carry me hahahahaha...I like your tanka friend Andrea. Good luck..Another sure winner for me..(^_^) hugs!! Login to Reply

Vicky Tsiluma Date: 10/12/2012 2:42:00 AM Hey Andrea, you're right about the saying. I've just heard it in a Frank Sinatra song. No, I'd never heard the saying before. In my country it's easier to meet a lion than a horse(I've only seen a horse once in passing). Thanks for the heads up. I love this one! Login to Reply

Elizabeth Wesley Date: 10/11/2012 4:56:00 PM I suppose the inner message is, marriage that endures is beautiful. I suppose that's possible but I'm sure no judge! :) Love Lizzie Login to Reply

Daver Austin Date: 10/11/2012 10:08:00 AM Like the old song, Love and Marriage. Is that the title? I can't remember. After all, the song was popular around the mid 40s. Your poem, however, is much better than that old song. The last two lines are priceless. Love, daver Login to Reply

Wilma Neels Date: 10/11/2012 6:41:00 AM This is a beauty Andrea, just love the analogy.. How is this week treating you? love Wilma Login to Reply

Kash Poet Date: 10/11/2012 3:12:00 AM Good analogy in this poem Andrea.Nice message.Enjoyed the read. Login to Reply

Vicky Tsiluma Date: 10/11/2012 1:02:00 AM Andrea, this is beautiful! I mean it! But why come did you liken marriage to a horse and a carriage? You know a horse can move without the carriage but not the other way round, unless you meant the horse and the carriage to be one entity? And the horse stumbling and the carriage getting stuck in a rut? Aargh! You got my mind turming - which in itself is the essence of good poetry. Nice! Login to Reply

Justin Bordner Date: 10/10/2012 11:20:00 PM I like how you employ the horse and carriage as symbols of resilience Andrea, very clever, and very meaningful - reminds me not to foster grudges in relationships if you want them to prosper - pretty wise for a young woman - J.A.B. % Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/10/2012 11:36:00 PM who you calling young woman? hahaha. LOVE it.

John Loving Iii Date: 10/10/2012 9:38:00 PM The horse and carraige should never die. It's always waiting for the next ride. Are you willing to take the ride? Login to Reply

Len Gasun Date: 10/10/2012 9:08:00 PM Hi, Andrea! I'm stopping by here again wishing you all the best and luck! Read my inbox please..love, leonora Login to Reply

Ilene Bauer Date: 10/10/2012 7:10:00 PM very clever! i like the message, too... Login to Reply

Robert Johnson Date: 10/10/2012 3:51:00 PM Rhea and Danny could use this. Login to Reply Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/10/2012 4:03:00 PM who are rhea and danny??

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