Andrea Dietrich Poet Tanka

Like a Horse With a Carriage

Love goes with marriage
Like a horse with a carriage. . . 
but what of the horse?
The horse may lead the carriage,
but often stumbles or dies.

What of the carriage?
It often falls apart or
gets stuck in a rut.
But how beautiful the horse
and the carriage that endure!


For  SandyIvy Davis's 
Tanka - Love & Marriage Tanka Poetry Contest

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Jon A Cavanaugh December 21, 2012 at 10:33 PM I love the analogy here. There are so many nuances to consider. I will be pondering on this poem for some time to come. What a great write.

Sara Kendrick October 23, 2012 at 5:47 PM Creative way to go..Congrats on your win..Yes, someimes that horse stumbles and sometimes the carriage gets a broken spoke but they still plod along..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown October 23, 2012 at 7:11 AM Congratulations on your winning poem in SandyIvy's "Tanka-Love & Marriage" contest Andrea. Love, Carol

Skat A October 20, 2012 at 9:55 PM Hi Miss Poet Queen, congrats luv*Siddy

Len Gasun October 20, 2012 at 8:50 PM Oh, but I love this more than mine my dearest friend Andrea! My biggest hearty congratulations on your awesome win my dear! love/hugs always, Leonora

Linda-Marie Sweetheart October 20, 2012 at 8:03 PM CONGRATS ANDREA ON WINNING AN HM FOR THIS WONDERFUL TANKA .. FIRST PLACE WITH ME LUV ..

Sandy Ivy D October 20, 2012 at 3:55 PM Andrea,enjoy your win' Sandy

Black Eyed Susan October 15, 2012 at 8:01 AM I like the "stuck in a rut" line - so true for many people. so cute how you played on the love and marriage song :) good luck in the contest!

Robert Pettit October 15, 2012 at 12:18 AM A deceased man named Frank who hailed from Hoboken, NJ sang about love and marriage going together like a horse and carriage. Your double tanka is a good write as usual Andrea.

Michael J. Falotico October 14, 2012 at 1:17 PM A marriage message indeed. A constant work in progress. But is there a better job? Luv n hugs to you. Michael

Joy Wellington October 13, 2012 at 6:54 PM A sweet muse on love and marriage...best wishes for the best. One love. Joy Wells

Phyllis Babcock October 13, 2012 at 12:37 PM Nicely done Andrea. You are keeping up with lots of poetry. I have not had time to even think about writing at the moment. soup mail. love phyl

Sara Kendrick October 13, 2012 at 7:06 AM Great use of metaphoric language in these Tanka's ..Enjoyed reading your creative ideas..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by..I did go a little Tanka crazy..Don't know if they were done correctly though..Sara

Bukang Liwayway October 13, 2012 at 3:46 AM horse with a carriage...hmmm perfect combination...great write from one of the great poet on PS. base on my life I am like a carriage waiting for my horse to carry me hahahahaha...I like your tanka friend Andrea. Good luck..Another sure winner for me..(^_^) hugs!!

Vicky Tsiluma October 12, 2012 at 2:42 AM Hey Andrea, you're right about the saying. I've just heard it in a Frank Sinatra song. No, I'd never heard the saying before. In my country it's easier to meet a lion than a horse(I've only seen a horse once in passing). Thanks for the heads up. I love this one!

Elizabeth Wesley October 11, 2012 at 4:56 PM I suppose the inner message is, marriage that endures is beautiful. I suppose that's possible but I'm sure no judge! :) Love Lizzie

Daver Austin October 11, 2012 at 10:08 AM Like the old song, Love and Marriage. Is that the title? I can't remember. After all, the song was popular around the mid 40s. Your poem, however, is much better than that old song. The last two lines are priceless. Love, daver

Wilma Neels October 11, 2012 at 6:41 AM This is a beauty Andrea, just love the analogy.. How is this week treating you? love Wilma

Kash Poet October 11, 2012 at 3:12 AM Good analogy in this poem Andrea.Nice message.Enjoyed the read.

Vicky Tsiluma October 11, 2012 at 1:02 AM Andrea, this is beautiful! I mean it! But why come did you liken marriage to a horse and a carriage? You know a horse can move without the carriage but not the other way round, unless you meant the horse and the carriage to be one entity? And the horse stumbling and the carriage getting stuck in a rut? Aargh! You got my mind turming - which in itself is the essence of good poetry. Nice!

Justin Bordner October 10, 2012 at 11:20 PM I like how you employ the horse and carriage as symbols of resilience Andrea, very clever, and very meaningful - reminds me not to foster grudges in relationships if you want them to prosper - pretty wise for a young woman - J.A.B. % Andrea Dietrich October 10, 2012 at 11:36 PM who you calling young woman? hahaha. LOVE it.

John Loving Iii October 10, 2012 at 9:38 PM The horse and carraige should never die. It's always waiting for the next ride. Are you willing to take the ride?

Len Gasun October 10, 2012 at 9:08 PM Hi, Andrea! I'm stopping by here again wishing you all the best and luck! Read my inbox please..love, leonora

Ilene Bauer October 10, 2012 at 7:10 PM very clever! i like the message, too...

Robert Johnson October 10, 2012 at 3:51 PM Rhea and Danny could use this. Andrea Dietrich October 10, 2012 at 4:03 PM who are rhea and danny??

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