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Light 1-29-24 Syllables checked with www.howmanysyllables ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Light Nightfall’s hand laid heavy on fleeing twilight While the darkness, born early, swallowed the light. Driving rain clouded the eyes of pale daylight, Sheer curtains of rain blurred tears in the lamplight. A world set spinning on bleak winter’s wrathful wings, A battlefield of ruined souls shunned the light. Howling waves, without sweet dawn’s consolation, Drove raving storm surges, diluting the light. Tangles of downpours assaulted waning day, Jagged dirges shred blinded lyrics of light. Torrent’s heavy footsteps drenched the dying dusk When cracks appeared in sealed shelters, leaking light. Atmospheric flotsam clogged free flowing dawn, Driving dams of old debris to block new light. In this rain painting, where darkness battled bliss, There stepped a warrior, rain angel of light. The storm wrath silenced. Darkness shamed. Light in whorls Opened wide a redeemed chrysalis of light.

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Date: 2/7/2024 12:28:00 PM
Wow Sam. This is excellent. I love your brilliant descriptions! Congratulations for your win :)
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 2/13/2024 10:06:00 AM
Greetings Heidi! Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback. I am so glad that you got to experience this storm and the light that followed it! Hoping you are warm and cozy and safe especially at with this nor'easter. Sending you prayers for your continued healing and blessings!
Date: 2/7/2024 5:54:00 AM
Congrats Sam, this is an awe inspiring poem. Your amazing descriptive passages unfold vivid images that fill the reader with a delightful perspective of the enriched light described with your words. A brilliant poem.
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Date: 2/7/2024 11:31:00 AM
Hi Wen! Thank you so much for your amazing feedback! I am thrilled that this poem unfolded the storm for you. I was thinking about the transitions of light in twilight and the way a storm starts slowly, peaks and then drifts away leaving a new freshness and rejuvenation as the light also changes - almost like a redemption from the storm. I so appreciate your note of congratulations. Gratitude and blessings!!
Date: 2/6/2024 2:55:00 PM
BIG congrats on your top win, Sam. Wonderful depiction throughout. Much enjoyed.
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Date: 2/6/2024 3:09:00 PM
Hi Vijay! Thank you so much. I am thrilled you enjoyed this poem. It is an honor to share the winners podium with you. This poetic form was new to me but I found that the format really helped to focus each line. Take care! Blessings of light to you!
Date: 1/31/2024 2:28:00 PM
Simple, beautiful. I have a weakness for rain poetry. I love your word play of the light. Gorgeous diction!
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 2/1/2024 12:36:00 PM
Hi Paige! Thank you for stopping by and stepping into the light! So happy it spoke to you - rain lover! Having been raised in the pacific NW, I too have a weakness for rain and rain poetry! This poem is based on one amazing rainstorm. Sending you blessings of light and my gratitude!
Date: 1/30/2024 9:47:00 PM
Really nice . stepped….rain angel … Darkness shamed…. chrysalis of light. Excellent . I am whelmed.
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Date: 2/1/2024 12:33:00 PM
Greeting, Anisha! What beautiful feedback. Thank you. Your message was a source of sunshine on a rainy day. Blessings of light to you!
Date: 1/30/2024 8:36:00 PM
Wow.... I have been observing this dire combat between light and darkness with bated breath! Light is powerful, but its adversary seemed even more powerful ! All through I could hear 'torrent's heavy thuds'. "Torrent’s heavy footsteps drenched the dying dusk When cracks appeared in sealed shelters, leaking light." How poetic and how powerful this description is ! Glad a warrior stepped in and light became the final victor. I always rejoice in the victory of light. Beautiful couplets, dear Sam. Into my FAVE.
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 2/1/2024 12:30:00 PM
Dearest Valsa, I am so honored by your fav! Thank you for that joy and for your amazing feedback. You saw the story - the battle between light and dark! What a blessing and a gift. I just couldn't leave the poem in darkness because, like you, I truly believe, somehow, light always wins! This poem is based on an experience I had with a storm and a miracle! I am so glad I got to share this memorable battle in this poem! Always so wonderful to hear from you. Take care. Sending you blessings of light for you and your family!!
Date: 1/30/2024 5:28:00 PM
your personification is outstanding, Sam. Your imagery is perfect! I liked this line: There stepped a warrior, rain angel of light. A masterpiece...admire your artistic voice and skill, hugs, Sara
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/31/2024 10:49:00 AM
Hi Sara! Thank you so much! Your wonderful feedback always lifts my spirits and puts a little happy dance in my steps. This poem is based on my experience in a storm many years ago. It is still fresh in my memory, even to the miracle that brought such comfort. Hope you are having a good day! Blessings of light!!
Date: 1/30/2024 3:56:00 PM
"A world set spinning on bleak winter’s wrathful wings, A battlefield of ruined souls shunning the light", Very nicely crafted Sam, best wishes
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Date: 1/31/2024 10:45:00 AM
Hi Joseph! I am so grateful for your thoughtful and affirming feedback. Many thanks! Sending you my gratitude and blessings for light!
Date: 1/30/2024 2:34:00 PM
Sam, so masterfully have you personified so many of nature's forces and wonders that every line came to life for me. From giving nightfall a heavy hand to the shaming of darkness.
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Date: 1/31/2024 10:42:00 AM
What wonderful feedback, Lin! Thank you so much! That this storm came alive for you through this poem is such an honor! This poem is actually based on a storm and a blessing I experienced many years ago! I got to relive the miracle through this poem. Sending you my gratitude and blessings!
Date: 1/30/2024 1:47:00 PM
This one reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for sharing your talent with us. Sara K
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/31/2024 10:39:00 AM
Greetings Sara! I so humbled by your message. It is such a delight to be part of this talented, giving, community of poets! Thank you for your affirming words. Glad you liked this poem. Blessings of light through the darkness of winter to you!
Date: 1/30/2024 1:43:00 PM
Light is victor! I like your use of this form and the alliteration. Kudos to the rain angel of light, and you
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Sam Kauffman
Date: 1/31/2024 10:35:00 AM
Hi Tom! Light, as we know, is indeed the victor! The darkness cannot stand up to the light. Thank you for your thoughtful reading of this poem and wonderful feedback! Blessings of light over darkness to you!
Date: 1/30/2024 12:50:00 PM
Not easy to write a ghazal. Great refrain throughout. You did well.
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Date: 1/31/2024 10:33:00 AM
Hi Victor! Agreed! This form looks easy but, in the end, is definitely a challenge. Thank yo so much for your wonderful, affirming, feedback. I am so appreciative. Here's to more sunny days! Blessings!
Date: 1/30/2024 12:19:00 PM
Wonderful poem Sam with beautiful wording! Debx
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Date: 1/30/2024 12:44:00 PM
Thank you so much, Deb! This is an interesting poetic form and not as easy as it looks! So glad you liked it! Blessings of light to you!
Date: 1/30/2024 12:08:00 PM
- A dark and deep poem about the light, Sam - Excellent written - hugs
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Date: 1/30/2024 12:43:00 PM
Thank you so much, Anne-Lise! We have several days of storms coming and I was thinking about how the sunlight will be impacted - how all of our moods will be affected! Your lovely feedback brings to mind your dark days of winter! Blessings and hugs!

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