Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

Life You Chiseled Still Burns the Wound

Sunny aspirations were not meant to be
As cloudy days appended the rainy nights
And mornings arose with darkened skies
Leaving her behind, in shattered dreams

Still she walked, in your abandoned path
Hoping one day you would turn around
But you kept advancing, defying her call
Searching for meaning you never found

Though she was light, you ambled dark
Ignoring the blue sky when it was dawn
Burning in hot sand tricked by a mirage
Skipping the pond, where lives the swan

Markers of love got washed away soon
Life you chiseled still burns the wound
Footprints of desire that stayed frozen
Melted away with the changing season

Now being aged, you detest loneliness
But memories too have fled your name

July 19, 2018
Placed 4th in best free verse contest by John Hamilton
Placed first in late October 2018 contest by Brian Strand

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Valsa George July 19, 2022 at 9:40 PM "of desire that stayed frozen Melted away with the changing season" -- With the change of season, even the frozen footprints of desire gets washed away leaving every fond remembrance of life disappear ! What a sad state it is with such inertia landing life in total boredom....

Eve Roper November 15, 2020 at 9:27 AM Beautiful verse, Vijay, with emotion and imagery. Hugs Eve

Vladislav Raven October 23, 2018 at 9:58 AM Hi Vijay, much belated congratulations on your win with this deserved piece. It seems that whether your love is joyful or sad your words sings the emotions strongly. Your poetic songs are so creative my friend. A fave. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Your friend always....Mike. Vijay Pandit October 23, 2018 at 10:03 AM I appreciate your analytical feedback..many thanks my friend for your kind remarks.

Susan Ashley October 4, 2018 at 8:29 PM A poignant and deeply touching poem, Vijay, your imagery is rich in stunning sadness. A melancholy beauty of lost love. Congratulations on your wonderful win.. ~Susan Vijay Pandit October 23, 2018 at 10:03 AM Thank you Susan.

Warren Doll October 1, 2018 at 12:55 PM Well deserved placement, Vijay. Congratulations. Vijay Pandit October 23, 2018 at 10:03 AM Thank you Warren.

John Hamilton October 1, 2018 at 11:37 AM Beautifully sad write Vijay, congrats on a fine placement! Vijay Pandit October 23, 2018 at 10:03 AM Thank you John.

Andrea Dietrich July 24, 2018 at 5:14 PM So sad, Vijay. Very poignant writing from you. Vijay Pandit July 25, 2018 at 6:57 AM Thank you Andrea.

Chuck Melugin July 21, 2018 at 5:52 PM Vijay...originality dances in your soul and you present a poetic wind that blows us away! Vijay Pandit July 21, 2018 at 5:58 PM Thank you Chuck.

Liam Mcdaid July 21, 2018 at 4:05 PM deeply touching excellent pen this captures time engraved very beautifully painted in your words wishing you a blessed weekend vijay Vijay Pandit July 21, 2018 at 5:58 PM Thank you Liam.

Harry Horsman July 21, 2018 at 3:36 PM You have a wondrous pen Vijay, and a awesome mind that steers it. Vijay Pandit July 21, 2018 at 5:57 PM Thank you Harry.

Suzanne Delaney July 21, 2018 at 7:53 AM Dear Vijay. Your words ring true. This happens so often where people seek something unattainable overlooking what is right under their nose. Adding this to my favs. SuZ Vijay Pandit July 21, 2018 at 11:56 AM So true suZ..appreciate the visit and kind feedback...many thanks.

Becca Teagan July 20, 2018 at 11:19 PM I love the way you use words to paint a picture. I enjoyed this bittersweet poem. Vijay Pandit July 21, 2018 at 11:55 AM Thank you Becca--appreciate the visit and kind feedback.

Connie Marcum Wong July 20, 2018 at 3:59 PM I relate this beauty to my grandfather whose in-laws kept him away from my grandmother by destroying their letters to each other so that they were never reunited. He never remarried and never forgot her. Your poem in its sadness of loss, touched my heart Vijay. A brilliant piece! : ) Vijay Pandit July 20, 2018 at 5:02 PM I enjoyed reading your comment, Connie..charming love story of your grandparents. Many thanks for your insights.

Nette Onclaud July 20, 2018 at 3:54 PM vijay, how forlorn are your vivid words that i felt this scene deeply... a gem of a piece.. huggs Vijay Pandit July 20, 2018 at 5:00 PM Appreciate the kind feedback..many thanks, nette.

Joseph May July 20, 2018 at 11:41 AM A poignant write Vijay..Well written Vijay Pandit July 20, 2018 at 4:59 PM Thank you Joseph.

Elaine George July 20, 2018 at 1:03 AM Deep and profound, Vijay. Elaine4jm Vijay Pandit July 20, 2018 at 7:05 AM Thank you Elaine.

Janice Canerdy July 19, 2018 at 7:50 PM Excellent poem with a sad story to tell, Vijay! Janice Vijay Pandit July 20, 2018 at 7:04 AM Thank you Janice..appreciate the kind feedback.

Darlene De Beaulieu July 19, 2018 at 2:47 PM Hello Vijay Pandit,for this personin the poem it does sound like life that was chiseled still burns. have a nice day my friend. Darlene De Beaulieu July 19, 2018 at 5:27 PM Your welcome my friend. Vijay Pandit July 19, 2018 at 2:57 PM Thank for the visit and your insights Darlene..many thanks for the kind feedback.

Heidi Sands July 19, 2018 at 1:12 PM Superbly written Vijay. How life can be filled with desires, things incomplete, regrets, missed love, loneliness, and all kinds of things. You have done so well with this ! :) Vijay Pandit July 19, 2018 at 2:56 PM Your insights are on the mark, Heidi..life sometimes is filled with all of the above..many thanks for your support and kind words.

Anne-Lise Andresen July 19, 2018 at 12:45 PM - So sad when the "flame burns out", life is too short - Heartbreaking beautiful, Vijay - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Vijay Pandit July 19, 2018 at 2:54 PM Thank you Anne-Lise. Appreciate your thoughtful comments, as always.

Lyric Man July 19, 2018 at 9:56 AM Vijay.. you take us on that lonely journey. Out of love's arms and away from hope's dawn. This is a moving masterpiece of sorrow. A man so lost and blinded in false pursuit that he only realizes in old age.. can even remember her once wanton eyes. Only the thousands of steps in darkness he took look for the better that never came. This is the best poem of the morning! Vijay Pandit July 19, 2018 at 2:53 PM A pleasure to read your insights LM..many thanks for your lovely comments.

Silent One July 19, 2018 at 9:38 AM Somethings are just not meant to be.. a sad poem about loss and having to move on and forget... Vijay Pandit July 19, 2018 at 2:52 PM Yes..so true..many thanks Silent One.

Mike Gentile July 19, 2018 at 8:51 AM A very sad portrait of how lie can be so difficult. So very well expressed, Vijay !! Vijay Pandit July 19, 2018 at 2:52 PM Thank you Mike--appreciate your kind feedback as always.

Demetrios Trifiatis July 19, 2018 at 7:32 AM Wisdom may come with age to many but not to all and when it comes we realize the magnitude of our mistakes and the prize we have to pay for all the things we have done wrong, without any complains! Profound and beautiful writing my friend, Vijay! Vijay Pandit July 19, 2018 at 2:51 PM Always love to read your comments and insights my friend..many many thanks, Demetrios.