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Life You Chiseled Still Burns the Wound

Sunny aspirations were not meant to be As cloudy days appended the rainy nights And mornings arose with darkened skies Leaving her behind, in shattered dreams Still she walked, in your abandoned path Hoping one day you would turn around But you kept advancing, defying her call Searching for meaning you never found Though she was light, you ambled dark Ignoring the blue sky when it was dawn Burning in hot sand tricked by a mirage Skipping the pond, where lives the swan Markers of love got washed away soon Life you chiseled still burns the wound Footprints of desire that stayed frozen Melted away with the changing season Now being aged, you detest loneliness But memories too have fled your name July 19, 2018 Placed 4th in best free verse contest by John Hamilton Placed first in late October 2018 contest by Brian Strand

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Valsa George

Date: 7/19/2022 9:40:00 PM

"of desire that stayed frozen Melted away with the changing season" -- With the change of season, even the frozen footprints of desire gets washed away leaving every fond remembrance of life disappear ! What a sad state it is with such inertia landing life in total boredom....

Eve Roper

Date: 11/15/2020 9:27:00 AM

Beautiful verse, Vijay, with emotion and imagery. Hugs Eve

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/23/2018 9:58:00 AM

Hi Vijay, much belated congratulations on your win with this deserved piece. It seems that whether your love is joyful or sad your words sings the emotions strongly. Your poetic songs are so creative my friend. A fave. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Your friend always....Mike.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/23/2018 10:03:00 AM

I appreciate your analytical feedback..many thanks my friend for your kind remarks.

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/4/2018 8:29:00 PM

A poignant and deeply touching poem, Vijay, your imagery is rich in stunning sadness. A melancholy beauty of lost love. Congratulations on your wonderful win.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/23/2018 10:03:00 AM

Thank you Susan.

Warren Doll

Date: 10/1/2018 12:55:00 PM

Well deserved placement, Vijay. Congratulations.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/23/2018 10:03:00 AM

Thank you Warren.

John Hamilton

Date: 10/1/2018 11:37:00 AM

Beautifully sad write Vijay, congrats on a fine placement!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/23/2018 10:03:00 AM

Thank you John.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/24/2018 5:14:00 PM

So sad, Vijay. Very poignant writing from you.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/25/2018 6:57:00 AM

Thank you Andrea.

Chuck Melugin

Date: 7/21/2018 5:52:00 PM

Vijay...originality dances in your soul and you present a poetic wind that blows us away!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/21/2018 5:58:00 PM

Thank you Chuck.

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 7/21/2018 4:05:00 PM

deeply touching excellent pen this captures time engraved very beautifully painted in your words wishing you a blessed weekend vijay

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/21/2018 5:58:00 PM

Thank you Liam.

Harry Horsman

Date: 7/21/2018 3:36:00 PM

You have a wondrous pen Vijay, and a awesome mind that steers it.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/21/2018 5:57:00 PM

Thank you Harry.

Suzanne Delaney

Date: 7/21/2018 7:53:00 AM

Dear Vijay. Your words ring true. This happens so often where people seek something unattainable overlooking what is right under their nose. Adding this to my favs. SuZ

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/21/2018 11:56:00 AM

So true suZ..appreciate the visit and kind feedback...many thanks.

Becca Teagan

Date: 7/20/2018 11:19:00 PM

I love the way you use words to paint a picture. I enjoyed this bittersweet poem.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/21/2018 11:55:00 AM

Thank you Becca--appreciate the visit and kind feedback.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/20/2018 3:59:00 PM

I relate this beauty to my grandfather whose in-laws kept him away from my grandmother by destroying their letters to each other so that they were never reunited. He never remarried and never forgot her. Your poem in its sadness of loss, touched my heart Vijay. A brilliant piece! : )

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/20/2018 5:02:00 PM

I enjoyed reading your comment, Connie..charming love story of your grandparents. Many thanks for your insights.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/20/2018 3:54:00 PM

vijay, how forlorn are your vivid words that i felt this scene deeply... a gem of a piece.. huggs

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/20/2018 5:00:00 PM

Appreciate the kind feedback..many thanks, nette.

Joseph May

Date: 7/20/2018 11:41:00 AM

A poignant write Vijay..Well written

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/20/2018 4:59:00 PM

Thank you Joseph.

Elaine George

Date: 7/20/2018 1:03:00 AM

Deep and profound, Vijay. Elaine4jm

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/20/2018 7:05:00 AM

Thank you Elaine.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 7/19/2018 7:50:00 PM

Excellent poem with a sad story to tell, Vijay! Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/20/2018 7:04:00 AM

Thank you Janice..appreciate the kind feedback.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 7/19/2018 2:47:00 PM

Hello Vijay Pandit,for this personin the poem it does sound like life that was chiseled still burns. have a nice day my friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 7/19/2018 5:27:00 PM

Your welcome my friend.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/19/2018 2:57:00 PM

Thank for the visit and your insights Darlene..many thanks for the kind feedback.

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/19/2018 1:12:00 PM

Superbly written Vijay. How life can be filled with desires, things incomplete, regrets, missed love, loneliness, and all kinds of things. You have done so well with this ! :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/19/2018 2:56:00 PM

Your insights are on the mark, Heidi..life sometimes is filled with all of the above..many thanks for your support and kind words.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/19/2018 12:45:00 PM

- So sad when the "flame burns out", life is too short - Heartbreaking beautiful, Vijay - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/19/2018 2:54:00 PM

Thank you Anne-Lise. Appreciate your thoughtful comments, as always.

Lyric Man

Date: 7/19/2018 9:56:00 AM

Vijay.. you take us on that lonely journey. Out of love's arms and away from hope's dawn. This is a moving masterpiece of sorrow. A man so lost and blinded in false pursuit that he only realizes in old age.. can even remember her once wanton eyes. Only the thousands of steps in darkness he took look for the better that never came. This is the best poem of the morning!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/19/2018 2:53:00 PM

A pleasure to read your insights LM..many thanks for your lovely comments.

Silent One

Date: 7/19/2018 9:38:00 AM

Somethings are just not meant to be.. a sad poem about loss and having to move on and forget...

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/19/2018 2:52:00 PM

Yes..so true..many thanks Silent One.

Mike Gentile

Date: 7/19/2018 8:51:00 AM

A very sad portrait of how lie can be so difficult. So very well expressed, Vijay !!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/19/2018 2:52:00 PM

Thank you Mike--appreciate your kind feedback as always.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/19/2018 7:32:00 AM

Wisdom may come with age to many but not to all and when it comes we realize the magnitude of our mistakes and the prize we have to pay for all the things we have done wrong, without any complains! Profound and beautiful writing my friend, Vijay!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 7/19/2018 2:51:00 PM

Always love to read your comments and insights my friend..many many thanks, Demetrios.